for The Gamer of Change(Dead)1/16/2018 c6 obama
plz continu iz guud :D
plz continu iz guud :D
1/15/2018 c3 SimonH2009
I like the author's enthusiasm.
That said, the author seems to have a poor grasp of the English language. I strongly recommend a "Beta Reader" / Editor be advised before publishing updates, due to large volume of spelling mistakes, gramatical quirks, and so-on.
I wish you the best of luck in your future writings, and hope to see more content soon!
I like the author's enthusiasm.
That said, the author seems to have a poor grasp of the English language. I strongly recommend a "Beta Reader" / Editor be advised before publishing updates, due to large volume of spelling mistakes, gramatical quirks, and so-on.
I wish you the best of luck in your future writings, and hope to see more content soon!
12/19/2017 c1 Guest
There's no space between speech marks, I'll show you below, the first one is correct:
"My name is Bob."
" My name is Bob. "
You should probably fix that.
There's no space between speech marks, I'll show you below, the first one is correct:
"My name is Bob."
" My name is Bob. "
You should probably fix that.
12/17/2017 c1 
8marsolino
The idea is sound but there are a lot of errors in the writing and I just can’t keep reading while mentally correcting them. Hope you get a good beta for the future
8marsolinoThe idea is sound but there are a lot of errors in the writing and I just can’t keep reading while mentally correcting them. Hope you get a good beta for the future
10/17/2017 c1 The Communist Banana
Wow I had no idea Shepard was 83 at the start of the game, she looks good for having one foot in the grave
Wow I had no idea Shepard was 83 at the start of the game, she looks good for having one foot in the grave
10/11/2017 c1 05chaloner
please, for the love of god check your work before submitting it, its like trying to read a dyslexic toddler's writing.
please, for the love of god check your work before submitting it, its like trying to read a dyslexic toddler's writing.
10/6/2017 c6 Friend of the Dark
Good story so far. I like the concept the only thing that I have a problem with would be grammar. In places it seems like you forgot words. Words are misspelled and you keep switching between first person, second person, and third person (I, you, he/she/it) point of views.
Good story so far. I like the concept the only thing that I have a problem with would be grammar. In places it seems like you forgot words. Words are misspelled and you keep switching between first person, second person, and third person (I, you, he/she/it) point of views.
9/28/2017 c6 Guest
great so far looking forward to him meeting the council keep going
great so far looking forward to him meeting the council keep going
9/12/2017 c6 MattKennedy
Yay for Max implanting the knowledge of Slipspace into his dad. :D Looking forward to how he introduces other advancements.
Yay for Max implanting the knowledge of Slipspace into his dad. :D Looking forward to how he introduces other advancements.
9/6/2017 c5 k
they will be to old the game states around 2180
they will be to old the game states around 2180