for Harry Potter and the Shadow Legion
1512/13/2017 c1 Robert Smith
Hi ther, i have read this hole story and out of all of the Harry Potter stories I have read this one is the best one yet. I have read part 2 as well accept for chapter 33 and i also like it as well keep up the writing, and thank you for writing a bitchenly good story and the same goes for part 2 as well.
Hi ther, i have read this hole story and out of all of the Harry Potter stories I have read this one is the best one yet. I have read part 2 as well accept for chapter 33 and i also like it as well keep up the writing, and thank you for writing a bitchenly good story and the same goes for part 2 as well.
11/29/2017 c2 ThunderSphinx
The Sorting Hat says in "Godric Gryffindor" that Gryffindor and Slytherin are both from England, Rowena Ravenclaw is from Scotland, and Helga Hufflepuff is from Whales.
The Sorting Hat says in "Godric Gryffindor" that Gryffindor and Slytherin are both from England, Rowena Ravenclaw is from Scotland, and Helga Hufflepuff is from Whales.
11/13/2017 c13 scyfly
i think its a bit stupid and strange the legion doesnt have wizzards in their ranks. just find the entrances of the nest send a load of fiendfire down and be done with it. or go muggle and gass them all
i think its a bit stupid and strange the legion doesnt have wizzards in their ranks. just find the entrances of the nest send a load of fiendfire down and be done with it. or go muggle and gass them all
10/29/2017 c22 Ariadne Venegas
The Malfoys are a new family in England with no more than 300years so they only lobby their way with influence and money and after Lucius marry Narcisa and Sirius got in Askaban he took the proxy of the Black seats because they thought Draco will inherit.
The Malfoys are a new family in England with no more than 300years so they only lobby their way with influence and money and after Lucius marry Narcisa and Sirius got in Askaban he took the proxy of the Black seats because they thought Draco will inherit.
10/22/2017 c3 lija
Your world building is interesting. I'm still debating on whether the OCs are someones I can like. Some I do while others I don't.
This chapter started interesting until a couple of events occurred:
For a specially trained group (excluding Remus and Sirius), they seriously failed. The non-reaction automatically lead to the appearance of Mr Granger and family to the plot. The whole scene felt forced and unbelievable.
Ugh! Why, oh why, did you use those names? It annoying that you used the typical fanon names for Hermione's parents. There are so many you could choose from, including Monica and Wendell (names that Hermione used to identify them when she sent them to Australia).
Wow, what an unusual recruitment. Was expecting a thanks or something, not an immediate invitation to join. Yep, still felt forced and unbelivable. *sigh*
Your world building is interesting. I'm still debating on whether the OCs are someones I can like. Some I do while others I don't.
This chapter started interesting until a couple of events occurred:
For a specially trained group (excluding Remus and Sirius), they seriously failed. The non-reaction automatically lead to the appearance of Mr Granger and family to the plot. The whole scene felt forced and unbelievable.
Ugh! Why, oh why, did you use those names? It annoying that you used the typical fanon names for Hermione's parents. There are so many you could choose from, including Monica and Wendell (names that Hermione used to identify them when she sent them to Australia).
Wow, what an unusual recruitment. Was expecting a thanks or something, not an immediate invitation to join. Yep, still felt forced and unbelivable. *sigh*
10/17/2017 c35 lojosmom
I love your story. My housework has been neglected because I have not been able to put it down. It is unique and interesting. The painting with Merlin, Arthur and Guinivere was a nice touch.
I love your story. My housework has been neglected because I have not been able to put it down. It is unique and interesting. The painting with Merlin, Arthur and Guinivere was a nice touch.