for Fate Magnus Bellum5/10/2016 c15 Cain
Should I feel sorry by Arash?
Because he is probably its going the only sane man in the alter group and the toy chew of Manaka's, because she could make him use his noble-phantasm and use his card to revive him again and again.
If you make Gilgamesh vs Heracles, do you'll use the adaptation where the latter shatter Enkidu as in 2014's anime, because it makes sense seen as Zeus' favorite child its was birthed with the potential to surpass the Gods themselves.(question)
And i have a good reason to my understimation, with exception of Fate Zero and Heavens Feel route, i just saw the king of Knights receiving the end of a curbstomp battle. But never saw her delivering one with exception of Medea in heavens feel.
Should I feel sorry by Arash?
Because he is probably its going the only sane man in the alter group and the toy chew of Manaka's, because she could make him use his noble-phantasm and use his card to revive him again and again.
If you make Gilgamesh vs Heracles, do you'll use the adaptation where the latter shatter Enkidu as in 2014's anime, because it makes sense seen as Zeus' favorite child its was birthed with the potential to surpass the Gods themselves.(question)
And i have a good reason to my understimation, with exception of Fate Zero and Heavens Feel route, i just saw the king of Knights receiving the end of a curbstomp battle. But never saw her delivering one with exception of Medea in heavens feel.
5/10/2016 c15 Code Zero
Permission to speak dirty words?
Holy shit! Holy Crap!
This war its going fuck the world's destiny!
Altair-san, the secret techinque/noble-phantasm Nine-Lives can used with a lance/spear and a axe?
Because of what i read ( which is very limited) its techinically a sword skill.
And I asking this because in a point can pop in Manaka's head to give Heracles, his sanity back, i am not suggesting anything, its just a question.
Will Fiore return to Magus' association and receive pardon?
Wait, forget, this was a foolish question.
Of course its not. Lorelei and the hightier ups aren't as kind to this.
Permission to speak dirty words?
Holy shit! Holy Crap!
This war its going fuck the world's destiny!
Altair-san, the secret techinque/noble-phantasm Nine-Lives can used with a lance/spear and a axe?
Because of what i read ( which is very limited) its techinically a sword skill.
And I asking this because in a point can pop in Manaka's head to give Heracles, his sanity back, i am not suggesting anything, its just a question.
Will Fiore return to Magus' association and receive pardon?
Wait, forget, this was a foolish question.
Of course its not. Lorelei and the hightier ups aren't as kind to this.
5/9/2016 c13 bakhri
I'm not really sure how to type this, but a minor problem for me is that sometimes you leave sentences unfinished. For readers who are not very good at English, we have trouble filling in the blanks. I like the story very much, its just I have trouble trying to complete those missing words.
From Ch11:
"Skillfully parrying the red knight's blows with his own sword, Mordred and Chiron found
themselves in a deadlock as they fought across the rooftops of the city. Sparks flying from
their respective blades as"
From Ch13:
"All except Caules, Reines, and Ayaka, the trio of which stood behind two golems that"
I'm not really sure how to type this, but a minor problem for me is that sometimes you leave sentences unfinished. For readers who are not very good at English, we have trouble filling in the blanks. I like the story very much, its just I have trouble trying to complete those missing words.
From Ch11:
"Skillfully parrying the red knight's blows with his own sword, Mordred and Chiron found
themselves in a deadlock as they fought across the rooftops of the city. Sparks flying from
their respective blades as"
From Ch13:
"All except Caules, Reines, and Ayaka, the trio of which stood behind two golems that"
5/8/2016 c15 
10DocHoliday0316
Well, we can now add Darnic, Vlad, and Gordes to the kill count now. I know you said that people would start dying in the second half of this fic, but I didn't think that they would die this fast.
Anyway, I loved how you portrayed Manaka here, and really can't wait to see Ozymandias in action.
BTW, will we get to see Ionoi Hetairoi vs Ramesseum Tentyris in this fic?
10DocHoliday0316Well, we can now add Darnic, Vlad, and Gordes to the kill count now. I know you said that people would start dying in the second half of this fic, but I didn't think that they would die this fast.
Anyway, I loved how you portrayed Manaka here, and really can't wait to see Ozymandias in action.
BTW, will we get to see Ionoi Hetairoi vs Ramesseum Tentyris in this fic?
5/8/2016 c15 zachary2
Awesome story I say, I quite loved the way Manaka acts, you described her character perfectly.
Awesome story I say, I quite loved the way Manaka acts, you described her character perfectly.
5/8/2016 c15 mike21
Yes, I'm sure the King of Heroes would love to meet this so-called King of Kings.
Yes, I'm sure the King of Heroes would love to meet this so-called King of Kings.
5/8/2016 c15 8ForteOfTheBallad98
Good chapter!
You portrayed Manaka exactly as I expected you to!
Arthur-Alter coming soon? Awesome!
8ForteOfTheBallad98Good chapter!
You portrayed Manaka exactly as I expected you to!
Arthur-Alter coming soon? Awesome!
5/7/2016 c14 unknown
incredible you have inspired me as for your writing I do ask s this grail corrupted by angra and inhabited by the beast of 666 and as for your portrayal of manaka you do a great job
10/10
incredible you have inspired me as for your writing I do ask s this grail corrupted by angra and inhabited by the beast of 666 and as for your portrayal of manaka you do a great job
10/10
5/6/2016 c14 Code Zero
very nice, i noted that you corrected some phrases of the earlier chapters, you are good.
Do you will make Angelica do a Heel-Face-Turn like she did in kaleid prisma illya?
You changed your mind about turn Vlad in his one-winged angel form? because i remember you said you would spare Siegfried but wouln't make the same to Darnic and black-lancer.
Altair-san, does Manaka has possession of Avalon?
very nice, i noted that you corrected some phrases of the earlier chapters, you are good.
Do you will make Angelica do a Heel-Face-Turn like she did in kaleid prisma illya?
You changed your mind about turn Vlad in his one-winged angel form? because i remember you said you would spare Siegfried but wouln't make the same to Darnic and black-lancer.
Altair-san, does Manaka has possession of Avalon?
5/6/2016 c14 No need to weak
this chapter was so good!
Can i ask something? are you a fan of harem anime?
Do you think that Beerus would able to scare the crap out of Gilgamesh? i think yes.
i beg your pardon by asking questions about stories that have anything to do this fic but i don't know if you still read the reviews of your other story, but please don't get angry, please?
Ayaka will survive to this all shit happening in Trifas?
when Gil discover about Manaka and her plans, will be a explosion of volcanic retribution and violence!
this chapter was so good!
Can i ask something? are you a fan of harem anime?
Do you think that Beerus would able to scare the crap out of Gilgamesh? i think yes.
i beg your pardon by asking questions about stories that have anything to do this fic but i don't know if you still read the reviews of your other story, but please don't get angry, please?
Ayaka will survive to this all shit happening in Trifas?
when Gil discover about Manaka and her plans, will be a explosion of volcanic retribution and violence!
5/5/2016 c14 10DocHoliday0316
This was a pretty good chapter. I didn't expect Chiron being killed off so soon. And I loved how this version of the Gilgamesh-Lancelot dogfight ended (mainly because Prototype Gilgamesh is much more likable than regular Gilgamesh).
And Manaka's decided to show herself, and has freakin' Heracles as one of her six servants. I'm now worried for all participants involved, since Heracles is ridiculously broken, despite being nothing but brute force incarnate when his Mad Enhancement is activated (loved how you used his Third Ascension Form from F/GO).
Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter. This probably has to be my favorite Nasuverse story on the site.
10DocHoliday0316This was a pretty good chapter. I didn't expect Chiron being killed off so soon. And I loved how this version of the Gilgamesh-Lancelot dogfight ended (mainly because Prototype Gilgamesh is much more likable than regular Gilgamesh).
And Manaka's decided to show herself, and has freakin' Heracles as one of her six servants. I'm now worried for all participants involved, since Heracles is ridiculously broken, despite being nothing but brute force incarnate when his Mad Enhancement is activated (loved how you used his Third Ascension Form from F/GO).
Anyway, can't wait for the next chapter. This probably has to be my favorite Nasuverse story on the site.
5/5/2016 c14 7Blue Bragon
Great chapter, can't wait to see what comes next. Still feel like the Manaka reveal needed more gravitas, it felt like kinda in the air but I guess that the next chapter will really focus on that. It's just that Arthur betraying his previous Master needed some ump to make it feel important. Still Manaka is great and can't wait for her to steal Saber and make him go all Alter. Then Jeanne will get to fight Saber's previous girlfriend to get her man back!
7Blue BragonGreat chapter, can't wait to see what comes next. Still feel like the Manaka reveal needed more gravitas, it felt like kinda in the air but I guess that the next chapter will really focus on that. It's just that Arthur betraying his previous Master needed some ump to make it feel important. Still Manaka is great and can't wait for her to steal Saber and make him go all Alter. Then Jeanne will get to fight Saber's previous girlfriend to get her man back!
5/4/2016 c14 ilover145
A new chapter! XD
I must say, there aren't all that many Proto!Saber fanfics out there so when I saw this, I thought 'why not?'. Glad to see that I made the right choice.
The reunion between Arthur and Manaka has been something I've wanted to see for quite sometime now and waiting for the next chapter just to see what will happen next. In fact, everything about FMB is magnificent. Kudos!
A last minute question: will the Arthur/Jeanne pairing be a slow-burn or just hints of it?
I can't wait for a new chapter. :D
A new chapter! XD
I must say, there aren't all that many Proto!Saber fanfics out there so when I saw this, I thought 'why not?'. Glad to see that I made the right choice.
The reunion between Arthur and Manaka has been something I've wanted to see for quite sometime now and waiting for the next chapter just to see what will happen next. In fact, everything about FMB is magnificent. Kudos!
A last minute question: will the Arthur/Jeanne pairing be a slow-burn or just hints of it?
I can't wait for a new chapter. :D
5/4/2016 c14 Black 13
I think that is better Achilles take care, because the favorite brother of Athena its one of the few that doesn't need any weapon to beating him until death!
00-san do you think that Athena or Ares can appear as servants in F/GO?
Because you know... Artemis incident?
I think that is better Achilles take care, because the favorite brother of Athena its one of the few that doesn't need any weapon to beating him until death!
00-san do you think that Athena or Ares can appear as servants in F/GO?
Because you know... Artemis incident?