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10/20/2020 c2 2k+Hawki
Again, short. I also feel it kind of borders breaking the site's rules on script formats - yeah, it's technically not a script, but damn if it doesn't feel like it. I mean, as far as scripts go, it flows well enough, and it feels like appropriate teenage banter, but could have benefitted from additional framing/context.
12/28/2016 c1 AvidReader2236
I love that you shine the light on virtually unknown characters. The original 40 list is a great resource and I'm surprised people don't make better use of it.
11/19/2015 c1 Hawki
A Harry Potter MMO. Well, that would work. Course everyone knows that Hufflepuff would need buffing in regards to game balance. ;)

Anyway, nice short. It obviously benefits from being tied into the battle in book 7, but the writing itself works very well in the context. If anything, that you've used a character as obscure as Su Li adds to it, since it's very much a "everyman" scenario, said everyman understandably being nervous, and in the company of other afraid people as well.

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