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12/31/2015 c2 12How-not-to-do-something
Battle! Glorious battle! Whoever says that has never been in one. These Sith troopers seem roughly matched with Storms troopers, though without a defended position I dont think the former are up to the latter's standards. And this Anna Luis is still on someone's hit list. I suspect she's being framed, but I don't know for sure. We'll see later.

And now, some criticisms (boo!). The POV breaks are a little jarring, in the future try either italicizing or bolding the locations. The one line "where the MZ-8 pulse cannons are" just breaks the flow. Try "Pulse cannon position" or something like that.
12/31/2015 c1 How-not-to-do-something
Time to attack.

Lacking context, I really can't give much of an opinion here. However, this looks like a good start. An interrupted execution, a murder(?), war, and "EXECUTE ORDER 66." Things look like they're going from zero to s**tstorm at the speed of Woah. Lets see where this goes.
10/24/2015 c3 2J25TheArcKing
Anna Luis doesn't know about this hmmm...
The Storm troopers are pretending to shoot at her, but they keep missing. Hehe sounds like a video game "cheat code" they put in. (It was all planned, staged and all done in secret...)

The white paint exploded? It's like the "explosive gel."

Kotori...

They're looking for this "artifact" huh... Pretty much every army...

Valencia from Adventure Quest... I remember playing that game when I was a little kid...

All of those bodies at the end probably all get burned in stake... It's crazy!

Frankie Foster you're not forgotten...
(I'm like the Riddler lol even though I'm not really him...)
10/15/2015 c2 J25TheArcKing
Chapter has part to part, well scene to scene, another other scene.

Kira and Blackburn saved the little girl, how nice of them.

Troopers vs troopers, ok there? I don't know much about these Sith troopers, but I know the Stormtroopers. It's a war zone!

Hmm they're playing double agent with the King and Queen huh? A movement of stealth.

They let her go at the end? They should have explain her what is going on before she leaves? Really? (This feels staged to me...)

Here comes the stereotyping of them alienating her as a witch... (the people.)

Roodaka is the best Predator / Yautja.
Gardevoir is like Ermac.
10/8/2015 c1 J25TheArcKing
Why does this look similar to your story: "Women outside our village will burned at the stake" umm? The whole get burn at stake? Man you have a hatred over women getting burned at stake. Hey dude I have that type of feeling too, well I hate racists, sexists, stereotypes, homophobes, people who say negative stuff and laugh behind your back, rude/evil people...

Back on topic, this story seems to be interesting... Reminds me of your Star Wars Empire vs Metarax like in the past...

Hmmm this chapter his different parts and flashbacks... I wonder what happens if the next chapter, especially once your done you're going to work on the rest of the story series... Woooh cool...

Sonata Dusk is in villain wiki...
Fifi la Fume is a WWE jobber...

"No that's not true! That's impossible! NOOOOOOOOOO! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!" - Luke Skywalker.

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