for Naked Around You6/13/2007 c1 
3Crystal Serenity Yuy
HEY!
It needs 2 have a little more info in it. It's too short. I mean way 2 short. Just alittle bit more charater development.
3Crystal Serenity YuyHEY!
It needs 2 have a little more info in it. It's too short. I mean way 2 short. Just alittle bit more charater development.
3/9/2004 c1 1skyunicorn4257
ok. I like how you put the song together with the fic. It worked out well. I think you should always grammar check, not just spell check and read over it. Otherwise you end up having things like he in place of she, is instead of if ect. It happens to everyone, Me expecially being the terrible okie,redneck I am. But you're a really good writer and I hope to see more stories from you soon. wow long huh?
1skyunicorn4257ok. I like how you put the song together with the fic. It worked out well. I think you should always grammar check, not just spell check and read over it. Otherwise you end up having things like he in place of she, is instead of if ect. It happens to everyone, Me expecially being the terrible okie,redneck I am. But you're a really good writer and I hope to see more stories from you soon. wow long huh?
6/16/2003 c1 4Leelai Mouse
very good. You reviewed my story so i went to see if you had any. I love Heero/Usa fics. And Mamoru peeing his pants was funny.
4Leelai Mousevery good. You reviewed my story so i went to see if you had any. I love Heero/Usa fics. And Mamoru peeing his pants was funny.
2/16/2003 c1 Jade Starr
Tiffany,
It's me, Nicole.
I know it's you,
You stole my fanfiction!
Ask Meghan about what happened, cause I was pissed. It was almost the same thing. I explained it to her and she was like it's been done. She went to see who beat me to it, and it was you. For revenge, I'm thinking of a Relena Pink dress with bubblegum pink lipstick, blush and eyeshadow. I am truely evil.
Bwahahahahahaha!
Jade Starr
Tiffany,
It's me, Nicole.
I know it's you,
You stole my fanfiction!
Ask Meghan about what happened, cause I was pissed. It was almost the same thing. I explained it to her and she was like it's been done. She went to see who beat me to it, and it was you. For revenge, I'm thinking of a Relena Pink dress with bubblegum pink lipstick, blush and eyeshadow. I am truely evil.
Bwahahahahahaha!
Jade Starr
12/27/2002 c1 5Eartha
Hey, I really liked the idea and the song really fit well, but I think you could have expanded the story a little more. Um, when you wrote, "in the same uniform as them" I got this picture of heero and the guys in a skirt and sailor top. Um hilarious, but...wrong, so wrong. So keep on writing, I think you have a lot of potential.
5EarthaHey, I really liked the idea and the song really fit well, but I think you could have expanded the story a little more. Um, when you wrote, "in the same uniform as them" I got this picture of heero and the guys in a skirt and sailor top. Um hilarious, but...wrong, so wrong. So keep on writing, I think you have a lot of potential.
12/27/2002 c1 Evil Lollipops From Outerspace
hm...sounds a bit rushed, and you went too quick, but that's ok! You can maybe try to put more detail in the next chapter? There is going to be a next chapter *starts to panic*, RIGHT? 0.o
hm...sounds a bit rushed, and you went too quick, but that's ok! You can maybe try to put more detail in the next chapter? There is going to be a next chapter *starts to panic*, RIGHT? 0.o
12/27/2002 c1 supersonic
I really like this! Is relena going to be bashing in on their wedding? What? I wanna know! update more soon ^_~
I really like this! Is relena going to be bashing in on their wedding? What? I wanna know! update more soon ^_~
12/26/2002 c1 Lilaclight
Sounds like a summarised plot. But the idea is great. Maybe you can try to make it longer, using verses for the chapters. That way you can collect reviews and have a great fic.
Sounds like a summarised plot. But the idea is great. Maybe you can try to make it longer, using verses for the chapters. That way you can collect reviews and have a great fic.
12/26/2002 c1 Koneko
This is a pretty cute fic. It could use a bit more detail though. Everything seemed to happen so quickly. A major improvement would be a little elaboration on the characters emotions and the actions they take, you know? Just a suggestion.
This is a pretty cute fic. It could use a bit more detail though. Everything seemed to happen so quickly. A major improvement would be a little elaboration on the characters emotions and the actions they take, you know? Just a suggestion.
12/26/2002 c1 alexz
I love this song its one of my favorites of her cd. cute fic!
I love this song its one of my favorites of her cd. cute fic!
12/26/2002 c1 Guest
hi this is just a suggestion but if you ad more detail and think up alonger way of doing this this could be considered a storyu line skeleton. i even rekomend doing this but of corse it's all up to you.
if you want you can email me at
hi this is just a suggestion but if you ad more detail and think up alonger way of doing this this could be considered a storyu line skeleton. i even rekomend doing this but of corse it's all up to you.
if you want you can email me at