for Its not over yet9/14/2018 c9 
141Invader Johnny
Indeed, Freddie made quite a powerful impact on Sam's life and one she's very happy about on a personal level.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
141Invader JohnnyIndeed, Freddie made quite a powerful impact on Sam's life and one she's very happy about on a personal level.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
8/17/2015 c8 174Nature9000
What to say here? I enjoyed it. The story is good for someone starting out. It could use some improvement. This chapter was good, although I felt it was hard to connect with the characters on an emotional level. I couldn't feel them, so I couldn't sympathize. Like I've said before, you have a great start, so stick with it, learn and grow, and improve
174Nature9000What to say here? I enjoyed it. The story is good for someone starting out. It could use some improvement. This chapter was good, although I felt it was hard to connect with the characters on an emotional level. I couldn't feel them, so I couldn't sympathize. Like I've said before, you have a great start, so stick with it, learn and grow, and improve
8/17/2015 c7 Nature9000
I do read the author notes, and a tip, if you don't feel confident with a chapter, don't put it up until you've proofread and feel comfortable with it.
Now I have to look back because I feel I've missed the part about a funeral. Pete is mentioned but there should be more buildup I feel.
Still you're doing a great job
I do read the author notes, and a tip, if you don't feel confident with a chapter, don't put it up until you've proofread and feel comfortable with it.
Now I have to look back because I feel I've missed the part about a funeral. Pete is mentioned but there should be more buildup I feel.
Still you're doing a great job
8/17/2015 c6 Nature9000
Well that was startling. It seemed almost random though, we hadn't been introduced to that man just yet.
If I'm honest, I think this story needs a lot of work, but I don't want to discourage you in any way! It's a great story so far, and you've got a great deal of potential. You've caught my interest, and that is hard to do. On to the next chapter
Well that was startling. It seemed almost random though, we hadn't been introduced to that man just yet.
If I'm honest, I think this story needs a lot of work, but I don't want to discourage you in any way! It's a great story so far, and you've got a great deal of potential. You've caught my interest, and that is hard to do. On to the next chapter
8/17/2015 c5 Nature9000
Hmm Carly doesn't seem a huge factor just yet as your summary implies. This was a good chapter, keep it up
Hmm Carly doesn't seem a huge factor just yet as your summary implies. This was a good chapter, keep it up
8/17/2015 c4 Nature9000
Okay, a bit sudden, but expected. You still have some errors here and there, but you have a good setup going on. I didn't think she'd kiss him at the end
Okay, a bit sudden, but expected. You still have some errors here and there, but you have a good setup going on. I didn't think she'd kiss him at the end
8/17/2015 c3 Nature9000
Okay good seeing Freddie's thoughts on the matter. It feels a little lacking though. Looking forward to the next chapter
Okay good seeing Freddie's thoughts on the matter. It feels a little lacking though. Looking forward to the next chapter
8/17/2015 c2 Nature9000
A tad short, but still a good chapter. Similar to the meeting in BSC...you might read that story just in case...anyway I like this so far. It's great to see new writers stepping in. Keep going
A tad short, but still a good chapter. Similar to the meeting in BSC...you might read that story just in case...anyway I like this so far. It's great to see new writers stepping in. Keep going
8/17/2015 c1 Nature9000
Hmm, it looks very good. I wrote a story with this same concept way back in 2008, "before she came", but it's a common plot piece so don't worry, I'm just saying. Though if someone does ask-which I doubt-you may want to correct them.
I saw a few things that you could work to correct, but you're a new writer and I will not critique new authors unless asked. I'm curious to see where this goes, so keep up the good work
Hmm, it looks very good. I wrote a story with this same concept way back in 2008, "before she came", but it's a common plot piece so don't worry, I'm just saying. Though if someone does ask-which I doubt-you may want to correct them.
I saw a few things that you could work to correct, but you're a new writer and I will not critique new authors unless asked. I'm curious to see where this goes, so keep up the good work
7/15/2015 c8 meanlaudit
OH GOD! THAT WAS A CLIFF HANGER. But anyways, I just started reading your fic and Omy Holy Pickles, It's absolutely AMAZING! I would really appreciate if you can update as soon as you can. Have a good day.
OH GOD! THAT WAS A CLIFF HANGER. But anyways, I just started reading your fic and Omy Holy Pickles, It's absolutely AMAZING! I would really appreciate if you can update as soon as you can. Have a good day.
7/2/2015 c1 Guest
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6/15/2015 c7 Invader Johnny
Indeed, Sam shouldn't have to change herself.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
Indeed, Sam shouldn't have to change herself.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
5/30/2015 c6 Invader Johnny
One word... Ouch.
Sam really has no one to blame this time.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
One word... Ouch.
Sam really has no one to blame this time.
Invader Johnny Signing Off.
5/19/2015 c5 Invader Johnny
Well, gotta give Freddie points for determination in getting Sam back.
Invader Johnny Signing Off,
Well, gotta give Freddie points for determination in getting Sam back.
Invader Johnny Signing Off,