for Harry Potter and the Shadow Legion1/10/2017 c34 ewf22
it is report, not rapport
it is report, not rapport
12/18/2016 c38 Kitten Arina
I am sorry but I have to ask sense when has Harry Potter ever had problems with heights he's the seeker on the quddich team and he dares to fly higher then any of the others it seems. I can understand him not being use to something but that hesitation and him being caught seemed to be out of fear a fear that he normally would never have noticed before.
I am sorry but I have to ask sense when has Harry Potter ever had problems with heights he's the seeker on the quddich team and he dares to fly higher then any of the others it seems. I can understand him not being use to something but that hesitation and him being caught seemed to be out of fear a fear that he normally would never have noticed before.
12/12/2016 c14 Guest
Where does the idea come from that the Hogwarts letters are sent on the eleventh birthday? Harry's letter was sent about a week before the end of July. Only because of the evasion of the Dursleys he got his letter at the end of July, which happens to be his birthday.
Where does the idea come from that the Hogwarts letters are sent on the eleventh birthday? Harry's letter was sent about a week before the end of July. Only because of the evasion of the Dursleys he got his letter at the end of July, which happens to be his birthday.
12/12/2016 c6 Guest
Dumbledore is not sorry for what he has done, he is sorry that he has been caught.
It takes a lot of delusion to convince himself that what he did is best for Harry. What he did is what he considers best for Dumbledore.
Dumbledore is not sorry for what he has done, he is sorry that he has been caught.
It takes a lot of delusion to convince himself that what he did is best for Harry. What he did is what he considers best for Dumbledore.
12/11/2016 c11 
3LordHadesinTartarus
Sorry, but the part about the Spetsnaz captain being tossed around like a ragdoll is completely ridiculous. Spetsnaz operatives are like all special forces highly skilled professional soldiers trained in hand-to-hand combat. Therefore Ivan would not have simply attempted to blindly charge and throw a punch. Furthermore, during this time period, the 1980s, the Soviet Union still existed and training conditions for spetsnaz were even more intense than other special forces - they were literally trained to be completely unresponsive to pain and to show no emotion, sort of like Snape with occlumency. I am really sorry about this review; that part just really bugged me.
3LordHadesinTartarusSorry, but the part about the Spetsnaz captain being tossed around like a ragdoll is completely ridiculous. Spetsnaz operatives are like all special forces highly skilled professional soldiers trained in hand-to-hand combat. Therefore Ivan would not have simply attempted to blindly charge and throw a punch. Furthermore, during this time period, the 1980s, the Soviet Union still existed and training conditions for spetsnaz were even more intense than other special forces - they were literally trained to be completely unresponsive to pain and to show no emotion, sort of like Snape with occlumency. I am really sorry about this review; that part just really bugged me.
12/6/2016 c26 Seanthiar
Please get a Beta to proofread your text. There are errors that shows there is no check. For example - its the Pendragon coat of arms not the Pendragon weapon. An it is a fault (error) not a vault...
Please get a Beta to proofread your text. There are errors that shows there is no check. For example - its the Pendragon coat of arms not the Pendragon weapon. An it is a fault (error) not a vault...
11/6/2016 c10 Freshenstein
A Gamecube console in 1981?! I'm so happy wizards can get their gaming systems from 20 years in the future. If you want accuracy then you need the Atari 2600.
A Gamecube console in 1981?! I'm so happy wizards can get their gaming systems from 20 years in the future. If you want accuracy then you need the Atari 2600.
9/7/2016 c11 jim629000
I am only on chapter 11 but this is one of the best stories I have read in awhile. So thanks for writing it.
I am only on chapter 11 but this is one of the best stories I have read in awhile. So thanks for writing it.
9/1/2016 c6 mckertis
Ew, lesbos. And apparently the queen lied that she would give Harry a father, eh ? As if a lesbo can ever hope to be a male role model.
Ew, lesbos. And apparently the queen lied that she would give Harry a father, eh ? As if a lesbo can ever hope to be a male role model.
9/1/2016 c1 mckertis
Why would you have respect for queen's family ? Considering that almost all previous kings and queens were major scumbags that were bent on enslaving the rest of the world. Thankfully, WW2 broke their backs, so the last queen is nowhere near as evil. Or important. Which is good.
Why would you have respect for queen's family ? Considering that almost all previous kings and queens were major scumbags that were bent on enslaving the rest of the world. Thankfully, WW2 broke their backs, so the last queen is nowhere near as evil. Or important. Which is good.
6/13/2016 c41 soldiermedic77
Absolutely loved all 41 chapters, and am wondering if this is it? I'm hoping these 41 chapters don't include part two! I read the entire story in one sitting an admit to rereading since!
Absolutely loved all 41 chapters, and am wondering if this is it? I'm hoping these 41 chapters don't include part two! I read the entire story in one sitting an admit to rereading since!
6/7/2016 c40 leyen.josh
Enjoyed your story for the most part. I enjoyed the plot and your own original characters. However, in my opinion the story itself is to drawn out, you repeat yourself to many times with explanations. The characters, more so the children, behave more mature than they should at 11, perhaps building up to events such as the blood pact would have been more entertaining. The amount of events placed in your story could easily have been spread out a bit more as well. I'd give the story an over all 5 out of 10 stars. keep up the good work.
Enjoyed your story for the most part. I enjoyed the plot and your own original characters. However, in my opinion the story itself is to drawn out, you repeat yourself to many times with explanations. The characters, more so the children, behave more mature than they should at 11, perhaps building up to events such as the blood pact would have been more entertaining. The amount of events placed in your story could easily have been spread out a bit more as well. I'd give the story an over all 5 out of 10 stars. keep up the good work.
6/2/2016 c4 Questionz
I would also like to note that 'destroyers' is a naval term for a group of destroyer class battleships. The correct term for aircraft is 'bombers'. (Sorry to nit pick
I would also like to note that 'destroyers' is a naval term for a group of destroyer class battleships. The correct term for aircraft is 'bombers'. (Sorry to nit pick
6/1/2016 c4 Questionz
Sorry, but if you're a Captain in Her Majesty's Royal Marine Corps then you should have being able to identify the assault rifle on sight without having to ask what it is, and should display a extremely greater knowledge of firearms and explosives. Hell I could probably identify an AR-15 on sight (never handling one myself), and the AR-15 has 'firing modes' not 'stances' and they are called single/semi automatic, burst fire and fully automatic. If you're going to include military personal at least have them have a believable level of knowledge of firearms and military tactics and not be totally ignorant.
Sorry, but if you're a Captain in Her Majesty's Royal Marine Corps then you should have being able to identify the assault rifle on sight without having to ask what it is, and should display a extremely greater knowledge of firearms and explosives. Hell I could probably identify an AR-15 on sight (never handling one myself), and the AR-15 has 'firing modes' not 'stances' and they are called single/semi automatic, burst fire and fully automatic. If you're going to include military personal at least have them have a believable level of knowledge of firearms and military tactics and not be totally ignorant.