for Beyond Evolution9/14/2021 c20 thunderofdeath97
pelipper gets bodied by tyrantum, its almost as if you have no idea what you are even writing about at this point
pelipper gets bodied by tyrantum, its almost as if you have no idea what you are even writing about at this point
9/14/2021 c19 thunderofdeath97
once again lucas doesn't struggle and just one shots everything, dude seriously, this aint right
groudon and kyogre were the biggest point of R/S and ORAS, so them not being awakened is just dumb
spiritomb has no weaknesses either dude
once again lucas doesn't struggle and just one shots everything, dude seriously, this aint right
groudon and kyogre were the biggest point of R/S and ORAS, so them not being awakened is just dumb
spiritomb has no weaknesses either dude
9/14/2021 c17 thunderofdeath97
lucas' hoenn team is such ass, the only good mon he has is blaziken, pelipper and shiftry suck donkey dick
lucas' hoenn team is such ass, the only good mon he has is blaziken, pelipper and shiftry suck donkey dick
9/14/2021 c2 thunderofdeath97
the new exp share was good, but it was kind of busted to, thats actually the problem with the newer games, they were to easy for older and more experienced players
hell compare pokemon yellow or even platinum to ORAS, S/M or US/UM, or X/Y they are much much easier, tbh
the new exp share was good, but it was kind of busted to, thats actually the problem with the newer games, they were to easy for older and more experienced players
hell compare pokemon yellow or even platinum to ORAS, S/M or US/UM, or X/Y they are much much easier, tbh
9/14/2021 c1 thunderofdeath97
ho-oh and latias would be hot additions to lucas' growing group, actually any and all female legendaries would be awesome
ho-oh and latias would be hot additions to lucas' growing group, actually any and all female legendaries would be awesome
2/5/2019 c22 DevilGoblin99
Please make a sequel that takes place in Unova and another after that one in Kalos.
Please make a sequel that takes place in Unova and another after that one in Kalos.
2/5/2019 c18 DevilGoblin99
Wow. Looks like the distortion world is getting pretty full now that both Maxie and Archie are in there along with Eusine and Cyrus.
Wow. Looks like the distortion world is getting pretty full now that both Maxie and Archie are in there along with Eusine and Cyrus.
12/25/2018 c22 
19SisyphusWorker
Dang, this was an enjoyable read for a 3 year wait. Though this punctuation ticks me off, I still like the content of this 3-Part story.
By chance you can make another one about Alola or Unova?
19SisyphusWorkerDang, this was an enjoyable read for a 3 year wait. Though this punctuation ticks me off, I still like the content of this 3-Part story.
By chance you can make another one about Alola or Unova?
12/25/2018 c22 SisyphusWorker
Dang, this was an enjoyable read for a 3 year wait. Though this punctuation ticks me off, I still like the content of this 3-Part story.
By chance you can make another one about Alola or Unova?
Dang, this was an enjoyable read for a 3 year wait. Though this punctuation ticks me off, I still like the content of this 3-Part story.
By chance you can make another one about Alola or Unova?
3/3/2016 c1 3rylek196
You really, really need to learn how to punctuate dialogue correctly, man. I can barely get anything out of this story because the incorrectly punctuated dialogue makes it almost unreadable. Here's how you're writing it: "We got nothing better to do" he said [sic]. Here's how to do it properly: "We got nothing better to do," he said.
Notice the difference? There needs to be a punctuation mark AFTER the second set of quotation marks (be it an exclamation mark (!), question mark (?), or comma (,)) depending on the context. Nobody seems to have told you this, since this is a reoccurring problem across all your stories, so it's basically the blind leading the blind. Consider me the miracle surgery that gives you sight.
I really would go over what happens in the chapter, but I can't when all the characters sound like robots in my head. There's no emotion in the dialogue without proper punctuation, and everyone comes across like they're speaking in bland monotone. Hope this helps.
3rylek196You really, really need to learn how to punctuate dialogue correctly, man. I can barely get anything out of this story because the incorrectly punctuated dialogue makes it almost unreadable. Here's how you're writing it: "We got nothing better to do" he said [sic]. Here's how to do it properly: "We got nothing better to do," he said.
Notice the difference? There needs to be a punctuation mark AFTER the second set of quotation marks (be it an exclamation mark (!), question mark (?), or comma (,)) depending on the context. Nobody seems to have told you this, since this is a reoccurring problem across all your stories, so it's basically the blind leading the blind. Consider me the miracle surgery that gives you sight.
I really would go over what happens in the chapter, but I can't when all the characters sound like robots in my head. There's no emotion in the dialogue without proper punctuation, and everyone comes across like they're speaking in bland monotone. Hope this helps.