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33Devlin Dracul
God damn, that was beyond awesome. The villagers might be having nightmares, but I'll be having pleasant dreams about this scene. . . . . . Do you think it's ethically correct to eat fishmen? I mean, they are technically fish. Would it really be wrong to eat them?
33Devlin DraculGod damn, that was beyond awesome. The villagers might be having nightmares, but I'll be having pleasant dreams about this scene. . . . . . Do you think it's ethically correct to eat fishmen? I mean, they are technically fish. Would it really be wrong to eat them?
4/1/2016 c16 Toad-sage66
loved it! especially how you made usopp strong in a believable way and how overall the crew is getting stronger, major props though cause I think luffy only got hit once by namy if I remember correctly and that's good cause I never really liked how he got hit by the crew in canon even though they didn't mean anything by it and here luffy is lovable and smart which is great cause most fics really go to far in making him an idiot and while I kinda like vivi though not as much as other characters I would love to see the conflict of her dealing with luffys brutal truth and bloodlust and the crews lack of mercy to anyone deemed an enemy cause think if she saw croc dying she would save him even If it meant her country possibly dying, hell I like croc a lot more than her. As for lemons I have never written one though I have all the ideas and each character's lemon will have to be different to suit them so I can give advise if needed just drop a PM
loved it! especially how you made usopp strong in a believable way and how overall the crew is getting stronger, major props though cause I think luffy only got hit once by namy if I remember correctly and that's good cause I never really liked how he got hit by the crew in canon even though they didn't mean anything by it and here luffy is lovable and smart which is great cause most fics really go to far in making him an idiot and while I kinda like vivi though not as much as other characters I would love to see the conflict of her dealing with luffys brutal truth and bloodlust and the crews lack of mercy to anyone deemed an enemy cause think if she saw croc dying she would save him even If it meant her country possibly dying, hell I like croc a lot more than her. As for lemons I have never written one though I have all the ideas and each character's lemon will have to be different to suit them so I can give advise if needed just drop a PM
4/1/2016 c16 2Apfane Chan
huhh argh yuck really... your mind must be one sick place... oh well I read it, kind of like it and will read the rest... but not too much disgusting matter (in every meanings) please
2Apfane Chanhuhh argh yuck really... your mind must be one sick place... oh well I read it, kind of like it and will read the rest... but not too much disgusting matter (in every meanings) please
4/1/2016 c15 Toad-sage66
I loved this chap but I don't think vivi would be a good addition to the crew first her personality is quite a bit annoying, her not wanting anyone to fight or be hurt or killed ignoring reality basically, and I know you can make her stronger but if you are bringing her on the crew then she is definitely going to have to change a lot and even if you are not going to add her when she is with the crew could you have luffy just point out how idiotic her out look is cause even canon luffy agreed with croc about her outlook and personality
I loved this chap but I don't think vivi would be a good addition to the crew first her personality is quite a bit annoying, her not wanting anyone to fight or be hurt or killed ignoring reality basically, and I know you can make her stronger but if you are bringing her on the crew then she is definitely going to have to change a lot and even if you are not going to add her when she is with the crew could you have luffy just point out how idiotic her out look is cause even canon luffy agreed with croc about her outlook and personality
3/31/2016 c16 Guest
love it
love it
4/1/2016 c16 2Xerzo LotCN
yep that was very fulfilling short but oh so satisfying hmm maybe at one point i might have been able to help with lemons but i'm now bad at writing only thing i can suggest is to go read some other stories lemons to get a grasp for how lemons work or just try you hand at it a few time and just write it how it seems pleasing to you with a bit of time and effort i'm sure you can pull it off good luck i look forward to it
2Xerzo LotCNyep that was very fulfilling short but oh so satisfying hmm maybe at one point i might have been able to help with lemons but i'm now bad at writing only thing i can suggest is to go read some other stories lemons to get a grasp for how lemons work or just try you hand at it a few time and just write it how it seems pleasing to you with a bit of time and effort i'm sure you can pull it off good luck i look forward to it
3/31/2016 c16 6Lightningblade49
Holy shit that was savage on all accounts I kind of have fears for Smoker now, kind of.
6Lightningblade49Holy shit that was savage on all accounts I kind of have fears for Smoker now, kind of.
3/31/2016 c16 Nihilist Noblesse
This is such an amazing chapter, I like how they are training to become stronger and if i remember correctly in canon the only one who trained was Zoro until the 2 year timeskip right? so this is such a big difference
This is such an amazing chapter, I like how they are training to become stronger and if i remember correctly in canon the only one who trained was Zoro until the 2 year timeskip right? so this is such a big difference
3/31/2016 c16 2Blue VanLocke
Really if you don't know how to write a scene or a character don't force it. Just imply the scene. Look you don't know how to write a sadist character but you're doing it anyway.
2Blue VanLockeReally if you don't know how to write a scene or a character don't force it. Just imply the scene. Look you don't know how to write a sadist character but you're doing it anyway.
3/31/2016 c16 chimera629
Why are the rest of the straw hats as vicious as Luffy? Luffy is wore than cp9 as I didn't see them torture anyone
Why are the rest of the straw hats as vicious as Luffy? Luffy is wore than cp9 as I didn't see them torture anyone
3/31/2016 c15 chimera629
Vivi joking would endanger her country and I wonder of he has enough serum to share since Zoro is also badly wounded
Vivi joking would endanger her country and I wonder of he has enough serum to share since Zoro is also badly wounded
3/31/2016 c16 raynisia
I find this Luffy very interesting. He seems to be able to bring out the most interesting character aspects of all his crew members. great chapter!
I find this Luffy very interesting. He seems to be able to bring out the most interesting character aspects of all his crew members. great chapter!