for Come Undone7/18/2016 c24 
2Sunflower Fran
Whoa ... what a turnaround by Carlisle!
Watch out for Brady, Edward.
Update soon!
2Sunflower FranWhoa ... what a turnaround by Carlisle!
Watch out for Brady, Edward.
Update soon!
7/14/2016 c23 1jansails
Bella's a bit of a hothead, too.
Jumping to conclusions is right.
Edward, let her go, Bella has allowed ugly rumors to be spread about you- she is NOT worth it.
Let the b*tch go, Bella's every small minded judgmental person you & your Dad left behind to start over in Forks. Unfortunately, Bella has ruined that for you & your Dad now.
Let Bella go, she went TOO far.
jansails /jan2
1jansailsBella's a bit of a hothead, too.
Jumping to conclusions is right.
Edward, let her go, Bella has allowed ugly rumors to be spread about you- she is NOT worth it.
Let the b*tch go, Bella's every small minded judgmental person you & your Dad left behind to start over in Forks. Unfortunately, Bella has ruined that for you & your Dad now.
Let Bella go, she went TOO far.
jansails /jan2
7/14/2016 c23 Jillybeans122
I dont get why Bella took it wrong, and wouldn't let him. Explain. Thats a super bitch move. So disappointed in her.
I dont get why Bella took it wrong, and wouldn't let him. Explain. Thats a super bitch move. So disappointed in her.
7/14/2016 c23 Judyblue95
Hi there! Sorry your muse hasn't been around lately.. When you posted this chapter a few days ago, I needed to re-read the story cuz I couldn't remember details. I'm so glad I did. I have a much better idea of the flow of the story now and hope you post again soon. Bella is one messed up girl! She needs to get help dealing with what her step-father did cuz it's clear it is affecting her life in a bad way. I'm kind of in awe of Edward as he's holding himself together pretty well despite the clusterfuck of things between Alice, her mother, and his father. Hope to hear more soon!
Hi there! Sorry your muse hasn't been around lately.. When you posted this chapter a few days ago, I needed to re-read the story cuz I couldn't remember details. I'm so glad I did. I have a much better idea of the flow of the story now and hope you post again soon. Bella is one messed up girl! She needs to get help dealing with what her step-father did cuz it's clear it is affecting her life in a bad way. I'm kind of in awe of Edward as he's holding himself together pretty well despite the clusterfuck of things between Alice, her mother, and his father. Hope to hear more soon!
7/13/2016 c23 TwistStix
I'm disappointed in Bella that was mean. Good to see a chapter from you tho :)
I'm disappointed in Bella that was mean. Good to see a chapter from you tho :)
7/11/2016 c23 Tuti
What an ugly personality Bella has... and Edward could've explained better, he does sound like a sick f***...
I hope he doesn't forgive her any time soon and just moves away from that whole Bella and Brady bunch! I really hate bullies
Update soon xxx
What an ugly personality Bella has... and Edward could've explained better, he does sound like a sick f***...
I hope he doesn't forgive her any time soon and just moves away from that whole Bella and Brady bunch! I really hate bullies
Update soon xxx
7/13/2016 c23 LaPumuckl
That went even worse than I'd feared last chapter, especially since I wouldn't have taken Bella as a telling girl like that - hurt feelings or not
That went even worse than I'd feared last chapter, especially since I wouldn't have taken Bella as a telling girl like that - hurt feelings or not
7/12/2016 c23 DataByteDL-FangirlinGranma
Wow, why would she do that to him? I mean I understand her hurt, but to cause him such humiliation and now it seems like Brady is setting up an alibi or something. I think Edward is about to get beat up badly and Brady wants to make sure he doesn't get blamed. Or something will happen to Bella and Edward will get blamed! UGH! ShadyBrady has to go!
So glad you are coming out of your "word drought". I was so thirsty for your brilliant words! *Gulps thirstily and burps satisfied*
Love you, my Gemma (and my Choc too!)! {GIANT GRANMA HUGS AND SMOOCHES!}
- FangirlinGranma Dee
Wow, why would she do that to him? I mean I understand her hurt, but to cause him such humiliation and now it seems like Brady is setting up an alibi or something. I think Edward is about to get beat up badly and Brady wants to make sure he doesn't get blamed. Or something will happen to Bella and Edward will get blamed! UGH! ShadyBrady has to go!
So glad you are coming out of your "word drought". I was so thirsty for your brilliant words! *Gulps thirstily and burps satisfied*
Love you, my Gemma (and my Choc too!)! {GIANT GRANMA HUGS AND SMOOCHES!}
- FangirlinGranma Dee
7/12/2016 c22 DataByteDL-FangirlinGranma
Ohhhh, the plot really thickened up right there...like a holiday turkey gravy!
Can't wait for more, my sweet Gemma! Sorry it took so long to read. I'm playing catch-up with all my WIPs due to a really real RL! I'm thrilled to be reading this brilliant story again. Hope you are well. Love you! {GIANT GRANMA HUGS AND SMOOCHES!} Send my love to my Choc!
- FangirlinGranma Dee
Ohhhh, the plot really thickened up right there...like a holiday turkey gravy!
Can't wait for more, my sweet Gemma! Sorry it took so long to read. I'm playing catch-up with all my WIPs due to a really real RL! I'm thrilled to be reading this brilliant story again. Hope you are well. Love you! {GIANT GRANMA HUGS AND SMOOCHES!} Send my love to my Choc!
- FangirlinGranma Dee