for Wings of the Leaf5/30/2020 c4 
5BeeeTeee
The Uchiha massacre doesn’t happen until several years into the academy so sasuke’s attitude here doesn’t really make sense.
5BeeeTeeeThe Uchiha massacre doesn’t happen until several years into the academy so sasuke’s attitude here doesn’t really make sense.
12/8/2016 c11 Saberwolf155
I love the plot of the story it's making me want to read the story more and more. So I can't wait until the story continues.
I love the plot of the story it's making me want to read the story more and more. So I can't wait until the story continues.
11/1/2016 c11 20psychopath556
Great chapter, love seeing the uchiha get put in his place, short chapter but good overall
20psychopath556Great chapter, love seeing the uchiha get put in his place, short chapter but good overall
9/16/2016 c10 tom
please make more
please make more
8/21/2016 c10 psychopath556
Hmmm, interesting to say the least. I've just spent the better part of the last 3 hours Blitz reading the chapters, and I'm liking the overall feel of the fiction
The OC is interesting and his blood limit is one of the best I've seen, it seems similar to the chakra chains Kushina was able to create in a way, when I first read the title I thought he'd have actual angel wings all the time, but having them made out of chakra and then solidifying is a nice touch. the Taijutsu style that Sefia uses is also interesting though I'm having some slight trouble picturing his stance.
The chapter where he was kidnapped and had his wings ripped off was a good idea if a little rough, makes him feel more real than anything and curbs off his OP feeling somewhat at that point, though if I remember how the wounds were shaped from that chapter, you said they were "two palm-size wounds on his back", while that gives an idea of their size I'm curious as to just how large his wings are compared to him, the wounds would be more narrowed and longer like cat's eye slits, and you might want to include chakra burns seeing as they were made out of chakra as well which would explain the increased healing time required.
The only problem I have overall is the problem I have with all fictions that start off with young OC's that require carers, they get a mother figure, in this case, Yugao, while that is not necessarily a bad thing, but in my opinion it takes away from the OC, while they help them to become stronger they also control them in a way such as when Yugao forbid Sefia to use his mother's Jutsu unless it was a serious situation, as much as I like her who the f**k is she to tell him when he can and cannot use his clan jutsu, I understand she is concerned for his safety, but she should explain the risks and ask him not to use it unless it was totally necessary not completely forbid him and then have him ask her for permission to use it when he wants to, that's putting him on a leash and collar, something that irritates me greatly
Now as for the harem from what I'm getting here you've got him crushing on Anko and Tenten, both good choices, I like both of them, but we've yet to see any of these feelings reciprocated, sure Anko has shown some interest in him and Tenten has gone completely gaga over his wings and weapons, but that's about the height of it, and I can understand that they're only 12 so relations and such wont really be for a while yet until the Shippuden part, cause lets face it as it is now there will be no lemons or sexual content of any kind given their age, that was the main reason I changed the academy ages in my fiction so things can be sped up with the harem, and on that note, I was slightly let down when you didn't do anything with Ino in the academy, I could have seen her going gaga over his wings at their beauty and ask him if she could touch them later, that could have been something there, a Fem Haku would also work well if you're in need of more girls, and I think I saw something about Tsume in the meetings not sure what's going on there but perhaps she can set him up with Hana later on, other than that I'm not really sure who else to recommend at this point for the harem, that's the one thing about OC naruto fictions all the girls are taken or would be better for naruto, at most a 3-5 girl harem is the max for those fictions, or at least that's what I've found in the planning stage of my other naruto fiction
Anyway great fiction, definitely adding it to my watch list and I look forward to more chapters
Hmmm, interesting to say the least. I've just spent the better part of the last 3 hours Blitz reading the chapters, and I'm liking the overall feel of the fiction
The OC is interesting and his blood limit is one of the best I've seen, it seems similar to the chakra chains Kushina was able to create in a way, when I first read the title I thought he'd have actual angel wings all the time, but having them made out of chakra and then solidifying is a nice touch. the Taijutsu style that Sefia uses is also interesting though I'm having some slight trouble picturing his stance.
The chapter where he was kidnapped and had his wings ripped off was a good idea if a little rough, makes him feel more real than anything and curbs off his OP feeling somewhat at that point, though if I remember how the wounds were shaped from that chapter, you said they were "two palm-size wounds on his back", while that gives an idea of their size I'm curious as to just how large his wings are compared to him, the wounds would be more narrowed and longer like cat's eye slits, and you might want to include chakra burns seeing as they were made out of chakra as well which would explain the increased healing time required.
The only problem I have overall is the problem I have with all fictions that start off with young OC's that require carers, they get a mother figure, in this case, Yugao, while that is not necessarily a bad thing, but in my opinion it takes away from the OC, while they help them to become stronger they also control them in a way such as when Yugao forbid Sefia to use his mother's Jutsu unless it was a serious situation, as much as I like her who the f**k is she to tell him when he can and cannot use his clan jutsu, I understand she is concerned for his safety, but she should explain the risks and ask him not to use it unless it was totally necessary not completely forbid him and then have him ask her for permission to use it when he wants to, that's putting him on a leash and collar, something that irritates me greatly
Now as for the harem from what I'm getting here you've got him crushing on Anko and Tenten, both good choices, I like both of them, but we've yet to see any of these feelings reciprocated, sure Anko has shown some interest in him and Tenten has gone completely gaga over his wings and weapons, but that's about the height of it, and I can understand that they're only 12 so relations and such wont really be for a while yet until the Shippuden part, cause lets face it as it is now there will be no lemons or sexual content of any kind given their age, that was the main reason I changed the academy ages in my fiction so things can be sped up with the harem, and on that note, I was slightly let down when you didn't do anything with Ino in the academy, I could have seen her going gaga over his wings at their beauty and ask him if she could touch them later, that could have been something there, a Fem Haku would also work well if you're in need of more girls, and I think I saw something about Tsume in the meetings not sure what's going on there but perhaps she can set him up with Hana later on, other than that I'm not really sure who else to recommend at this point for the harem, that's the one thing about OC naruto fictions all the girls are taken or would be better for naruto, at most a 3-5 girl harem is the max for those fictions, or at least that's what I've found in the planning stage of my other naruto fiction
Anyway great fiction, definitely adding it to my watch list and I look forward to more chapters
5/9/2016 c1 6NiteKiD
Good start to the story, it has potential and looks as if it'll have a long lifespan.
The one thing I thought was cool was the outline at the top; I myself am an author (as you know) and am already thinking of new story ideas. Your OC idea with the pairings are similiar to mine. I was like 'oh, this is scary but cool at the same time'.
though my OC will be of physical teenage stature but an old style/time mentality.
but anyway, good work. I'd love to read the rest, but I have work in the morning and yeah. will read it when I have time v can't wait!
6NiteKiDGood start to the story, it has potential and looks as if it'll have a long lifespan.
The one thing I thought was cool was the outline at the top; I myself am an author (as you know) and am already thinking of new story ideas. Your OC idea with the pairings are similiar to mine. I was like 'oh, this is scary but cool at the same time'.
though my OC will be of physical teenage stature but an old style/time mentality.
but anyway, good work. I'd love to read the rest, but I have work in the morning and yeah. will read it when I have time v can't wait!
4/23/2016 c1 9Dragon1990
So far I like it but the color of the hair is bothering me. I can't quite put my finger on it.
9Dragon1990So far I like it but the color of the hair is bothering me. I can't quite put my finger on it.
4/18/2016 c4 arckane
I highly doubt sasuke could use the fireball jutsu at 8 he wouldn't have enough chakra
I highly doubt sasuke could use the fireball jutsu at 8 he wouldn't have enough chakra
4/14/2016 c10 KAGECHI
THIS VERY GOOD KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
THIS VERY GOOD KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK
3/23/2016 c10 angel11xpr
Only one problem. Its so damn slow. You wont last if you keep going so much into detail on the arcs of naruto canon.
Only one problem. Its so damn slow. You wont last if you keep going so much into detail on the arcs of naruto canon.