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2/1/2018 c4 King Popoto
liked it...up until you did the usual until you did the whole 'Hinata has been cheating on him with Sasuke' shtick that was really dumb and not for the reason you think...ok maybe a bit, but still it was not needed especially after the last chapter hell you could of just made it so she was reincarnated into someone else but had memorise of her past life...but then again this fic is dead in the water so meh i'm done.
1/18/2018 c5 Guest
You've already declared hi mate as a definite harem member to do either of those defeats the purpose of her even being in it in the first place. I would make her more then just a background character. But yes going with it being a misunderstanding is, while a touch on the cliche side, is the best option.
11/5/2017 c5 Guest
shit fic don't read
10/9/2017 c3 Han-Daewi
brr... futa/shemale...
sorry but this man is going to get brain operation and thank you !
9/15/2017 c3 Rongis
Humorous but a little shallow.
7/3/2017 c5 Guest
So you had to do the cheating route for Hinata? Why couldn't you just make her a minor character and let her "move on" or you k ow not show up after the first two cameos. There's really no reason for that shit, and you probably should've just had it where she decided to be reincarnated else and just turn that into a pairing for Naruto. (Example: she reincarnated into Nico Robin from one piece)
7/3/2017 c3 Guest
If you don't like Akeno but added Rias then you're kinda of hypocrite. This is a fabrication you can change her personality, he'll in canon after Issei accepted her fallen angel half, and helped her sort of fix her relationship with her dad she lost parts of her "mask". She's still into s&m but she mellowed out.
5/27/2017 c5 Guest
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4/20/2017 c5 2Lil Author Vert
You motherfucker-
11/15/2016 c5 fenixrojo36
Excelente
11/12/2016 c5 Guest
If you gonna write a story actually finish it you price of shit you just wasting everybodies time
9/29/2016 c5 G
Hey I remember "The Contract" it was nice I guess but it's been awhile since I last read it.
9/30/2016 c5 Pancake Fury
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8/24/2016 c2 Guest
This sounds completely stupid.. I don't think this will ever end up on even a child's book in a library. It's that bad.
8/7/2016 c5 Stephen6089
make hinata minor chacater
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