for Blonding9/21/2015 c1 
9Bomahe
Nice start, but your description and first chapter should tell us more about what to expect of the story. Not spoiling anything of course, it just that the description is the most important 60 words in your entire story. If people don't open your fic, it doesn't matter of great the actual content is.
Based on your story Kyuubi, I must again say that I look forward to reading more of this. I also wonder why most hoKAGE don't make their KAGE bunshin do the paperwork for them. I guess they just want to fight their biggest enemy personally.
PS: Try writing 50 more words next time. I myself tend to filter fics based on length 5K or 10K. A slightly longer first chapter might get you a few more readers a bit faster.
9BomaheNice start, but your description and first chapter should tell us more about what to expect of the story. Not spoiling anything of course, it just that the description is the most important 60 words in your entire story. If people don't open your fic, it doesn't matter of great the actual content is.
Based on your story Kyuubi, I must again say that I look forward to reading more of this. I also wonder why most hoKAGE don't make their KAGE bunshin do the paperwork for them. I guess they just want to fight their biggest enemy personally.
PS: Try writing 50 more words next time. I myself tend to filter fics based on length 5K or 10K. A slightly longer first chapter might get you a few more readers a bit faster.
9/21/2015 c1 16Duesal Bladesinger
I'm hooked. Completely, hopelessly hooked. I eagerly await the next installment.
16Duesal BladesingerI'm hooked. Completely, hopelessly hooked. I eagerly await the next installment.