for Fates Be Changed7/25/2015 c4 
13collegegirl2805
So far i love the story. As far as issues you need to watch out for run on sentences and you might want to try and be a bit more descriptive, not that i can really comment on that one, i can never properly describe thhe scenes of my own stories. If you want i can go over your previous chapters and edit a bit. Im bored, lol. One of the reasons i like your story so much is that there are very few grammatical errors, which is really impressive
13collegegirl2805So far i love the story. As far as issues you need to watch out for run on sentences and you might want to try and be a bit more descriptive, not that i can really comment on that one, i can never properly describe thhe scenes of my own stories. If you want i can go over your previous chapters and edit a bit. Im bored, lol. One of the reasons i like your story so much is that there are very few grammatical errors, which is really impressive
7/24/2015 c4 11LivininCorsets
I like the story so far, but the vernacular seems a bit old fashioned at times, to the point that it seems like it's in the Victorian era...I have never heard someone say "I shall return" except in old movies. Then again grammar is different all over. I'm in the U.S. And I have only lived in the south (virginia Georgia and now Hawaii... Which is neither north or south but hey it's pretty.)
11LivininCorsetsI like the story so far, but the vernacular seems a bit old fashioned at times, to the point that it seems like it's in the Victorian era...I have never heard someone say "I shall return" except in old movies. Then again grammar is different all over. I'm in the U.S. And I have only lived in the south (virginia Georgia and now Hawaii... Which is neither north or south but hey it's pretty.)
7/24/2015 c4 Orange3WhiteSkew
He should have paid more attention to what Vernon's attitude was implying. (Did he assume that there just weren't any pictures of Harry because the Dursleys weren't fond of him, or did he not notice there weren't any of Harry?)
He should have paid more attention to what Vernon's attitude was implying. (Did he assume that there just weren't any pictures of Harry because the Dursleys weren't fond of him, or did he not notice there weren't any of Harry?)
7/24/2015 c4 Guest
Update soon this is amazing!
Update soon this is amazing!
7/23/2015 c3 3ObsessedWithHPFanFic
Good story so far. I like the relationship that is building between Harry and Bruce. Thanks for sharing!
3ObsessedWithHPFanFicGood story so far. I like the relationship that is building between Harry and Bruce. Thanks for sharing!
7/23/2015 c3 Tolion
I love where you're going with this so far and I can't wait to see what you do with it; especially once either the first hp book gets introduced or the avengers timeline depending on which you plan to do first.
I love where you're going with this so far and I can't wait to see what you do with it; especially once either the first hp book gets introduced or the avengers timeline depending on which you plan to do first.
7/22/2015 c3 14calileane
Hello,
I liked the fact Bruce is trying all he can to control the other guy so he will not be a risk to Mateo. I will probably come to adore your story because:
1. I love when Harry escape from the Dursley's and find a new family
2. I adore crossovers and avengers/harry Potter is a must
I can't wait to see all Bruce will teach Mateo and how they will live the next few years. Although I'm a little worried Harry/Mateo will have to go back to England to go to Hogward as I prefer when there is a clean cut from England I actualy will follow your story as far as I can because your writting makes me want to read more. And when you find someone with words flowing so easily you can practically see a picture of what you read... well you can't stop reading
14calileaneHello,
I liked the fact Bruce is trying all he can to control the other guy so he will not be a risk to Mateo. I will probably come to adore your story because:
1. I love when Harry escape from the Dursley's and find a new family
2. I adore crossovers and avengers/harry Potter is a must
I can't wait to see all Bruce will teach Mateo and how they will live the next few years. Although I'm a little worried Harry/Mateo will have to go back to England to go to Hogward as I prefer when there is a clean cut from England I actualy will follow your story as far as I can because your writting makes me want to read more. And when you find someone with words flowing so easily you can practically see a picture of what you read... well you can't stop reading
7/22/2015 c3 4candinaru25
this is just so adorable. bruce is a great guy, with a little anger problem. lol
4candinaru25this is just so adorable. bruce is a great guy, with a little anger problem. lol