for The Group Effect11/20/2015 c1 Jo
Great Job !
Suspense! Yeah!
Great Job !
Suspense! Yeah!
10/15/2015 c1 
4IenvyBella
Update asap please u can't keep us hanging some of us really like this story please go on
4IenvyBellaUpdate asap please u can't keep us hanging some of us really like this story please go on
9/27/2015 c1 Singing Silverwings
I have to agree with Reid below. That many attacks at the one resort would have shut it down or, at minimum, greatly increased security. Groups wouldn't continue to go there.
With some changes, it can be a great story. However, and this is just a pet peeve of my own, holding a story hostage in exchange for reviews is very - uh - uncool, I guess. An author writes for the benefit of not only himself but mostly for the readers. Then, if the story merits reviews, one way or the other, readers will review. My thoughts only and they are NOT intended to be anything but enlightening, so please don't be offended. None is intended.
I have to agree with Reid below. That many attacks at the one resort would have shut it down or, at minimum, greatly increased security. Groups wouldn't continue to go there.
With some changes, it can be a great story. However, and this is just a pet peeve of my own, holding a story hostage in exchange for reviews is very - uh - uncool, I guess. An author writes for the benefit of not only himself but mostly for the readers. Then, if the story merits reviews, one way or the other, readers will review. My thoughts only and they are NOT intended to be anything but enlightening, so please don't be offended. None is intended.
9/27/2015 c1 Reid is my Hero
I'm sorry, but there's a major plot flaw - the BAU team would not take a bus. They would drive FBI-issued SUV's from the nearest office, or have the police pick them up. Then there's the whole question of why the resort would continue to operate or why groups would go there if so many people are disappearing & getting hurt/killed. With the internet, that's news that couldn't be hidden from potential clients.
I'm sorry, but there's a major plot flaw - the BAU team would not take a bus. They would drive FBI-issued SUV's from the nearest office, or have the police pick them up. Then there's the whole question of why the resort would continue to operate or why groups would go there if so many people are disappearing & getting hurt/killed. With the internet, that's news that couldn't be hidden from potential clients.
9/27/2015 c1 Guest
U can't keep us hanging like that. Do update soon
U can't keep us hanging like that. Do update soon