
8/2/2015 c2
1IansInsane
I'm having a hard time deciding weather toy soldier or this is better...
Either way they are very good...

I'm having a hard time deciding weather toy soldier or this is better...
Either way they are very good...
7/29/2015 c2 SoaringEagle13
Actually, Ikari is Yui's maiden name. Gendo adopted it when they married.
Actually, Ikari is Yui's maiden name. Gendo adopted it when they married.
7/26/2015 c2
9melkun
Another tip, Ikari was Yui's maiden name and Gendo adopted it when they married. His name was Gendo Rokobungi (or something similar). (this and the dna appeared in the anime, i'm not making up stuff, and i'm only doing trivia so don't be upset) Your story is great!

Another tip, Ikari was Yui's maiden name and Gendo adopted it when they married. His name was Gendo Rokobungi (or something similar). (this and the dna appeared in the anime, i'm not making up stuff, and i'm only doing trivia so don't be upset) Your story is great!
7/26/2015 c1 melkun
I don't know if you had it in mind while you write this, but angels and human DNA are almost identical (I think in 98%), fact discover by dr. Akagi after analysing Shamshel.
Great work!
I don't know if you had it in mind while you write this, but angels and human DNA are almost identical (I think in 98%), fact discover by dr. Akagi after analysing Shamshel.
Great work!
7/10/2015 c3
3Grinja
All I can say is, I am really, really glad Shinji didn't blurt out everything in that little scene with Chifuyu, Ichika, and Houki. I would've immediately dropped the story if you did something so unrealistic. I hope the relationships build for some time before he tells them.
My other concern. The flashback at the very beginning. Jumping between 3rd and 1st person is rather jarring. I'd recommend avoiding it, because it doesn't look or read like the rest of the story.
I enjoyed this update, and I hope for an epic trouncing. My bet is Shinji is going to be incredibly disappointed.

All I can say is, I am really, really glad Shinji didn't blurt out everything in that little scene with Chifuyu, Ichika, and Houki. I would've immediately dropped the story if you did something so unrealistic. I hope the relationships build for some time before he tells them.
My other concern. The flashback at the very beginning. Jumping between 3rd and 1st person is rather jarring. I'd recommend avoiding it, because it doesn't look or read like the rest of the story.
I enjoyed this update, and I hope for an epic trouncing. My bet is Shinji is going to be incredibly disappointed.