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for Enduring the Flames of War

12/1/2015 c1 someguy420
I'd say not to go the predictable route and give ME tech too much credit, but it seems I'm too late (given the whole stolen rifle thing). Another promising story dragged down by utter predictability.
11/30/2015 c1 Guest
Nice pilot! Can't wait to see where you'll take it moving forward.
11/30/2015 c1 Jesus
All in all good, you messed up on "look up them" but thats all i saw in casual reading, gimme moaar
11/30/2015 c1 Guest
Flood?
11/30/2015 c1 6ChaosHorizon
Dude. I despise you for this cliff hanger. update soon!
11/30/2015 c1 SPARTAN-262
Holy sweet Jesus' foreskin, you've done it again: Another awesome piece of work! I'm so excited!

(Cough) now that I've got that out of my system, to the review!

1) Something that confused me here was the layout of the Asari ship: why is the research lab "down the hall" from the mess room? It's not that much of a big deal, just had me scratching my head. Maybe Asari researchers just like to have snacks often?

2) When Joker fired on the hanger bay doors, why didn't the Asari ship's shields block the shot, were the shields turned off? Also, why didn't the whole bay decompress when the doors were blown open? A force-field to keep the air in?

3) A small detail I just thought of (that I'm confident you'll explain in the next chapter), where's Cortana? When chief went into cryo, didn't he put her in the holo pedestal? EDI said something's blocking her (is EDI a her?), and the only thing I can think of that can stop EDI is Cortana. Did The Chief not remove her from his helmet when he went to sleep, or did The Chief just find her somewhere?

4) I'm curious how you'll introduce the Master Chief to Shepard and her crew withought him just straight up murdering them all. I mean, let's be realistic here, this is the guy that can dodge bullets and bitch-slapped an anti-tank, air to ground missile, I'm pretty sure Shepard and crew wouldn't be able to win a fight with him. So that leaves diplomacy... Good luck with that. 30 year war with aliens, go to sleep, wake up surrounded by aliens who shoot at him, then another group composed of a bunch of different aliens and one red-headed human turn up. I can't really see The Chief treating Shepard any differently than the Turians and Asari. I'm interested to see how you'll do this.

But please please please, I'm begging you, don't be lazy and just have a biotic trap The Chief with a "stasis" and then have a nice chat. Most biotics have trouble lifting 100kg, with stronger biotics like Krogan battle masters (with centuries of experience) lifting around 300kg of weight. The Chief can flip a 6000kg Scorpion tank. I can say with confidence that most biotics wouldn't have much of an effect on him due to his bulk/mass, speed and raw strength.

Hmm, I'm rambling, I guess details like this are up to you, really.

4) What armour is The Chief wearing? His Halo 3 version? Halo 4s appearance? Or Halo 5 Guardians with the Spartan abilities?

And that's it, no spelling errors that I could see, your wrighting quality is top-notch and I eagerly await for the next chapter!
11/30/2015 c1 JAYzNZ
This is good, really good. If the story continues at this level you could have one of the best, if not the best story in this catagory, in my opinion.
Well done and I look forward to reading more.
11/30/2015 c1 6Sightbent
Really nice start, definitely different than how a lot of Halo/Mass Effect crossovers begin. I'm looking forward to reading more.
11/30/2015 c1 helkil
more
11/30/2015 c1 Denalian
Looks good. Not many mistakes from what I can see so far. Somewhat similar/different intro to the story. Intriguing as well. Can't wait for more and keep it up!

-Denalian
11/30/2015 c1 7six samurai of dragon order
oooohhhhh, nice.
11/30/2015 c1 1fred4533
J'attends la suite pour donner mon avis. Tout ce que je peux dire, c'est un bon d├ębut.
11/30/2015 c1 FORGEMaster
Call me intrigued
11/30/2015 c1 MrDudzky
Ohhhh mc reks 'em all! Nice start for sure, i wonder how samara will react to the mc joining the crew.

Well have my follow kind sir!
11/30/2015 c1 22edboy4926
Good intro.
Looking forward to more.
Question, are Halo and ME in the same universe or did Chief end up in another universe?
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