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5/29/2015 c2 frankieu
like the improvements
hope naruto make's a friend or two soon perhaps anko he's gone need it with the mindset
wonder what the reaction of the old man are gone be when he see's the letters
5/27/2015 c1 3Albinounicorn
well... This is definitely an improvement from what I can tell...
5/27/2015 c1 BANKAIZEN
nice
5/27/2015 c1 Anisoka280
a great start can't wait fo the next chapter
5/27/2015 c1 5narmulti
Good story keep it up and UPDATE SOON
5/27/2015 c1 animelove22
wouldn't time be quicker in his mindscape and not slower
5/27/2015 c1 frankieu
nice first chapter will be fun to see where it leads to
hope there are gone be alot of school day chapter often see people racing to the wave mission or something but the start is also fun to read
5/27/2015 c1 1insanemaelstorm
I understand that it may seem necessary to have a mob for nqruto to gain sharringan but its not true. You can show that a shinobi (who are superstitious) had a very bad day like losing his girlfriend then getting his team killed and then being demoted for it and then seeing naruto walking around happily like he is taunting him would result in him doing things he won't do normally like attacking naruto. Sorry for the bad explanation but I did the same in my story so if you want you can read it to get a better idea.
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