for The Pokeninja, Adventures of the Maelstrom pokemon2/14 c2 Seud
Hopefully someone better at writing can take this story and write it to be better, the author has a cool idea and seems to have a good grasp of what he wants to happen but his way of telling the story he wants is bland.
It’s too rushed. Feels like something I’d write in the middle of class to entertain myself, meaning I’d rush to the entertaining parts of my story so I won’t be bored.
I’ve actually done that and have recently found one and it. The word “bland” does not do it enough justice.
Hopefully someone better at writing can take this story and write it to be better, the author has a cool idea and seems to have a good grasp of what he wants to happen but his way of telling the story he wants is bland.
It’s too rushed. Feels like something I’d write in the middle of class to entertain myself, meaning I’d rush to the entertaining parts of my story so I won’t be bored.
I’ve actually done that and have recently found one and it. The word “bland” does not do it enough justice.
2/12 c3 Guest
Character are too much forward. And how did Naruto accepted everything that quick
Character are too much forward. And how did Naruto accepted everything that quick
2/6 c33 Guest
emolga will be in the harem
emolga will be in the harem
1/23 c33 Jason Matias Charo Opazo
a tip, if you plan to make it evolve that is similar to the style of zoroark, and that instead of changing shape to use the other types, that the tattoos change color according to the type that is using
a tip, if you plan to make it evolve that is similar to the style of zoroark, and that instead of changing shape to use the other types, that the tattoos change color according to the type that is using
1/22 c5 
1Guardianrider2021
hey I have an idea for a chapter you should try a chapter where a friend from naruto's village comes to unova
1Guardianrider2021hey I have an idea for a chapter you should try a chapter where a friend from naruto's village comes to unova
1/17 c33 Guardianrider2021
I really like this story I hope will be able to update this story more often
I really like this story I hope will be able to update this story more often
1/9 c1 jmendoza7173214
Hey love your chapter and I also agree that naruto should use Bijudoma at somepoint it doesn't have to be atomic or anything.
just a more powerful shadow ball it can be atomic if he needs it to be.
i also thought that with his jitsu knowledge he can discover or invent a new ability like bending alowing him to manipulate his current element like he was using jitsu.
pm me what you think ty keep updating
Hey love your chapter and I also agree that naruto should use Bijudoma at somepoint it doesn't have to be atomic or anything.
just a more powerful shadow ball it can be atomic if he needs it to be.
i also thought that with his jitsu knowledge he can discover or invent a new ability like bending alowing him to manipulate his current element like he was using jitsu.
pm me what you think ty keep updating
1/8 c33 7drezz master
Naruto could create the nine rasengan points, making rasengans with his tails, in addition Ash could used some of his old pokemons too, and I would like to see naruto doing a bijudama
7drezz masterNaruto could create the nine rasengan points, making rasengans with his tails, in addition Ash could used some of his old pokemons too, and I would like to see naruto doing a bijudama
1/8 c33 Guest
Hi, same Guest reviewer who talked about the shorter harem list on Jan. 5, and Naruto fusing his Forms/Modes together for Dual-Type Modes on Chapter 32.
Thank you for:
Updating the harem list on this chapter.
And updating the first chapter of this story with Naruto's Forms/Modes, the number of future Forms left, and even adding the harem list there as well.
Sorry for making you do all that work though, it was just really difficult for me to remember everything whenever you update this story, I hope you understand.
Keep up the splendid work on this story, and I hope you're safe out there.
Hi, same Guest reviewer who talked about the shorter harem list on Jan. 5, and Naruto fusing his Forms/Modes together for Dual-Type Modes on Chapter 32.
Thank you for:
Updating the harem list on this chapter.
And updating the first chapter of this story with Naruto's Forms/Modes, the number of future Forms left, and even adding the harem list there as well.
Sorry for making you do all that work though, it was just really difficult for me to remember everything whenever you update this story, I hope you understand.
Keep up the splendid work on this story, and I hope you're safe out there.
1/7 c3 ItsTruNorth
You lost me when you made Naruto Ash's pokemon. It would have been better if he didn't belong to anyone at all.
You lost me when you made Naruto Ash's pokemon. It would have been better if he didn't belong to anyone at all.
1/7 c28 14Rubius
Nice chapter, you forgot the natura grass form in the form list but still nice work.
14RubiusNice chapter, you forgot the natura grass form in the form list but still nice work.
1/5 c33 Guest
Great chapter as usual. Are you planning to update The Pokemon Wildcard next that's also a good read but that's just me. Here is an update on the harem and what pokemon Ash should catch from past and future regions besides canon...
Pokemon Ash should capture:
Kanto: Ponyta, Vulpix, Growlithe, Scyther, Venonat, Ekans, Meowth, Nidoran (male and female), Horsea, Seel, Shellder, Magikarp, Hitmonchan, Cubone, Ryhorn, Onyx, Kabuto, Aerodactyl, Magnemite, Abra, Drowzee, Poliwag
Johto: Sneasel, Teddiursa, Skarmory, Misdreavus, Sentret, Stantler, Snubbull, Miltank, Girafarig, Spinarak, Yanma, Elekid, Magby, Wooper, Mareep, Larvitar, Houndour, Murkrow, Espeon
Hoenn: Bagon, Mudkip, Torchic, Beldum, Anorith, Tropius, Duskull, Electrike, Poochyena, Aron, Sableye, Mawile, Trapinch, Numel, Spheal
Sinnoh: Budew, Cranidos, Shieldon, Spiritomb, Skorupi, Stunky, Glameow, Shinx, Hippopotas, Bronzor, Glaceon, Snover, Lopunny
Unova: Deino, Gothita, Solosis, Golett, Klink, Blitzle, Purrloin, Lillipup, Sawk, Bouffalant, Deerling, Cryoganal, Druddigon, Axew (shiny), Pansear, Litwick, Karrablast, Shelmet, Venipede, Rufflet
Kalos: Espurr (female), Litleo (male and female), Honedge, Phantump, Tyrunt, Amaura, Helioptile, Clauncher, Skrelp, Bergmite
Aloa: Aloan Vulpix, Aloan Sandshrew, Jangmo-o, Dhelmise, Grubbin, Pikipeck, Aloan Geodude, Mudbray, Crabrawler, Dewpider, Wimpod
Galar: Grookey, Scorbunny, Sobble, Yamper, Toxel, Galarian Zigzagoon, Galarian Ponyta, Galarian Yamask, Galarian Darumaka, Stonjourner, Chewtle, Nickit, Impidimp, Hattena, Silicobra, Applin, Cufant, Rookiedee, Wooloo, Dreepy, Duraludon, Kubfu, Galarian Slowpoke, Rolycoly, Sizzlepede
Legendary: Moltres, Ho-oh, Lugia, Raikou, Entei, Suicune, Mewtwo, Latios, Zacian, Zamazenta, Solgaleo, Lunala, Rayquaza, Giratina, Azelf, Regigigas, Cresselia, Zekron, Cobalion, Terrakion, Virizon, Kyurem, Reshiram, Xernas, Galarian Articuno, Galarian Zapdos, Galarian Moltres, Calyrex
Mythical: Darkrai, Volcanion, Shaymin, Deoxys, Hoopa
Ultra Beast: Pheramosa, Buzzwole, Stakataka, Kartana, Xurkitree
Naruto's Harem:
Gothitelle, Pheramosa, Lopunny, Weavile, Mismagius, Shaymin, Froslass, Glaceon, Espeon, Meowstic, Pyroar, Hatterene, Galarian Rapidash, Rapidash, Ash's Bayleaf, Lana's Primarina, Mallow's Tsareena, Zacian, Aurorus, Girafarig, Lapras, Liepard, Glameow, Mawile, Furret
These are my suggestions but that's just me. I hope you pair Ash up with either Dawn, Serena, Anabel, or Angie but again that's just me. Keep up the great work.
Great chapter as usual. Are you planning to update The Pokemon Wildcard next that's also a good read but that's just me. Here is an update on the harem and what pokemon Ash should catch from past and future regions besides canon...
Pokemon Ash should capture:
Kanto: Ponyta, Vulpix, Growlithe, Scyther, Venonat, Ekans, Meowth, Nidoran (male and female), Horsea, Seel, Shellder, Magikarp, Hitmonchan, Cubone, Ryhorn, Onyx, Kabuto, Aerodactyl, Magnemite, Abra, Drowzee, Poliwag
Johto: Sneasel, Teddiursa, Skarmory, Misdreavus, Sentret, Stantler, Snubbull, Miltank, Girafarig, Spinarak, Yanma, Elekid, Magby, Wooper, Mareep, Larvitar, Houndour, Murkrow, Espeon
Hoenn: Bagon, Mudkip, Torchic, Beldum, Anorith, Tropius, Duskull, Electrike, Poochyena, Aron, Sableye, Mawile, Trapinch, Numel, Spheal
Sinnoh: Budew, Cranidos, Shieldon, Spiritomb, Skorupi, Stunky, Glameow, Shinx, Hippopotas, Bronzor, Glaceon, Snover, Lopunny
Unova: Deino, Gothita, Solosis, Golett, Klink, Blitzle, Purrloin, Lillipup, Sawk, Bouffalant, Deerling, Cryoganal, Druddigon, Axew (shiny), Pansear, Litwick, Karrablast, Shelmet, Venipede, Rufflet
Kalos: Espurr (female), Litleo (male and female), Honedge, Phantump, Tyrunt, Amaura, Helioptile, Clauncher, Skrelp, Bergmite
Aloa: Aloan Vulpix, Aloan Sandshrew, Jangmo-o, Dhelmise, Grubbin, Pikipeck, Aloan Geodude, Mudbray, Crabrawler, Dewpider, Wimpod
Galar: Grookey, Scorbunny, Sobble, Yamper, Toxel, Galarian Zigzagoon, Galarian Ponyta, Galarian Yamask, Galarian Darumaka, Stonjourner, Chewtle, Nickit, Impidimp, Hattena, Silicobra, Applin, Cufant, Rookiedee, Wooloo, Dreepy, Duraludon, Kubfu, Galarian Slowpoke, Rolycoly, Sizzlepede
Legendary: Moltres, Ho-oh, Lugia, Raikou, Entei, Suicune, Mewtwo, Latios, Zacian, Zamazenta, Solgaleo, Lunala, Rayquaza, Giratina, Azelf, Regigigas, Cresselia, Zekron, Cobalion, Terrakion, Virizon, Kyurem, Reshiram, Xernas, Galarian Articuno, Galarian Zapdos, Galarian Moltres, Calyrex
Mythical: Darkrai, Volcanion, Shaymin, Deoxys, Hoopa
Ultra Beast: Pheramosa, Buzzwole, Stakataka, Kartana, Xurkitree
Naruto's Harem:
Gothitelle, Pheramosa, Lopunny, Weavile, Mismagius, Shaymin, Froslass, Glaceon, Espeon, Meowstic, Pyroar, Hatterene, Galarian Rapidash, Rapidash, Ash's Bayleaf, Lana's Primarina, Mallow's Tsareena, Zacian, Aurorus, Girafarig, Lapras, Liepard, Glameow, Mawile, Furret
These are my suggestions but that's just me. I hope you pair Ash up with either Dawn, Serena, Anabel, or Angie but again that's just me. Keep up the great work.
1/5 c33 djinn
great new chapter, good luck in future updates.
great new chapter, good luck in future updates.