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7/30 c2 Demet
Good story
11/28/2020 c9 Guest
Ya left me hanging brah.
Its 2020 and I'm still waiting.
If you're still alive.
I want to read more of this awesome fanfic.
12/18/2018 c2 Eliot
Just a small criticism, because I notice it's fairly consistent in your writing: We generally put the action with the dialogue for the same character, because it's easier to understand who we're talking about that way. It still works your way, but it requires a bit of rereading to make sure, which breaks up the flow of the story.

An example of correct form as I described would be:
"I really don't know what you're talking about." A puzzled look flashed across his face.
"I'm sure you do, in your heart." She smiled slyly.

As you have done a few times, you can also use the character's name instead of he/she to make it more obvious who you're talking about, but it also helps a lot to keep them together anyway.

Other than that, I'm really enjoying this story, although not entirely sure it represents me or Marie accurately. I'm a lot more awkward than that.
10/13/2018 c9 Guest
Continue please
8/31/2017 c1 Guest
I want you update,please.
2/17/2017 c3 Guest
I enjoy your stories, keep up the good work.
8/3/2016 c9 Jaden Seales
This fanfiction rules. Can you add a DOA tournament chapter?
3/11/2016 c9 james
Oh god please make more of this I'm in love with the story so far. you have a talent for this sort of thing i hopr you continue
11/8/2015 c9 Zoey101fan3600
loved it...and damn Ayane caused some drama!
11/8/2015 c4 Zoey101fan3600
i loved it...so cute:)
11/8/2015 c3 Zoey101fan3600
Bad girl Honoka...stay away from Rig...he'll use you for his evil experiments
10/20/2015 c9 Guest
Finish it please!
9/15/2015 c8 1miku.loverz
Update! I want an update!
7/23/2015 c7 Guest
Well written i love where this is going
7/22/2015 c7 Guest
Its almost august how are you in school?
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