for A Twisted Strawhat6/9/2016 c17 
8Elven Sorcerer
Nice chapter, a very interesting angle for the torturer. Lemon was short and cute, but not very erotic. I assume that was your aim all along, so good job. But to add some emotional charge, you might have used some long gaze, a few more kisses during and afterwards, they would have worked pretty well in my opinion.
8Elven SorcererNice chapter, a very interesting angle for the torturer. Lemon was short and cute, but not very erotic. I assume that was your aim all along, so good job. But to add some emotional charge, you might have used some long gaze, a few more kisses during and afterwards, they would have worked pretty well in my opinion.
6/6/2016 c14 Guest
I wonder if he has more then enough for just himself and if so if he'll give some to the crew
I wonder if he has more then enough for just himself and if so if he'll give some to the crew
6/6/2016 c12 Guest
If she thinks luffys keeping secrets for not divulging this life story then isn't the whole crew also keep ing secrets. I wonder if nami realise she's also an idiot with to much testosterone
If she thinks luffys keeping secrets for not divulging this life story then isn't the whole crew also keep ing secrets. I wonder if nami realise she's also an idiot with to much testosterone
6/6/2016 c10 Guest
What do you mean ace let him have it I don't see how he could be stronger than this luffy I honestly I don't see hoebluffuvnever beat him as kids in cannon when he was a blunt fighter until he got his fruit and was never shown using haki
What do you mean ace let him have it I don't see how he could be stronger than this luffy I honestly I don't see hoebluffuvnever beat him as kids in cannon when he was a blunt fighter until he got his fruit and was never shown using haki
6/7/2016 c17 Mathylda0
Being evil don't mean Doctor M can't look after Luffy's wellbeing. After all, twisted love is still a form of love. I find perturbing the act of eating a sentient being, even one as monstruous as Arlong.
Being evil don't mean Doctor M can't look after Luffy's wellbeing. After all, twisted love is still a form of love. I find perturbing the act of eating a sentient being, even one as monstruous as Arlong.
6/6/2016 c17 chimera629
Not surprised she slept with luffy its the classic move for your savior just feel bad the rest of thr crew didnt get some love from the the fake islanders. Though I am surprised that ace awakened 2 forms of haki and was able to get him those boots,and a little surprised he is so scared if he was given a zoans healing ability
Not surprised she slept with luffy its the classic move for your savior just feel bad the rest of thr crew didnt get some love from the the fake islanders. Though I am surprised that ace awakened 2 forms of haki and was able to get him those boots,and a little surprised he is so scared if he was given a zoans healing ability
6/6/2016 c9 Guest
Did they have on armor or something to just get IP after been shoot like that or iron body techniques
Did they have on armor or something to just get IP after been shoot like that or iron body techniques
6/6/2016 c8 Guest
How is he functioning without sleeo
How is he functioning without sleeo
6/6/2016 c9 K
Hold on what do you mean by disfigured do you mean cover in clsxars like his upper body or is his twig and berries damaged or defaced?
Hold on what do you mean by disfigured do you mean cover in clsxars like his upper body or is his twig and berries damaged or defaced?
6/5/2016 c17 Amethyst
For your first time writing a lemon, it was really good! I see promise in your future. As for them eating arlong...Well that may have been the most disturbing...LY AMAZING THING IVE EVER READ! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA GWAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH IM SO PLEASED. Daoist Amethyst is pleased indeed! Keep it up, you are doing a fantastic job.
For your first time writing a lemon, it was really good! I see promise in your future. As for them eating arlong...Well that may have been the most disturbing...LY AMAZING THING IVE EVER READ! BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA GWAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAH IM SO PLEASED. Daoist Amethyst is pleased indeed! Keep it up, you are doing a fantastic job.
6/4/2016 c17 Guest
Man are you really going to keep this just Luffy and Robin? I really hope Nami is okay in all this, just do a threesome. Hell, do a foursome and add Vivi
Man are you really going to keep this just Luffy and Robin? I really hope Nami is okay in all this, just do a threesome. Hell, do a foursome and add Vivi
6/5/2016 c17 Psiivmeodlqndndkcibiash
Eating Arlong, how fitting of the Monster Trio.
Awesome chapter btw!
Eating Arlong, how fitting of the Monster Trio.
Awesome chapter btw!
6/5/2016 c17 sudhush
Good chapter but eating Fishman that was too much and too Gore dude just only taking the Skull is only Bad; it may put Luffy in Odds with Jimbe. and Lemon was Good. Keep up the Great Work man.
Good chapter but eating Fishman that was too much and too Gore dude just only taking the Skull is only Bad; it may put Luffy in Odds with Jimbe. and Lemon was Good. Keep up the Great Work man.