for Bardock's Future3/21/2020 c13 
33Tellemicus Sundance
Okay, I gotta be honest here. This whole thing with Gohan somehow inheriting Bardock's foresight powers is really irksome to me. Not only did Gohan exhibit ZERO 'symptoms' of it in canon, but him inheriting it at all makes even less sense! Goku had already been born before Bardock even got infected with it, so it somehow being a part of his genes doesn't fit. And him somehow passing it on to his grandson doesn't seem possible given the 'cloudy state' it is within him, that he has zero control of it, and/or that he's never trained with Gohan.
IE: Gohan having foresight just doesn't make sense to me!
So, yeah, that's a major negative to me. If you do come back and rewrite this story, I HEAVILY recommend you remove this part from the new version!
33Tellemicus SundanceOkay, I gotta be honest here. This whole thing with Gohan somehow inheriting Bardock's foresight powers is really irksome to me. Not only did Gohan exhibit ZERO 'symptoms' of it in canon, but him inheriting it at all makes even less sense! Goku had already been born before Bardock even got infected with it, so it somehow being a part of his genes doesn't fit. And him somehow passing it on to his grandson doesn't seem possible given the 'cloudy state' it is within him, that he has zero control of it, and/or that he's never trained with Gohan.
IE: Gohan having foresight just doesn't make sense to me!
So, yeah, that's a major negative to me. If you do come back and rewrite this story, I HEAVILY recommend you remove this part from the new version!
3/21/2020 c6 Tellemicus Sundance
Though I expected it, seeing you follow the trend of Goku marrying Chichi, and clearly deciding to NOT do anything new and creative with the storyline as a result, was rather disappointing for me. Oh well.
Though I expected it, seeing you follow the trend of Goku marrying Chichi, and clearly deciding to NOT do anything new and creative with the storyline as a result, was rather disappointing for me. Oh well.
3/21/2020 c2 Tellemicus Sundance
Huh, not a bad start. Much better than quite a few 'Bardock comes to Earth' stories I've read. Definitely caught my interest.
You know, I can't help but feel that Bardock's presence here could have some rather interesting repercussions to future relationships if he makes himself known to the group. I mean, we all know just how...whimsical Bulma could be at this point in her life. I could EASILY see her developing a rather potent crush on Bardock. And that, years later, could cause her to become even more interested in Goku when she sees him all grown up, and closer to her age than Bardock. Maybe she'd try to make a move on him and 'fight' Chichi for him? Of course, that could just be the wishful thinking of an unrepentant Goku/Bulma fan. But still!
Huh, not a bad start. Much better than quite a few 'Bardock comes to Earth' stories I've read. Definitely caught my interest.
You know, I can't help but feel that Bardock's presence here could have some rather interesting repercussions to future relationships if he makes himself known to the group. I mean, we all know just how...whimsical Bulma could be at this point in her life. I could EASILY see her developing a rather potent crush on Bardock. And that, years later, could cause her to become even more interested in Goku when she sees him all grown up, and closer to her age than Bardock. Maybe she'd try to make a move on him and 'fight' Chichi for him? Of course, that could just be the wishful thinking of an unrepentant Goku/Bulma fan. But still!
10/26/2019 c13 SuperVegitoFAN
I swear ive tried out this story before but ended up quitting.
I think it was due to the db era not being as polished as the saiyan saga but just a guess.
This story, to me atleast, REALLY grows the beard in the saiyan saga.
Im sad theres only 4 chapters left currently cause i want more
I swear ive tried out this story before but ended up quitting.
I think it was due to the db era not being as polished as the saiyan saga but just a guess.
This story, to me atleast, REALLY grows the beard in the saiyan saga.
Im sad theres only 4 chapters left currently cause i want more
5/10/2019 c17 8Kara47
This is the best Bardock story yet, most if the time when read Bardock story, Goku is always indifferent relationship wise with his father. I'm glad to see that Goku' s personality has altered with the presence of his father around and how he reflects about his heritage. Same thing for raditz too, he's thinks differently upon his relationship with his father and the life he had lived because of his absence. The story is really good, can't wait to read more.
8Kara47This is the best Bardock story yet, most if the time when read Bardock story, Goku is always indifferent relationship wise with his father. I'm glad to see that Goku' s personality has altered with the presence of his father around and how he reflects about his heritage. Same thing for raditz too, he's thinks differently upon his relationship with his father and the life he had lived because of his absence. The story is really good, can't wait to read more.
4/9/2019 c6 SeigZeon
I am loving this goku :3 for a moment I thought goku would get with bluma guess not
I am loving this goku :3 for a moment I thought goku would get with bluma guess not
3/22/2019 c17 1TheDarkChronist
A great story, indeed. Well written, well thought and fulfilling. The depth and humanity it gave to Nappa, Bardock, Kami and Raditz was marvelous, and refreshing. For a moment you had me hoping that Bulma would be paired with someone else than that insufferable arrogant prick, but alas you crushed my hopes in a certain author's note. Oh well.
Other than that, all the possible questions that could have arised as the story went on were answered in kind further on, like why Bardock didn't brought Gine back and all that. So good work on that regard.
Was the "Kaio-what?" a reference to Dragon Ball Abridged? Heh, I hope it was.
Anyway, really good work, truly. I wait eagerly for the next update, no matter how long till then.
1TheDarkChronistA great story, indeed. Well written, well thought and fulfilling. The depth and humanity it gave to Nappa, Bardock, Kami and Raditz was marvelous, and refreshing. For a moment you had me hoping that Bulma would be paired with someone else than that insufferable arrogant prick, but alas you crushed my hopes in a certain author's note. Oh well.
Other than that, all the possible questions that could have arised as the story went on were answered in kind further on, like why Bardock didn't brought Gine back and all that. So good work on that regard.
Was the "Kaio-what?" a reference to Dragon Ball Abridged? Heh, I hope it was.
Anyway, really good work, truly. I wait eagerly for the next update, no matter how long till then.
2/8/2019 c17 Lizzie
Hey. The last few days were amazing reading this story; It's funny, sweet, beatiful and incredible, I like the plot, the explanations about everything, the difference between this plot and the canon and the way you describe things. I like how you created Bardock, how is his relationship with Goku and with everyone else, also, is very interisting the personality of Raditz and how he's treating Goku in this point of the story. Anyway, I love your work and I'm looking foward of your next update. Keep like that. Love, Lizzie.
PD. If any part of this review sounds strange, well, my native language is spanish and my english is kind of lame except for reading it (Thanks god).
Hey. The last few days were amazing reading this story; It's funny, sweet, beatiful and incredible, I like the plot, the explanations about everything, the difference between this plot and the canon and the way you describe things. I like how you created Bardock, how is his relationship with Goku and with everyone else, also, is very interisting the personality of Raditz and how he's treating Goku in this point of the story. Anyway, I love your work and I'm looking foward of your next update. Keep like that. Love, Lizzie.
PD. If any part of this review sounds strange, well, my native language is spanish and my english is kind of lame except for reading it (Thanks god).
1/21/2019 c17 1lolistarkiller
I'm in love with this fanfic! I can't wait for the GinexBardock reunion! Please update again soon my most talented friend!
1lolistarkillerI'm in love with this fanfic! I can't wait for the GinexBardock reunion! Please update again soon my most talented friend!
12/9/2018 c8 invinoveri
Bardock one of the baddest dudes in the galaxy, who's wiped out entire civilizations and you're having him angst like a goth school girl.. jesus
Bardock one of the baddest dudes in the galaxy, who's wiped out entire civilizations and you're having him angst like a goth school girl.. jesus
12/9/2018 c5 invinoveri
Sometimes I think you have a good characterization of Saiyans and Bardock other times I'm shaking my head saying nope. Good tip is less angst. Less feels between Father and Son. Less is more in this case.
Also, a good example of what I think of as Sayian behavior would have been when Goku and Bardock received the armor from Bulma both would have disrobed in front of everyone showing Saiyans don't have a strong nudity taboo.
Sometimes I think you have a good characterization of Saiyans and Bardock other times I'm shaking my head saying nope. Good tip is less angst. Less feels between Father and Son. Less is more in this case.
Also, a good example of what I think of as Sayian behavior would have been when Goku and Bardock received the armor from Bulma both would have disrobed in front of everyone showing Saiyans don't have a strong nudity taboo.
12/8/2018 c7 Guest
Ruined goku
Ruined goku
12/7/2018 c17 5Gamelover41592
excellent work on this chapter and man a lot of deep stuff in this well done :)
5Gamelover41592excellent work on this chapter and man a lot of deep stuff in this well done :)