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9/28/2015 c1 DragonAlex5533
This was a diabetes inducing read with how sweet it was. And I love it for that. Nice job. It felt like something that could have happened in the story with how well you kept them in character.

P.S. Is that Apollomon as your picture? If it is nice choice in Digimon.
9/28/2015 c1 2l3largus
I absolutely love this! You did great keeping to two in character, exploring them and explaining their dynamic. My only complaints are that you italicized all the dialog and you kept all the dialog in the same paragraphs (usually a deal breaker for me.)

Regardless, this was a great read.

Keep on keepin on. Here's a muffin.
-l3largus
p.s. If you ever come back to edit this, please just create a new paragraph for a different persons dialog.
9/27/2015 c1 10NoOneImportantHere
This was nice. Good to see a scene with Makoto and Kagura that didn't involve bodily injury. Nice going!

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