for Fates Be Changed7/25/2023 c51 maianarasauce
the loki part was kind of a dramatic shift and out of nowhere. still trying to connect everything in my brain. i rarely comment. love the story til that point. great writing, btw.
the loki part was kind of a dramatic shift and out of nowhere. still trying to connect everything in my brain. i rarely comment. love the story til that point. great writing, btw.
16/22/2023 c67 SunPho3n1x
This is such a phenomenal story! I love it every time I read it. Thank you for writing this!
This is such a phenomenal story! I love it every time I read it. Thank you for writing this!
6/16/2023 c69 Blue-Happens
overall, enjoyable story, bravo. not many have the endurance to write as much as you have either, so more points for gryffindor!
heavy editing on the last third or so is needed, not story changes, just continuity, cut some scenes from it. If the editing happens (which it's fine if it doesnt) this story is very well rounded off.
thanks for writing it, and good luck with your relatively future endeavors, should they happen
overall, enjoyable story, bravo. not many have the endurance to write as much as you have either, so more points for gryffindor!
heavy editing on the last third or so is needed, not story changes, just continuity, cut some scenes from it. If the editing happens (which it's fine if it doesnt) this story is very well rounded off.
thanks for writing it, and good luck with your relatively future endeavors, should they happen
6/16/2023 c64 Blue-Happens
why in the world do you keep posing riddles without giving their answer, its infuriating
you've done it 3 times now
at least put the answer in a postscript if for some reason you feel it's better to not have it answered in the scene.
I cannot imagine a lazier way of writing a riddle, than writing something randomly vague and not giving a solution!
if they worked around it, and couldn't answer themselves that'd be different, but keep having them go "ah ha! I found the answer!" then not actually sharing the solution is torture
why in the world do you keep posing riddles without giving their answer, its infuriating
you've done it 3 times now
at least put the answer in a postscript if for some reason you feel it's better to not have it answered in the scene.
I cannot imagine a lazier way of writing a riddle, than writing something randomly vague and not giving a solution!
if they worked around it, and couldn't answer themselves that'd be different, but keep having them go "ah ha! I found the answer!" then not actually sharing the solution is torture
6/16/2023 c60 Blue-Happens
how is flitwick going to 'send a memory' to Tony stark? the reader can assume you're talking about a pensieve, but you haven't brought it up in the story yet. none of these characters have interacted with a pensieve even once so far!
does Tony have one to view the memory? is flitwick aware on how to use it? none of that is out of the realm of possibility but you haven't TOLD us, its come out of literally nowhere, and you're treating it like old news.
I'm being a little overly critical but as I am binge reading this, the weird continuity mistakes are building up quickly, and annoying the piss out of me
how is flitwick going to 'send a memory' to Tony stark? the reader can assume you're talking about a pensieve, but you haven't brought it up in the story yet. none of these characters have interacted with a pensieve even once so far!
does Tony have one to view the memory? is flitwick aware on how to use it? none of that is out of the realm of possibility but you haven't TOLD us, its come out of literally nowhere, and you're treating it like old news.
I'm being a little overly critical but as I am binge reading this, the weird continuity mistakes are building up quickly, and annoying the piss out of me
6/16/2023 c59 Blue-Happens
did the author for this change 30~40 chapters in?
it might be my mood, but there is a distinct drop in consistency, paired with bizzar last act changes, it feels like a different, less experienced author
did the author for this change 30~40 chapters in?
it might be my mood, but there is a distinct drop in consistency, paired with bizzar last act changes, it feels like a different, less experienced author
6/16/2023 c57 Blue-Happens
no.
nuh uh
I will forgive choices I disagree with, I will forgive grammar, and to a point I will forgive a lack of logic.
but blatant, massive inconsistencies derived from plot relevant things? no.
more than once you have had a character say, or know something already, only for the next chapter to arrive and they are surprised by the thing they ALREADY KNEW
I dont mean to yell but wtf. it lurches me out of the story every single time, and is happening more often.
hope your day is going well.
no.
nuh uh
I will forgive choices I disagree with, I will forgive grammar, and to a point I will forgive a lack of logic.
but blatant, massive inconsistencies derived from plot relevant things? no.
more than once you have had a character say, or know something already, only for the next chapter to arrive and they are surprised by the thing they ALREADY KNEW
I dont mean to yell but wtf. it lurches me out of the story every single time, and is happening more often.
hope your day is going well.
6/16/2023 c54 Blue-Happens
I am a little mystified on the 3rd crossover property being temporarily added, seemed like a scooby doo movie with batman and the ninja turtles, not enough room to flesh it out
you seem to have handled it well, but if I was an editor for a novel I'd say kill your darlings, its gotta go
I am a little mystified on the 3rd crossover property being temporarily added, seemed like a scooby doo movie with batman and the ninja turtles, not enough room to flesh it out
you seem to have handled it well, but if I was an editor for a novel I'd say kill your darlings, its gotta go
6/16/2023 c46 Blue-Happens
"four stiff standers... ...wig-wag. What am I?"
you have the audacity to pose a riddle and not give us the answer?
13 in total, 2 sets of 4, 2 sets of 2, and 1
a crime?
stiff standers could be unalived people, dilly-danders and lookers could be onlookers to the crime, and two crookers could be the criminals
no idea wtf a wig-wag is
could be this chapter in question, describing the petrified people, with Ginny and Tom as the crooks, idk
What's the answer to the riddle?,
"four stiff standers... ...wig-wag. What am I?"
you have the audacity to pose a riddle and not give us the answer?
13 in total, 2 sets of 4, 2 sets of 2, and 1
a crime?
stiff standers could be unalived people, dilly-danders and lookers could be onlookers to the crime, and two crookers could be the criminals
no idea wtf a wig-wag is
could be this chapter in question, describing the petrified people, with Ginny and Tom as the crooks, idk
What's the answer to the riddle?,
6/16/2023 c45 Blue-Happens
I know it's an error, you probably decided to change it from being just hermione petrified to both her and Kevin being petrified, but when professor flitwick comes to Mateo and Neville, you still have Kevin talking there, and also allude to 'the three of them'
rather jarring to suddenly have kevin reacting to the news kevin was petrified
I know it's an error, you probably decided to change it from being just hermione petrified to both her and Kevin being petrified, but when professor flitwick comes to Mateo and Neville, you still have Kevin talking there, and also allude to 'the three of them'
rather jarring to suddenly have kevin reacting to the news kevin was petrified
6/12/2023 c20 mst3ktoo
Now you just have to worry about Ross working with whatever Black Ops company he goes and creates to capture Matteo in order to control Bruce. It will backfire on him as always but I don't think we've heard the last from Ross.
Now you just have to worry about Ross working with whatever Black Ops company he goes and creates to capture Matteo in order to control Bruce. It will backfire on him as always but I don't think we've heard the last from Ross.
6/12/2023 c18 mst3ktoo
I know Hulk and the Avengers are a great wonderful thing but they literally just met. Why are they now a family? They're just hasn't been enough time
I know Hulk and the Avengers are a great wonderful thing but they literally just met. Why are they now a family? They're just hasn't been enough time