for Time Hunter11/15/2023 c4 Guest
this story takes on an innovative form, something which, unfortunately isn’t seen much in this fandom, as all readers tend to copy the same trope. your ideas are quite intriguing and brings a whole lot of opportunities. I’m excited to read more, and hopefully see more authors adopting some of these ideas into their stories for some diversification of the range of fan fictions,
As you know, obviously due to the linguistic barrier, you did struggle a bit, however, despite that I’d say that around 85% of it is well-written. I’d recommend it if you could go on a more descriptive route, which explains Percy’s thoughts, it kind of seems like the way he thinks is abbreviated. I’d also recommend running it through a grammar-checker, which will also rectify spelling errors. It’s pretty quick too.
It’s not to say that I really approve the directions you take the characters, (Thalia) but it’s your story, All the best!
this story takes on an innovative form, something which, unfortunately isn’t seen much in this fandom, as all readers tend to copy the same trope. your ideas are quite intriguing and brings a whole lot of opportunities. I’m excited to read more, and hopefully see more authors adopting some of these ideas into their stories for some diversification of the range of fan fictions,
As you know, obviously due to the linguistic barrier, you did struggle a bit, however, despite that I’d say that around 85% of it is well-written. I’d recommend it if you could go on a more descriptive route, which explains Percy’s thoughts, it kind of seems like the way he thinks is abbreviated. I’d also recommend running it through a grammar-checker, which will also rectify spelling errors. It’s pretty quick too.
It’s not to say that I really approve the directions you take the characters, (Thalia) but it’s your story, All the best!
12/27/2022 c10 
2PerseusKyogre09
OK. Wow. The story was absolutely fantastic and well written. Maybe a bit too confusing in the end. But the ideas, those were next level dude. It's crazy how you managed to think up the ideas of East and west civilization and definition of chaos. Excellent story, and definitely a recommendable one. But maybe fix some things to not make it really confusing?
2PerseusKyogre09OK. Wow. The story was absolutely fantastic and well written. Maybe a bit too confusing in the end. But the ideas, those were next level dude. It's crazy how you managed to think up the ideas of East and west civilization and definition of chaos. Excellent story, and definitely a recommendable one. But maybe fix some things to not make it really confusing?
3/17/2021 c1 Nate
This is starting off sick as hell, you said you weren't a english speaker (or english is your new language to learn) but this story is amazing starting off and I've been looking for stories like this type of writing. Amazing work
This is starting off sick as hell, you said you weren't a english speaker (or english is your new language to learn) but this story is amazing starting off and I've been looking for stories like this type of writing. Amazing work
10/14/2019 c10 DawnScarlet19610
I don't even know what to say. I'm so confused. I definitely didn't like this story, though I can appreciate the work you put into it.
I don't even know what to say. I'm so confused. I definitely didn't like this story, though I can appreciate the work you put into it.
9/17/2019 c10 Dumpster
A bit confusing but good
A bit confusing but good
9/7/2018 c10 Guest
Mmccc
Mmccc
12/12/2017 c3 Guest
Did you mean ‘Rofl’?
It means ‘Rolling on floor laughing’
Did you mean ‘Rofl’?
It means ‘Rolling on floor laughing’
9/17/2016 c1 Umbra Erebus
holy shit that was cool and confusing but could u clear it all up a bit like put all this into simple terms its too much for my 12 year old brain
holy shit that was cool and confusing but could u clear it all up a bit like put all this into simple terms its too much for my 12 year old brain
5/16/2016 c2 ArgentumArm
The Cross-Roads have three choices, not four. What about Calypso as one of the 'Helpers'?
The Cross-Roads have three choices, not four. What about Calypso as one of the 'Helpers'?
10/25/2015 c1 Guest
Beautiful.
Beautiful.
8/28/2015 c10 Dexis S
I love your morbid writing style, but it was hard to follow the story at times. In conclusion CONTINUE WRITING!
I love your morbid writing style, but it was hard to follow the story at times. In conclusion CONTINUE WRITING!
8/18/2015 c3 Guest
OH MY GODS! I forgot all about Ares's curse! That's probably why percy dropped his sword when he faced Tartarus!
OH MY GODS! I forgot all about Ares's curse! That's probably why percy dropped his sword when he faced Tartarus!