for Free effect10/31/2015 c1 TheOnceUnknown
Looks promising, I just hope that you don't abandon the story like many other writers for Freespace on this site.
Good luck, and I hope for decently quick updates so people dont lose interest in the story.
Looks promising, I just hope that you don't abandon the story like many other writers for Freespace on this site.
Good luck, and I hope for decently quick updates so people dont lose interest in the story.
10/30/2015 c1 
2TychoV
The first story is always the hardest to publish, so congratulations for transitioning from a reader to a writer. Keep up the effort.
Now given the fact that you know your English could be and is an issue, I would recommend that you reach out to the Beta community in order to get someone else to proof-reader and advise you on your work. Having someone available to read and review your chapters before you post will help you catch plot errors and style issues before you publish.
One the topic is style, I am of the opinion that less is more. You don't need to explain everything before in your Author's Note. If fact the longer you take to actually get into the story, the most likely someone is to click away. Good writing and an engaging plot will do more to hold the reader, than tech info dumps and background info. If that info is important to the plot, you can work it into the story. If it doesn't move the plot along, then don't bother with it. If a fan wants to know the background, they will ask.
All in all, a solid start. You clearly have alot of ideas and the drive to get them down on. That really is the hardest part. Just focus on where you want the story to go, prune away the unneeded bits, and you'll do fine
2TychoVThe first story is always the hardest to publish, so congratulations for transitioning from a reader to a writer. Keep up the effort.
Now given the fact that you know your English could be and is an issue, I would recommend that you reach out to the Beta community in order to get someone else to proof-reader and advise you on your work. Having someone available to read and review your chapters before you post will help you catch plot errors and style issues before you publish.
One the topic is style, I am of the opinion that less is more. You don't need to explain everything before in your Author's Note. If fact the longer you take to actually get into the story, the most likely someone is to click away. Good writing and an engaging plot will do more to hold the reader, than tech info dumps and background info. If that info is important to the plot, you can work it into the story. If it doesn't move the plot along, then don't bother with it. If a fan wants to know the background, they will ask.
All in all, a solid start. You clearly have alot of ideas and the drive to get them down on. That really is the hardest part. Just focus on where you want the story to go, prune away the unneeded bits, and you'll do fine