for the heir and the spare8/31/2015 c1 
102Winter Leigh End
I feel I should probably point out that Regulus is two years younger than Sirius, not four.
""Regulus Black." You responded." should be, ""Regulus Black," you responded." I believe.
""...aren't you, Regulus?" He asked,..." should be, ""...aren't you, Regulus?" he asked,..." You don't actually have to capitalize things like, he, she, and stuff after a question or exclamation mark in cases like the one above.
"...better then you think." should be, "...better than you think."
I think you're being a bit hard on yourself in your author's notes. This is far from crap. It's actually a very promising start for a friendship between these two. Yes, it leaves a little wanting given where you've ended it, I have to say, but it feels like a very nice beginning.
If this were a multi-chap detailing the friendship of Barty and Regulus through school, this would be an excellent start, but since it's not, it just feels a bit unfinished, is all.
I quite like how you have Barty in this. The way you describe him as being extra tall is cool and I like how you made not of how there was already a bit of crazy in him there. Regulus's feelings about everything and how he doesn't really understand friendship and says he can't agree to Barty's statement because he doesn't know what a friend or being a good one is like.
All in all, this was interesting and I liked the dynamics between these two.
102Winter Leigh EndI feel I should probably point out that Regulus is two years younger than Sirius, not four.
""Regulus Black." You responded." should be, ""Regulus Black," you responded." I believe.
""...aren't you, Regulus?" He asked,..." should be, ""...aren't you, Regulus?" he asked,..." You don't actually have to capitalize things like, he, she, and stuff after a question or exclamation mark in cases like the one above.
"...better then you think." should be, "...better than you think."
I think you're being a bit hard on yourself in your author's notes. This is far from crap. It's actually a very promising start for a friendship between these two. Yes, it leaves a little wanting given where you've ended it, I have to say, but it feels like a very nice beginning.
If this were a multi-chap detailing the friendship of Barty and Regulus through school, this would be an excellent start, but since it's not, it just feels a bit unfinished, is all.
I quite like how you have Barty in this. The way you describe him as being extra tall is cool and I like how you made not of how there was already a bit of crazy in him there. Regulus's feelings about everything and how he doesn't really understand friendship and says he can't agree to Barty's statement because he doesn't know what a friend or being a good one is like.
All in all, this was interesting and I liked the dynamics between these two.
8/31/2015 c1 Shisui's crow
Hey come down! This piece isn't bad and to be honest I can't see why you would see it as such...
For me was it an itereresting read and it was complettly worth my time. In my headcannon Regulus and Barty habe been friends as well, and it was kind of exciting and interesting to see how such a friendship could arise.
It is a pity that there aren't much fanfictions about them, so I was very happy to find yours! :D
Thx and bye!
Hey come down! This piece isn't bad and to be honest I can't see why you would see it as such...
For me was it an itereresting read and it was complettly worth my time. In my headcannon Regulus and Barty habe been friends as well, and it was kind of exciting and interesting to see how such a friendship could arise.
It is a pity that there aren't much fanfictions about them, so I was very happy to find yours! :D
Thx and bye!