11/14/2015 c7 2zolydck
P.S Well done, What and interesting way to have him secure Ginny's loyalty.

I also love intelligent uses for spells (so well done on that front).

I assume Alexandra black is next? Anyways keep up the great work.

11/14/2015 c7 2Penny is wise
Awesome chapter. Is he training Luna to be her dueling partner?

11/14/2015 c7 starboy454
good update

11/14/2015 c7 treemaster
Great !

11/14/2015 c7 2lynxreader
a good story, but you could do with a beta reader to help with spelling and grammar issues. including, but not necessarily limited to:

an "isle" is a small island. an "aisle" is a narrow space left clear for walking through. they're pronounced the same, but spelled differently.

if you aren't clear on the difference between "the ground" and "a floor", allow me to come visit your house. i'll wear my muddy, filthy boots as i tromp all through your living room, *just to make the point*.
the only time you have a "floor" outdoors is when you're talking about a "forest floor", and in that case you need to say so explicitly.
honestly, i do not know why this particular error is becoming so very common among younger writers these days. do you kids never take your boots off?

"parameter" and "perimeter" are pronounced ALMOST the same, but mean very different things. though i'm not sure this is actually wrong in this chapter, since i can well imagine a "parameter ward" might be a thing in your story too.

and Ginny was a horrible waste of a potentially great character on JKR's behalf. i mean, there's just so much you could do with her in canon! she went from stammering fangirl with her elbow in the butter to leading lady married to the hero, so there's a coming-of-age story there; she went from mind control victim near death to someone who apparently figured big in the DA in Hogwarts during the Snape/Carrows era, so there's overcoming great struggles and young heroism there; there's all the family connections of a spoiled only daughter of a woman who apparently wanted a daughter BADLY as she grows up through her brothers flying the coop and getting married, plus getting her own connections outside the family, so there's a social-network tale too; there's just so very much Ginny Weasley COULD have been, that Rowling never showed us.

i really think if she'd been a better fleshed out character in canon, people wouldn't have taken it so badly that she ended up with Harry in the end. the problem with that pairing was mostly, i think, that she came out of nowhere - this never-detailed, never-explained, two-dimensional background character suddenly and for no reason popping onto centre stage. people want the harmony pairing (and i do too, i confess) because Hermione was the female character who got all the details and explanation AS a character, so she seemed like she *deserved* to be the leading lady. but if Ginny had got half of that, i think she easily could have been, too.

11/14/2015 c7 10Philosophize
FYI, it's c'mon, not common.

11/12/2015 c6 5Salathi
OMG amazing, keep it coming please.