for Father's Day2/15/2018 c1 
10Rainbow Magic Girl
I love this story! It's so heartwarming, and you captured the characters brilliantly!
10Rainbow Magic GirlI love this story! It's so heartwarming, and you captured the characters brilliantly!
7/17/2016 c1 29Pineapple Angel 14
Awwww ok in the show I REALLY dislike River, but in this story you made me like her- that's a hard thing to do lol
Great work, good story.
29Pineapple Angel 14Awwww ok in the show I REALLY dislike River, but in this story you made me like her- that's a hard thing to do lol
Great work, good story.
4/24/2016 c1 Guest
I personally think ya use of language was awesome cause it meant I could read it in mal's voice :D this story is absolutely shiny and ya should be real proud!
KRH
I personally think ya use of language was awesome cause it meant I could read it in mal's voice :D this story is absolutely shiny and ya should be real proud!
KRH
8/24/2015 c1 14QueenOfHearts3
d'aww! :D thats adorable! and so very fitting for everybody here, particularly Mal and River. perhaps a touch overdone on Mal's "dialect," as mentioned, but not all that distracting, and some level of it is always needed in his speech. the day Malcolm Reynolds is grammatically correct is the day he's OOC in a big way- almost to the level of thinking the Alliance is all shiny and full of happy puppies on rainbows. yay for River now thinking of Mal as "Daddy." a huge "take that" to her bio-dad, who so didn't deserve the title. yeah, that's right, Mr. "My Social Stature Is More Important Than My Children" Tam- you've been chucked aside for a Browncoat smuggler who has more nobility (along with compassion, honor, general SPINE, and dozens more attractive attributes) than all the money/power you covet put together. so... yeah, in your face and up yours sideways, pal!
ahem. anyway... wicked cute story! my first Firefly fic, and it sets the bar high ;D
14QueenOfHearts3d'aww! :D thats adorable! and so very fitting for everybody here, particularly Mal and River. perhaps a touch overdone on Mal's "dialect," as mentioned, but not all that distracting, and some level of it is always needed in his speech. the day Malcolm Reynolds is grammatically correct is the day he's OOC in a big way- almost to the level of thinking the Alliance is all shiny and full of happy puppies on rainbows. yay for River now thinking of Mal as "Daddy." a huge "take that" to her bio-dad, who so didn't deserve the title. yeah, that's right, Mr. "My Social Stature Is More Important Than My Children" Tam- you've been chucked aside for a Browncoat smuggler who has more nobility (along with compassion, honor, general SPINE, and dozens more attractive attributes) than all the money/power you covet put together. so... yeah, in your face and up yours sideways, pal!
ahem. anyway... wicked cute story! my first Firefly fic, and it sets the bar high ;D
7/8/2015 c1 Guest
Best Firefly story I've read in a long time! You're smart and write the charactors right! Which is becoming increasingly less common since those tripe comics came out that are supposed to take place after the movie, Leaves on the Wind, do us all a favor and don't bother reading them because people who do write ccrap fics. You do a great job writing in the charactors' voices, you don't overdue the dialect for Mal. Now if you write a multichapter fic you might consider toning down the dialect just a tad, but in a oneshot having a reasonable lot of dialect is fine, it doesn't become weighty or tiresome and doesn't detract from what's being said, so your dialect portioning was perfect for this story. Sweet story. Mal said very Mal-like things. If I were River's caregiver I'd definitely focus on the fact that River gets to be an auntie! Which means she's a very important person for this little one. I love how Mal points out that Simon can love the different people in his life in different ways and none of that detracts love from each person, there's enough to go 'round! And I like how he emphasizes to River that she and Simon are _both important, they both do important things that are unique things, Simon saves them through doctoring and River saves them in her own ways and that is wonderful and good even though its hard sometimes. If I were her caregiver I'd point out that we're all looking out for each other on this crew and we all have important parts to play and we all do what we're good at and its all important! Sure they look after River, but sometimes River saves them and its all important. I like this story can you tell? :)
Riona
Best Firefly story I've read in a long time! You're smart and write the charactors right! Which is becoming increasingly less common since those tripe comics came out that are supposed to take place after the movie, Leaves on the Wind, do us all a favor and don't bother reading them because people who do write ccrap fics. You do a great job writing in the charactors' voices, you don't overdue the dialect for Mal. Now if you write a multichapter fic you might consider toning down the dialect just a tad, but in a oneshot having a reasonable lot of dialect is fine, it doesn't become weighty or tiresome and doesn't detract from what's being said, so your dialect portioning was perfect for this story. Sweet story. Mal said very Mal-like things. If I were River's caregiver I'd definitely focus on the fact that River gets to be an auntie! Which means she's a very important person for this little one. I love how Mal points out that Simon can love the different people in his life in different ways and none of that detracts love from each person, there's enough to go 'round! And I like how he emphasizes to River that she and Simon are _both important, they both do important things that are unique things, Simon saves them through doctoring and River saves them in her own ways and that is wonderful and good even though its hard sometimes. If I were her caregiver I'd point out that we're all looking out for each other on this crew and we all have important parts to play and we all do what we're good at and its all important! Sure they look after River, but sometimes River saves them and its all important. I like this story can you tell? :)
Riona
7/6/2015 c1 47Thescarredman
'Sappy' - Hm. It's certainly very sentimental, but the series and, even more, the movie, went over the top emotionally; that was part of Firefly's charm, that it could be comic or melodramatic and yet believable. I like this short, and I'll be reading the other one soon.
As for Mal's dialect: It can be overdone, certainly, but I think you did a fair job of keeping it in check, applying it no more than necessary to keep him in character. I always liked the way he tried to use ten-dollar words instead of nickel ones, sometimes giving us a brand-new definition that seemed oddly fitting. You shouldn't feel badly about emulating that.
Again, nice work, and thank you. Write us some more Firefly.
47Thescarredman'Sappy' - Hm. It's certainly very sentimental, but the series and, even more, the movie, went over the top emotionally; that was part of Firefly's charm, that it could be comic or melodramatic and yet believable. I like this short, and I'll be reading the other one soon.
As for Mal's dialect: It can be overdone, certainly, but I think you did a fair job of keeping it in check, applying it no more than necessary to keep him in character. I always liked the way he tried to use ten-dollar words instead of nickel ones, sometimes giving us a brand-new definition that seemed oddly fitting. You shouldn't feel badly about emulating that.
Again, nice work, and thank you. Write us some more Firefly.
7/5/2015 c1 David
So many stories that say "Mal, River," or "Jayne, River" are just creepy. I mean, she's a mentally traumatized 17-year old girl, for crying out loud! But I was pleasantly surprised by this one. I like how it ended, because that's how I picture Mal's love for River- the daughter he never had. Great story!.
So many stories that say "Mal, River," or "Jayne, River" are just creepy. I mean, she's a mentally traumatized 17-year old girl, for crying out loud! But I was pleasantly surprised by this one. I like how it ended, because that's how I picture Mal's love for River- the daughter he never had. Great story!.