for Fate Magnus Bellum2/21/2016 c11 Guest
Nice chapter so far, I wonder how Shirou will react, it's interesting how you're including Emiya Shirou and Kotomine Shirou in the same story. Nice alluding to the past in this chap. GJ!
Nice chapter so far, I wonder how Shirou will react, it's interesting how you're including Emiya Shirou and Kotomine Shirou in the same story. Nice alluding to the past in this chap. GJ!
2/21/2016 c11 
8ForteOfTheBallad98
Wow, this was a pretty good chapter. I should have realized this about the rogue Servants when the Class Cards came into play.
Nice revealing to Jeanne about Arthur's past. They really are best suited for each other.
8ForteOfTheBallad98Wow, this was a pretty good chapter. I should have realized this about the rogue Servants when the Class Cards came into play.
Nice revealing to Jeanne about Arthur's past. They really are best suited for each other.
2/4/2016 c1 Salvatore doni
Helo!, Amigo!
Yo guesto mucho di tu storia pero senor quando vas haber bejos?
Helo!, Amigo!
Yo guesto mucho di tu storia pero senor quando vas haber bejos?
1/31/2016 c10 Guest
wonder if we will see the beast of 666 in your fic also where did you read prototype fragments or haven't you rad fragments anyway
karna vs cu too good best fight in the fic
you are writing manaka perfectly but you downplay parts of her character like her enjoyment of cooking ... actually how she could cook 50 metres underground near a pile of skulls idk so ignore what i just said bye
wonder if we will see the beast of 666 in your fic also where did you read prototype fragments or haven't you rad fragments anyway
karna vs cu too good best fight in the fic
you are writing manaka perfectly but you downplay parts of her character like her enjoyment of cooking ... actually how she could cook 50 metres underground near a pile of skulls idk so ignore what i just said bye
1/30/2016 c10 Reader
Dood~ I luved the spear fight. Just in case you forgot or dunno about this, Gae Bolg's real strength shows when it is thrown. So make him throw it and.. ehehehheheheh :D Screw Godly armor~
Dood~ I luved the spear fight. Just in case you forgot or dunno about this, Gae Bolg's real strength shows when it is thrown. So make him throw it and.. ehehehheheheh :D Screw Godly armor~
1/30/2016 c10 Athkore
Really great fic so far, well thought out and well executed.
The characters are very consistent, are well used/developed and interact quite nicely with each other (Especially to those who never met in cannon, I just had a general, 'Yup, this could happen if these two met.')
Enjoying the tweaked story as well, looking forward to future twists and whatnot.
And I like how this feels very much like a Fate story, glad to see those elements remained despite being a fanfic.
All in all great job, hope you enjoy writing this as much as I am reading it.
Really great fic so far, well thought out and well executed.
The characters are very consistent, are well used/developed and interact quite nicely with each other (Especially to those who never met in cannon, I just had a general, 'Yup, this could happen if these two met.')
Enjoying the tweaked story as well, looking forward to future twists and whatnot.
And I like how this feels very much like a Fate story, glad to see those elements remained despite being a fanfic.
All in all great job, hope you enjoy writing this as much as I am reading it.
1/29/2016 c10 zachary2
Nice chapter, I already really like Shirou from this, and I have negative emotions towards the others who get in his way, your writing is quite influential.
Nice chapter, I already really like Shirou from this, and I have negative emotions towards the others who get in his way, your writing is quite influential.
1/29/2016 c10 Hakuryuu
I love tjis chapter , very good.
I like JeanneXArthur , more please
Cu is very strong but Karna is better
See later
I love tjis chapter , very good.
I like JeanneXArthur , more please
Cu is very strong but Karna is better
See later
1/28/2016 c10 10DocHoliday0316
Very nice chapter. I was surprised that Robin Hood was killed off this chapter.
Anyway, I'm going to guess that Shirou Kotomine is allied with the Ainsworths from Prisma Illya. This should definitely make things interesting.
Anyway, I can't wait to see the next chapter.
10DocHoliday0316Very nice chapter. I was surprised that Robin Hood was killed off this chapter.
Anyway, I'm going to guess that Shirou Kotomine is allied with the Ainsworths from Prisma Illya. This should definitely make things interesting.
Anyway, I can't wait to see the next chapter.
1/28/2016 c10 Amatsumi
Thank you for your update! You make a good showing of a Non Gilgamesh/Karna show why he is so OP. He's full power here and he is holding back.
Manaka...is unexpected but isn't unwelcome. You should be careful though of how you write her.
Typemoon wiki and the Trailer is sparse about her character other than she can instantly know everything that under the preview of Akasha -Definite Past, Present and Future- so she trying create a deviation that isn't in its preview.
Thank you for your update! You make a good showing of a Non Gilgamesh/Karna show why he is so OP. He's full power here and he is holding back.
Manaka...is unexpected but isn't unwelcome. You should be careful though of how you write her.
Typemoon wiki and the Trailer is sparse about her character other than she can instantly know everything that under the preview of Akasha -Definite Past, Present and Future- so she trying create a deviation that isn't in its preview.
1/24/2016 c9 Guest
its overall great but TOHSAKA AYAKA are you kidding me i like the blonde ayaka decision but why cant ayaka still be a saijou the saijou are cool you can have her be a saijou and still have the tohsakas be her cousin and why not have her use more black magecraft
the good parts are everything else just want to rant
its overall great but TOHSAKA AYAKA are you kidding me i like the blonde ayaka decision but why cant ayaka still be a saijou the saijou are cool you can have her be a saijou and still have the tohsakas be her cousin and why not have her use more black magecraft
the good parts are everything else just want to rant
1/23/2016 c9 2Hercules8
GO Lancer (Cu Chulainn)! I love that guy, it doesn't matter what version of him it is, he is just awesome.
So Shirou Kotomine is the adopted brother to Kirei. Scary, at least he is not as crazy as his brother!
I like this chapter. It's good to have lighthearted chapters to develop the characters and the story. Also to calm down from the excitement from the earlier chapters. Good job! :D
2Hercules8GO Lancer (Cu Chulainn)! I love that guy, it doesn't matter what version of him it is, he is just awesome.
So Shirou Kotomine is the adopted brother to Kirei. Scary, at least he is not as crazy as his brother!
I like this chapter. It's good to have lighthearted chapters to develop the characters and the story. Also to calm down from the excitement from the earlier chapters. Good job! :D