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12/11/2020 c4 chrinoc.S.W.A.Y
this was amazing
3/21/2017 c5 Foodislife1234
So adorable.. but a bit rushed
7/12/2016 c5 Guest
liar
11/29/2015 c4 4FlameDragonHime
I WANT MORE!
8/27/2015 c3 Guest
Great chapter but i thought lucy lived in apartment alone like it said in chapter 2
8/27/2015 c1 Guest
Too many POVs. There's no need to be putting that notice on every scene change.
8/28/2015 c3 orphanedaccounttt
Great story line but you really need to work on your POV. You can't have 8 people's point of view at the same time it muddle things up and makes it very confusing, try to stay with one point of view for a while and then switch, because switching it too often gets annoying. Other than that you're doing pretty good.
8/28/2015 c2 mariah.carmichael.3
I don't know if you're just note reading your reviews or just completely ignoring them but you really should stop with the whole point of view switching. The whole thing is unnecessary. Try reading other fan fics or even a book to see how povs should be done. Once you've done that go back and fix your chapters. Actually put somewhere effort into making your writing worth reading or else what is the point of writing in the first place.
8/27/2015 c3 3Foxxxy the Stripper
it's cute just organize it a bit a fix your spelling and you're golden pony boy!
8/27/2015 c3 AdorkableWitch1
I like the story but it's gets a little annoying with the multiple pov's. Like in this chapter where you did Levy/Lucy/Natsu/etc... That was hard to follow and I couldn't figure out who was talking at times and it gave me a little bit of a headache. Sorry. It would be easier if you stuck to one Pov at a time and when it's time for a new one you make it clear who's pic it really is. I still really like the story.
8/25/2015 c2 Thao
Isn't luce natsus fiancée? You maybe rethink about the povs because it was a little hard to follow the story but all in all I really like your story. Do your best. Thank you.
8/24/2015 c2 Mirai
Much better on controlling the changes in point of view this chapter! You still have room left to improve, but it's getting there. For example, the first "Gildarts POV" doesn't actually switch over to Gildarts, but stays in Lucy's perspective. It's kind of better that way! I'd take out both "Gildarts POV" in this chapter, just because Gildarts is no more important than Gray or one of the random girls right now. The fewer switches in Point of View there are, the easier it is for the reader to keep track of what's going on. Try to stick with the people that play an important part!

When your writing can tell us whose eyes we're looking through without outright saying "Person A's POV", you'll be another step closer to mastering this.

Thanks for the read! This is very cute, and I'd be happy to read more of it. It's really sweet that Lucy and Natsu have both been waiting to see each other again even after all this time. Isn't Natsu's fiancé Lucy? He mentions to himself that it's her right after he gets out of his car.
8/24/2015 c2 Guest
Oh please update! It rocks!
8/26/2015 c2 FairyTail1040
Plz continue writing
8/23/2015 c1 Guest
It was a very good start
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