for Criminal Minds:The White Case(on hold)6/6 c9 Guest 1
Things are getting good and a few questions. Like who help Garcia and Aogiri are involve?
Things are getting good and a few questions. Like who help Garcia and Aogiri are involve?
12/11/2020 c1 IheLam
I find the premise really interesting, this is quite a rare -almost inexistant- crossover. The beginning- the introduction to the situation and the crossover- is standard and well done. The point i feel need the most improvement is without a doubt the langage. As is it is some part of the chapter are hard to understand, or doesn't make sense. I feel the story would be a lot more enjoyable if you reworked some of the langage (grammar, tense, orthograph) or if you found a beta willing to help you with it.
I find the premise really interesting, this is quite a rare -almost inexistant- crossover. The beginning- the introduction to the situation and the crossover- is standard and well done. The point i feel need the most improvement is without a doubt the langage. As is it is some part of the chapter are hard to understand, or doesn't make sense. I feel the story would be a lot more enjoyable if you reworked some of the langage (grammar, tense, orthograph) or if you found a beta willing to help you with it.
11/8/2017 c9 Guest
Please update
Please update
212/26/2016 c7 Rayman
Weird.
Weird.
7/31/2016 c1 Kirstendonia
Good idea. Please try rereading your work I wasn't able to make it past this chapter due to the number of spelling and grammar mistakes. Not to mention the number of sentences that simply don't make sense. Try using grammarly or a beta reader.
Good idea. Please try rereading your work I wasn't able to make it past this chapter due to the number of spelling and grammar mistakes. Not to mention the number of sentences that simply don't make sense. Try using grammarly or a beta reader.
3/15/2016 c1 Mimistar395
So, I was really excited when I saw a Tokyo Ghoul fanfic. But I don't think that I will be able to finish it, there are just too many mistakes and words that are where they are supposed to be. It would probably be best if you could go back through your story and fix any problems.
So, I was really excited when I saw a Tokyo Ghoul fanfic. But I don't think that I will be able to finish it, there are just too many mistakes and words that are where they are supposed to be. It would probably be best if you could go back through your story and fix any problems.