for Over in a Flash of Red6/2/2015 c3 marquis.shax
you're half right the Hyuga are from Hamura (I believe this was brought to "canon" via The Last). The Uzumaki on the other hand are descendants of the sage since they're not only cousins of the Senju but were actually a member of the Senju clan at one point before one or more members broke away for unknown reasons. Also Shisui or anyone else making that many clones wow you're really stretching things away from Canon as I doubt that even an Uzumaki (excluding Naruto of course) could make more than 20 clones at a time without suffering chakra exhaustion. I still disagree with the whole loveless marriage between Hashirama and Mito you should amend it to having other kids before being married
you're half right the Hyuga are from Hamura (I believe this was brought to "canon" via The Last). The Uzumaki on the other hand are descendants of the sage since they're not only cousins of the Senju but were actually a member of the Senju clan at one point before one or more members broke away for unknown reasons. Also Shisui or anyone else making that many clones wow you're really stretching things away from Canon as I doubt that even an Uzumaki (excluding Naruto of course) could make more than 20 clones at a time without suffering chakra exhaustion. I still disagree with the whole loveless marriage between Hashirama and Mito you should amend it to having other kids before being married
5/29/2015 c2 Dark
I'm very interested in the plot and overall the fanfic itself and I would like to see how this is going to develop, so please make more chapters.
I'm very interested in the plot and overall the fanfic itself and I would like to see how this is going to develop, so please make more chapters.
5/29/2015 c1 Dark
I really like the plot so far and this fanfic is very interesting, so keep it up and make more chapters please.
I really like the plot so far and this fanfic is very interesting, so keep it up and make more chapters please.
5/30/2015 c2 marquis.shax
wow seriously why are people so insistent that the Sharingan and the Rinnegan give you improved Chakra control? That's the dumbest shit in fanfic history. If they gave you such great control Sasgay wouldn't have had any problems with any of the jutsus he was working on with his gay pedophile lover orochimaru. The Sharingan ONLY gives you a hax to LEARN jutsu easier by copying the shit out of them that doesn't mean you don't have to practice them and learn the proper control
wow seriously why are people so insistent that the Sharingan and the Rinnegan give you improved Chakra control? That's the dumbest shit in fanfic history. If they gave you such great control Sasgay wouldn't have had any problems with any of the jutsus he was working on with his gay pedophile lover orochimaru. The Sharingan ONLY gives you a hax to LEARN jutsu easier by copying the shit out of them that doesn't mean you don't have to practice them and learn the proper control
5/30/2015 c1 marquis.shax
I hate when people do this bullshit about how the marriage between Mito and Hashirama was loveless I mean wtf seriously if it was loveless she wouldn't have sealed the Kyubi inside of herself to not only save Hashirama but the village he loved so much as well nor would she tell Kushina the way to deal with the kyubi is to fill yourself with love. It's also stupid to say that Madara had a kid he was a heartless prick he was probably the same as Sasuke in that he didn't give a damn about women an was more interested in guys
I hate when people do this bullshit about how the marriage between Mito and Hashirama was loveless I mean wtf seriously if it was loveless she wouldn't have sealed the Kyubi inside of herself to not only save Hashirama but the village he loved so much as well nor would she tell Kushina the way to deal with the kyubi is to fill yourself with love. It's also stupid to say that Madara had a kid he was a heartless prick he was probably the same as Sasuke in that he didn't give a damn about women an was more interested in guys
5/28/2015 c1 grandepic
i think the explanation about naruto's relation with minato was too is impossible for there to be only one person outside yamanaka clan to have blond are many civilians who might have blond hair and died in the kyuubi attack.i dont think that any person with even a few working brain cells will call someone with the same hair colour as him his father.
i think the explanation about naruto's relation with minato was too is impossible for there to be only one person outside yamanaka clan to have blond are many civilians who might have blond hair and died in the kyuubi attack.i dont think that any person with even a few working brain cells will call someone with the same hair colour as him his father.
5/29/2015 c2 frankieu
like the improvements
hope naruto make's a friend or two soon perhaps anko he's gone need it with the mindset
wonder what the reaction of the old man are gone be when he see's the letters
like the improvements
hope naruto make's a friend or two soon perhaps anko he's gone need it with the mindset
wonder what the reaction of the old man are gone be when he see's the letters
5/27/2015 c1 frankieu
nice first chapter will be fun to see where it leads to
hope there are gone be alot of school day chapter often see people racing to the wave mission or something but the start is also fun to read
nice first chapter will be fun to see where it leads to
hope there are gone be alot of school day chapter often see people racing to the wave mission or something but the start is also fun to read
5/27/2015 c1 
1insanemaelstorm
I understand that it may seem necessary to have a mob for nqruto to gain sharringan but its not true. You can show that a shinobi (who are superstitious) had a very bad day like losing his girlfriend then getting his team killed and then being demoted for it and then seeing naruto walking around happily like he is taunting him would result in him doing things he won't do normally like attacking naruto. Sorry for the bad explanation but I did the same in my story so if you want you can read it to get a better idea.
1insanemaelstormI understand that it may seem necessary to have a mob for nqruto to gain sharringan but its not true. You can show that a shinobi (who are superstitious) had a very bad day like losing his girlfriend then getting his team killed and then being demoted for it and then seeing naruto walking around happily like he is taunting him would result in him doing things he won't do normally like attacking naruto. Sorry for the bad explanation but I did the same in my story so if you want you can read it to get a better idea.