
10/19/2015 c1
4BemmyBean
I really like this story so far, I especially like the uniqueness of Luffy's fruit which tend to just be water or somebody else's logia. As you mentioned Luffy is pretty clever with his powers so maybe he could utilize some kind of rocket punch by directing his power out of his elbows (think Pacific Rim). I like that he met Nami immediately which is a nice change pace from other fics where he either meets her when they are kids or meets her at the usual place.
I do have two criticisms. One is that I feel even a more serious Luffy wouldn't make a big deal out of the reveal of his grandfather. I feel like Luffy, as a simple guy, would think of Garp simply as his grandfather instead of some marine hero. Two is that I think him knowing Rokushiki is kind of unnecessary when he already has a pretty significant power. For example he could have directed his plasma powers down to rocket up instead of using geppo or simply taking the bullets like he did in the original story which would have still scared Nami but also demonstrated his power. Though Morgan chopping plasma is still very entertaining to me cause that guy's a dick.
Otherwise a very strong start.

I really like this story so far, I especially like the uniqueness of Luffy's fruit which tend to just be water or somebody else's logia. As you mentioned Luffy is pretty clever with his powers so maybe he could utilize some kind of rocket punch by directing his power out of his elbows (think Pacific Rim). I like that he met Nami immediately which is a nice change pace from other fics where he either meets her when they are kids or meets her at the usual place.
I do have two criticisms. One is that I feel even a more serious Luffy wouldn't make a big deal out of the reveal of his grandfather. I feel like Luffy, as a simple guy, would think of Garp simply as his grandfather instead of some marine hero. Two is that I think him knowing Rokushiki is kind of unnecessary when he already has a pretty significant power. For example he could have directed his plasma powers down to rocket up instead of using geppo or simply taking the bullets like he did in the original story which would have still scared Nami but also demonstrated his power. Though Morgan chopping plasma is still very entertaining to me cause that guy's a dick.
Otherwise a very strong start.