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8/12/2016 c7 38Greymon Leader Batx flashpoint
i liked in this chapter we got to go into Envy's and Hitomi's mindset, The flashback with Aito that kid had at of love for his sister, as for Hitomi i can see why she had a bad time at the orphanage but im supised the govement didn't pick her up on her abbilties on alchemy but either way it was a sweet flashback and shows how much thoose two loved eachother, I liked Envy since we got to see what he thought of the whole ituaton his chracter was right on the money but i think he will have some words with farther, I hope Hitomi is doing okay again you reaally got the FMA brotherhood theme working here its great i look foward to the next chapter.

PS going to see Pete's dragon 2016 with some freinds i really hope its good
7/18/2016 c6 13MissKingLawliet
Hey there! I know you said you were working on the new chapter, but I didn't realize you already updated. My bad! Envy's true desires are surfacing...I wonder how that'll work out. Oh man, that very awkward moment XD

All in all, great chapter and looking forward to more!
7/17/2016 c6 5Hermione's conscience
Update pleeeeeaaaseeee!
7/11/2016 c6 2efoof123
Maybe you should try updating more. You can't have these little chapters and update as rarely as you do! I know people have lives, but you really need to update more than you have been.
7/11/2016 c6 Guest
Finally I thought you will never update this story. I can't believe what did Father think of Hitomi and Envy were doing.
7/11/2016 c1 Guest
My only criticisms for this chapter were that you introduced a lot of the main characters at the same time, revealed her "secret" to the cast quite quickly, and that you described her outfit as 'simple' (Lol, that last one's a joke. I just like how you said 'she was dressed simply' and then proceeded to detail every inch of her clothing x3)
Apart from that, it has a good lead up to plot, a nice cliffhanger, and at least makes a start in outlining what future character interactions may look like. Bravo, keep up the good work!
7/11/2016 c6 38Greymon Leader Batx flashpoint
ah so close yet so far I really wanted her to breack out it sucks she got punshied for it. I thought it was cool how she talked back to the farther thought it wass badass. I liked how you potryed Envy the actions he did felt like he really was Envy. IT was funny that farther made a sex joke it reminds me why FMA has this kinda grown up humor about simmilar to other anime's. I hope Hitomi can make it through Solitary confidenmtn and find another way to get out. Also nice reference to Envy about looking like a tree
7/11/2016 c6 11JD98
Good chapter.
5/9/2016 c5 Glaceon Akuma
Se ve con el traductor,yo solo veo las escenas de Hitomi y Envy
4/29/2016 c5 Guest
I thought Envy's hair naturally fell into that palm tree hairdo. Didn't think he used hair pins...
2/17/2016 c5 xliliths
OMGGGG...

HEHE :D

Love it!

Envy is the bestest thing since fried chicken. I love him _ Hitomi is cool too! :)
1/31/2016 c5 38Greymon Leader Batx flashpoint
I felt really bad for Hughes he is one of the best anime dads of all time I just love how much he cares for everyone and how engertic he is. when you said you would be keeping to the same plotline as brotherhood does that mean he will have the same fate? if does happen I wonder how Hitomi's relationship with Envy will go if he does kill Hughes. I loved how Hitmoi was quick thinking in this. she can take on Envy she ins't scared of him. I like how you portrayed Envy in this the way his outburst and how he can become very inratent just feels like Envy. Em for suggetions I only have two one is if Hitmoi does succed in escaping what if she cciently meets scar? another one is if she does escape then Envy could try to track her down and the two have a fight however the two are one equel terms and she could get a glimpse of his dragon form. I know there not super suggestions just what I could think at the moment. other then that this was a good chapter and I like how the chracters were written
1/30/2016 c5 6Jemstone6259
Smart ass girl! Know the really plan takes effect! Lets just hope she doesn't run into anymore of the siblings on her way out!
1/30/2016 c5 11JD98
This chapter was pretty good, keep up the great work.
1/30/2016 c5 Guest
I hop she will get to the Hughes family soon. Maes is worry sick.
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