for A Different World11/14/2015 c1 
2MorteTorment
Decent enough fan novelization. Hope that you're currently working on more since it's been a week and a half since the first chapter.
Either way, keep it up.
2MorteTormentDecent enough fan novelization. Hope that you're currently working on more since it's been a week and a half since the first chapter.
Either way, keep it up.
11/13/2015 c1 1Darman Skirata
High INT is good, but a two in LUCK? That's really bad in the other games...
1Darman SkirataHigh INT is good, but a two in LUCK? That's really bad in the other games...
11/11/2015 c1 EthanTheRenegade
minor grammatical errors, but a good start. will keep checking back for more.
minor grammatical errors, but a good start. will keep checking back for more.
11/7/2015 c1 Shayan
You are truly talented when it comes to storytelling, it was amazing as far as story structure goes. The only problem that drove me insane was the lack of commas. It ruins the flow of the sentences. Considering the fact that my only gripes with this have been purely editorial, you truly did a great job. See you in the wasteland!
You are truly talented when it comes to storytelling, it was amazing as far as story structure goes. The only problem that drove me insane was the lack of commas. It ruins the flow of the sentences. Considering the fact that my only gripes with this have been purely editorial, you truly did a great job. See you in the wasteland!
11/4/2015 c1 Yoshi400x7
My God. That was such an amazing beginning of a story. Only the first chapter and you have already sucked me into it so much that I'm not reading the story but actually watching it play out inside my head. You, are a master at making stories. Please make more and continue with this story. You have the gift, Use It!
My God. That was such an amazing beginning of a story. Only the first chapter and you have already sucked me into it so much that I'm not reading the story but actually watching it play out inside my head. You, are a master at making stories. Please make more and continue with this story. You have the gift, Use It!