
6/5/2015 c2
15Heir of the void
Also a great chapter. We're starting to see the vanguard of... Something, definitely, though I'm not quite sure yet. I love the way you're handling Shinji; it really reminds me of Rand Al'Thor in the last two Wheel of Time books after his epiphany on the Dragonmount, which actually has a lot of parallels to what happened here.
BETA/Sounding offer still stands, I'd still be glad to help, and I still eagerly await more.

Also a great chapter. We're starting to see the vanguard of... Something, definitely, though I'm not quite sure yet. I love the way you're handling Shinji; it really reminds me of Rand Al'Thor in the last two Wheel of Time books after his epiphany on the Dragonmount, which actually has a lot of parallels to what happened here.
BETA/Sounding offer still stands, I'd still be glad to help, and I still eagerly await more.
6/5/2015 c1 Heir of the void
Well, this was a great start. I think you balanced Shinji well; bringing him out of the Shadow of the Valley without changing who he is or making him a Stu. I like the plot so far, and look forward to reading the next chapter after I finish this.
I did notice two or few SPaG errors, and a few places where the Syntax felt a bit off. You're doing a great job so far, but if you want me to Beta Read for and/or be a sounding board for you, I'd glad to help.
Well, this was a great start. I think you balanced Shinji well; bringing him out of the Shadow of the Valley without changing who he is or making him a Stu. I like the plot so far, and look forward to reading the next chapter after I finish this.
I did notice two or few SPaG errors, and a few places where the Syntax felt a bit off. You're doing a great job so far, but if you want me to Beta Read for and/or be a sounding board for you, I'd glad to help.
6/1/2015 c2
5Exiled Soul Nomad
Yeah, I wondered about the side effects of linking your nerve system to something that is constantly damaged and is completely different from yourself. It's a wonder that their bodies feels like its theirs after some point. I mean, they spent so much time linking to the Evas that I'm surprised their weren't any issues with seemingly out of body experiences due to feeling as though they didn't belong in their own flesh.

Yeah, I wondered about the side effects of linking your nerve system to something that is constantly damaged and is completely different from yourself. It's a wonder that their bodies feels like its theirs after some point. I mean, they spent so much time linking to the Evas that I'm surprised their weren't any issues with seemingly out of body experiences due to feeling as though they didn't belong in their own flesh.
5/28/2015 c2 Guest
Wow! It is very interesting!
Wow! It is very interesting!
5/29/2015 c2 Telron
LOL great chapter and i look forward to the fight next chapter and the scare Cecilia gets
LOL great chapter and i look forward to the fight next chapter and the scare Cecilia gets
5/29/2015 c2
23SkyRig
...She's gonna get fucking wrecked. XD Me thinks it's time to introduce one of the most terrifying mechas in anime history.

...She's gonna get fucking wrecked. XD Me thinks it's time to introduce one of the most terrifying mechas in anime history.
5/29/2015 c2 DragonBersek
You have made an error. Ikari is the maiden name of Yui. The swap of the name is for Gendo. His name before having married Yui was Rokubungi.
You have made an error. Ikari is the maiden name of Yui. The swap of the name is for Gendo. His name before having married Yui was Rokubungi.
5/29/2015 c2 cra0007
Not much too say about this chapter other then I really like it, I also like the fact you moved him in with Chifuyu (wiggles eyebrows suggestively) and showed how much Tabane cares for him.
Not much too say about this chapter other then I really like it, I also like the fact you moved him in with Chifuyu (wiggles eyebrows suggestively) and showed how much Tabane cares for him.
5/29/2015 c2
1DJexe
I'd actually say you got plenty things happening with this first chapter.
-A summary of Shinji's test with his IS.
-Shown us that while Shinji has been doing alright in this new place, he still has issues and is a little broken inside.
-An introduction of Shinji's first day at the Academy.
-Showed where Shinji will staying with.
-Given us a situation with Cecelia and Shinji that culminated in IS fight in a week.
We also have plenty to look forward to.
-Shinji's interactions with Chifuyu when bunking.
-Shinji's attitude when dealing with things in school and the like.
-The meeting between Shinji and Houki.
-The confrontation between Shinji and Cecelia.
-The girls that will be in Shinji's harem.
All in all, this chapter was fun reading and I'm looking forward to the next one.

I'd actually say you got plenty things happening with this first chapter.
-A summary of Shinji's test with his IS.
-Shown us that while Shinji has been doing alright in this new place, he still has issues and is a little broken inside.
-An introduction of Shinji's first day at the Academy.
-Showed where Shinji will staying with.
-Given us a situation with Cecelia and Shinji that culminated in IS fight in a week.
We also have plenty to look forward to.
-Shinji's interactions with Chifuyu when bunking.
-Shinji's attitude when dealing with things in school and the like.
-The meeting between Shinji and Houki.
-The confrontation between Shinji and Cecelia.
-The girls that will be in Shinji's harem.
All in all, this chapter was fun reading and I'm looking forward to the next one.
5/29/2015 c2
3Grinja
Good for you in having Shinji not act like a wimp. Now I hope he trashes her in this farce of a duel.

Good for you in having Shinji not act like a wimp. Now I hope he trashes her in this farce of a duel.
5/25/2015 c1 Guest
Harem
Harem
5/27/2015 c1
23SkyRig
YES! YES YES YES! Finally, someone does this crossover, and it RIGHT! Update soon! Please, I beg of you!

YES! YES YES YES! Finally, someone does this crossover, and it RIGHT! Update soon! Please, I beg of you!
5/26/2015 c1 skyh1gh
I would love a Madoka x Shinji pairing, since he definitely will take up the attention of Phantom Task :P
I would love a Madoka x Shinji pairing, since he definitely will take up the attention of Phantom Task :P