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1/25/2019 c1 1xxxsumerallxxx
Wowowee romance was captivating it was powerful tearjerking. it was so suspensful i think about this fanfiction everynight well i sleep i NEED an ending. pleas eplease PLESE CONTINUE!111!
12/19/2018 c1 Ur mom
it needs barry b benson and obama fucking
1/28/2017 c6 Beezarene Buzz
Where is the next chapter? And what is Beerts secret abeelity? WE NEED ANSWERS!
1/7/2017 c2 3Blueflame133
lol to the guy or gal who commented below me. I feel ya, but I didn't make a Bee movie fanfiction for it to read well and for things to make sense or for it to be easy for the reader. I made this because of a joke between my girlfriend and I. Sorry if its kinda shitty but it was the point. Ive got way worse planned for this shitshow
12/22/2016 c1 Inkydoodle4
Overall, I enjoyed this little OC insert bee movie story. However, there were a few notes that I made during my experience as a reader.

Firstly, I noticed that when a character is internally monologueing, you disregard the speech marks's necessity. When a character is saying something - either outside or to themselves - speech marks are used. Funnily enough, the reason why they are called speech marks is because they mark speech. This does not discriminate between internal or external speech.

Secondly, the only characters that you seem to introduce are Jena and Beert (exquisite bee pun, by the way). Other times, you seem to have forgotten to give names to characters. For instance, early on in the story you write: ""Good Morning Jena" replied." I assume that you were supposed to write a name of some sort after this, but you either forgot to entirely, or were saving it for later when you finally have come up with a name for them.

Also, some of the bee puns change the phonemes of the words, like "Beell" which I assume is your attempt to mash the words 'bee' and 'bell' together. This works in theory, but when read aloud it changes the sounds of 'bell', which ruins the entire pun and is overall just a bad time.

Those are just a few notes, put please don't let this discourage you, let this inspire you to create even better content. The only way is up from here.
12/16/2016 c1 Barry Bee Benson
very sexy would recommend for infants of 60 years
6/26/2016 c2 xxxdisappionted
Overall i am very dissatisfied at the lack of bee puns. i havent even seen one and i cant beelieve it. Honey please, if your gonna write a story about bees, please use the correct language appropriate with it and needs more bee on bee action if you know what i meen
5/19/2016 c5 Guest
THIS IS BEEULLSHIT I BEED AN BEENDING IBEEDIATELY
TRANSLATE: THIS IS BULLSHIT I NEED AN ENDING IMMEDIATELY WHAT HAPPENS BETWEEN BEERT AND JENA HOW DOES THE DATE GO BAD I NEEEEEDDD 2222 K NNOWOWS W VDSKNDPFnflka
5/18/2016 c1 barry bee
made bee moist
5/6/2016 c5 ses
sex
4/15/2016 c5 beert
fuck you
3/28/2016 c5 Kill me
Beert reveals that he is beesexual and has been sleeping with bee-rtholomew the school's leading male bee-rleader
3/24/2016 c6 9ZeroFoxGiven
Beeriliant! Beeautiful! Beeyond Beelief! These were the words that came to mind when I read this stunning masterpiece! Wonderfully captivating, I rate an 8/8!
2/21/2016 c5 Guest
It was beetastic
2/12/2016 c1 1thatShadowRealmthough
I love this story so much I can hardly beelieve it
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