for The Tale Of Soma Yoshida1/1/2016 c1 
1Demon Damian
What a wonderful first chapter. I absolutely love it. Especially that last part. It gave me tingles. But now I have some question before I review for the second chapter a it will affect it. If you could repy to me that would be great.
Should I consider Soma Yoshida completely different from Soma Yukihira? As in attitudes or everything? Because this Soma part is screwing with me and I need a definite answer on if I should view this completely separate from Soma Yukihira or if there are some similarities or whatever.
Thank you.
1Demon DamianWhat a wonderful first chapter. I absolutely love it. Especially that last part. It gave me tingles. But now I have some question before I review for the second chapter a it will affect it. If you could repy to me that would be great.
Should I consider Soma Yoshida completely different from Soma Yukihira? As in attitudes or everything? Because this Soma part is screwing with me and I need a definite answer on if I should view this completely separate from Soma Yukihira or if there are some similarities or whatever.
Thank you.
12/22/2015 c2 1Hinate
Soma x Erina Forever...
It was really Op xD
thanks for updating :D
cant wait for more ...
1HinateSoma x Erina Forever...
It was really Op xD
thanks for updating :D
cant wait for more ...
12/21/2015 c2 3dreamingofthemoon
Well, I'm just glad to see some activity on this story. There are too few good stories for Soma right now. Clearly I can't give you much feedback from just two short chapters, but I'd advice you to put some more time and effort in describing the food. Food writing is all about the sensual and the sensuous. Capture those two elements if you want this story to work well.
For example - Enticing aroma of what? What did the smell evoke apart from just saying it was 'delicious'? The egg - How did it appear? To cook an egg is simple, but to get it just right requires practice and talent. Erina has a good eye. Did she find the egg worthy? What else was in the pot? You described his knife skills with the potato, but that was about it. You keep saying things like 'She shivered with pleasure' or 'She moaned' or 'Sudden pleasure overwhelmed her mind'. In the manga, you always know WHAT causes the reaction. Here, you don't have visuals to do part of the work for you. You have to explain what causes these things.
If you're saving details to do a grand reveal kind of thing, you will have to update much more frequently, otherwise your readers will have to keep re-reading previous chapters to understand what's happening.
3dreamingofthemoonWell, I'm just glad to see some activity on this story. There are too few good stories for Soma right now. Clearly I can't give you much feedback from just two short chapters, but I'd advice you to put some more time and effort in describing the food. Food writing is all about the sensual and the sensuous. Capture those two elements if you want this story to work well.
For example - Enticing aroma of what? What did the smell evoke apart from just saying it was 'delicious'? The egg - How did it appear? To cook an egg is simple, but to get it just right requires practice and talent. Erina has a good eye. Did she find the egg worthy? What else was in the pot? You described his knife skills with the potato, but that was about it. You keep saying things like 'She shivered with pleasure' or 'She moaned' or 'Sudden pleasure overwhelmed her mind'. In the manga, you always know WHAT causes the reaction. Here, you don't have visuals to do part of the work for you. You have to explain what causes these things.
If you're saving details to do a grand reveal kind of thing, you will have to update much more frequently, otherwise your readers will have to keep re-reading previous chapters to understand what's happening.
10/29/2015 c1 Miya
Ooohhhh! This is awesome! But Yoshida? I'm sure you have your reasons for changing some things but I could care any less,as long as his name is Souma I can still deceive my brain.
Damn it. Been waiting for the good Souma and Erina fanfics to update but no such luck. This is as good as its going to get huh?
At the very least update this fic regularly.
Looking forward to more.
Ooohhhh! This is awesome! But Yoshida? I'm sure you have your reasons for changing some things but I could care any less,as long as his name is Souma I can still deceive my brain.
Damn it. Been waiting for the good Souma and Erina fanfics to update but no such luck. This is as good as its going to get huh?
At the very least update this fic regularly.
Looking forward to more.
10/29/2015 c1 Anonymous
You going to continue this? So far so good
You going to continue this? So far so good