for Son of the 4th2/17/2020 c3 
1ghostboy1225
your writing style is very brief consider expanding your current chapters and revising them a little bit more and the quality could improve drastically.
also i noticed a spelling mistake with dessert instead of desert. one of these is a sweet treat the other is a description hueco mundo.
as for a resurrection name "brilla en la oscuridad" could be a release command it means shine in darkness. misterio is spanish for mystery if i am not mistaken. though its been a year since I last took spanish classes.
I don't particularly care if you make a character for me in the story. i am more interested in helping you improve your fic.
1ghostboy1225your writing style is very brief consider expanding your current chapters and revising them a little bit more and the quality could improve drastically.
also i noticed a spelling mistake with dessert instead of desert. one of these is a sweet treat the other is a description hueco mundo.
as for a resurrection name "brilla en la oscuridad" could be a release command it means shine in darkness. misterio is spanish for mystery if i am not mistaken. though its been a year since I last took spanish classes.
I don't particularly care if you make a character for me in the story. i am more interested in helping you improve your fic.
5/25/2016 c2 Mehh
Bulllshieeet...
Bulllshieeet...
5/25/2016 c2 Kraang Subprime
Hey idiot, don't you know anything? Dipper and Mabel are twins which means they'd both be Mr. Grumpy's kids.
Hey idiot, don't you know anything? Dipper and Mabel are twins which means they'd both be Mr. Grumpy's kids.
4/21/2016 c1 1Natileroxs
A good concept, but the story feels a little rushed. You need to build up the story and work at it while keeping it interesting. I hope you decide to continue writing this.
1NatileroxsA good concept, but the story feels a little rushed. You need to build up the story and work at it while keeping it interesting. I hope you decide to continue writing this.
4/14/2016 c1 AmeKuma003
Wow! I love it it's interesting to see dipper as ulquiorra's son. I hope you update it soon.
Wow! I love it it's interesting to see dipper as ulquiorra's son. I hope you update it soon.
3/27/2016 c1 I.lieunderastone
Whut?
Whut?
10/8/2015 c1 I
Dia
Dia
7/16/2015 c1 Guest
That is a strange one.
That is a strange one.