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3/14/2017 c15 1AHealingRenaissance
Hehehehe! I love how they handled that situation :D And that they get to keep their dad :')
3/14/2017 c14 AHealingRenaissance
I love these new chapters! :D With a toddler, it took me a while to get caught up, but now I'm wanting more :D Love it!
3/14/2017 c14 6sweetsouthernsongbird
I kinda forgot about this story, so I'm glad you updated it. I really am enjoying the new take on their bond/mating.
7/21/2016 c9 jay7795
Truly enjoying the communication between all the couples. It is truly the first brick is building a soild relationship. Damn, they are getting married already? That is super fast. But I understand why they did it. To stop their parents from interferring. You have a few grammer and spelling issues. I suggest reread over the chapter before posting. Don't rush your chapters. I hope i am not out of line but i just wanted to help.
5/27/2016 c8 mrsvixter
great chapter
well done
5/27/2016 c8 jay7795
Love that Bella stood up for herself and Edward.

DAMN! Sam was on point and wise. He set Jake and Paul straight.

They are packing putting their needs and wants first and I am proud of Bella and Rose. I see these four growing as individual and a couple nicely.

Thank you for giving us 2 chapters!
5/27/2016 c7 jay7795
Allot of information. I really love the explanation Carlisle gave the couples, every long and detailed (never seen him talk so much). Also, loved that you did it in his POV, it also seem that communication will be key for them to get thru all this. Their bond seems very intense and powerful.

Omg! Rose and Bella will get to have kids. That is kick ass.
Really enjoyed this chapter!
Thank you for the update! Worth the wait
5/25/2016 c5 1Montara
'but what Carlisle did for us, is what makes him a Dad. Also, his venom runs thru my veins, sealing the bond deeper.' - loved his thinking!
5/25/2016 c4 Montara
Maybe they finally feel the need to look for their mates because someone higher is telling them their mates are finally on this Earth.
5/25/2016 c3 Montara
With Alice and Jasper's help, they now can stay in one place a lot more. I'm sure forging documents became so much more complicated with the new technology.
5/25/2016 c2 Montara
If Edward was changed as an adult, then he can function so much better and stand on his own, so I wonder if his feelings for Emmett were just of a brother or a father since he took care of him for a whole year?

I would love to read about their interaction and how Emmett grew in a house full of vampires, after all, accidents sure happened with Emmett scarping his knees or something like that.
5/25/2016 c1 Montara
Wow, what money, or the lack of them, can do!

I liked that Carlisle gave Edward a choice. I know it was too late for Esme since she was already too far gone, but I'm sure he would have let her choose.

And the baby survived! :) Poor the other little guy who actually died though :
4/8/2016 c1 33sahdah
So your premise for the story is very interesting. My biggest questions come from not seeing what made Carlisle fall in love with Esmee. What was their one interaction from 4 years ago that sealed it for him. Or was it recognizing his soul within her and vice versa. On a side note wasn't Esmee older than Carlisle?

Take your time to illustrate the story and draw those visuals for us.

There are many creative ways to bring up a flashback, using the brackets immediately takes the reader out of your story. Use a scene break and go on with your new paragraph: Start with him reminiscing: Edison had no remorse for the atrocity he had committed...
When the flash back ends simply use another scene break to go to your story. Competent readers will follow. That had such a big mind boggling moment at the end.

I might suggest you working the explanation of their abilities into the story line. If not then splitting that part into it's own separate chapter and then beginning the story fresh in it's own chapter.

Keep writing! The idea is fantastic. I want to know what kind of mess Edison was in that he thought killing his wife and selling his baby would solve?
3/8/2016 c6 jay7795
You've got a good story going. I like the way you introduced each family member. Would've liked to see more interaction between the Cullens before the Swan girls entered the pic. It feels a little rushed also. But over all its a interesting plot.
Look forward to see how this unfolds and where u take it
10/28/2015 c4 CSG
That was a good one. Just wondering though if you have any more or is that the end? Thanks.
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