for New World3/10/2020 c3 Tony McNucklz
additionally, if your character is a nightingale, i would have expected her to have taken a few seconds to loot the orcs for at least a blade. in fact, if the orcs had a pile of weopons/armor from looting the other elves, your character whould absolutely have grabbed a few things.
additionally, if your character is a nightingale, i would have expected her to have taken a few seconds to loot the orcs for at least a blade. in fact, if the orcs had a pile of weopons/armor from looting the other elves, your character whould absolutely have grabbed a few things.
3/10/2020 c3 Tony McNucklz
overexageration. the idea that 12 orcs would be a match for elrond is ludicrous. movie or books, characters with literal millennia less of martial training and experience kill dozens in fights, hundreds over the series as a whole. obvious logical fallacies like this suspend the suspension of disbelief because elronds wife would know this. further you have her behaving like a human. she isn't.
furthermore: if fae really is sexually experienced with multiple very attractive partners, she shouldn't be blushing at a little leg. only the sexually amd socially inexperienced actually blush. this is something very few online authors seem to understand for some unknown reason.
overexageration. the idea that 12 orcs would be a match for elrond is ludicrous. movie or books, characters with literal millennia less of martial training and experience kill dozens in fights, hundreds over the series as a whole. obvious logical fallacies like this suspend the suspension of disbelief because elronds wife would know this. further you have her behaving like a human. she isn't.
furthermore: if fae really is sexually experienced with multiple very attractive partners, she shouldn't be blushing at a little leg. only the sexually amd socially inexperienced actually blush. this is something very few online authors seem to understand for some unknown reason.
3/10/2020 c2 Tony McNucklz
the "you heard nothing" bit. again with a common human interaction trope, but now from a 5000 year old elf. there hasn't been much diologue yet, but if reducing every single character into the same tropey fan service cliche is normal, i won't last much longer before i go looking for original writing.
the "you heard nothing" bit. again with a common human interaction trope, but now from a 5000 year old elf. there hasn't been much diologue yet, but if reducing every single character into the same tropey fan service cliche is normal, i won't last much longer before i go looking for original writing.
3/10/2020 c1 Tony McNucklz
you made the gods behave in a tropey men-are-afraid-of-angry-female bullshittery. real people, real guys don't cringe and cower to angry women. I'd imagine gods would be even less likely. don't apply bullshit entertainment industry and single internet people tropes if you want your characters and story taken seriously. it's much worse here because you did it to god-like beings, and anthropomorphizing gods is beyond rediculous. why would immortal godlike denizens of higher planes have the behavior patterns and moral chart of humans?
you made the gods behave in a tropey men-are-afraid-of-angry-female bullshittery. real people, real guys don't cringe and cower to angry women. I'd imagine gods would be even less likely. don't apply bullshit entertainment industry and single internet people tropes if you want your characters and story taken seriously. it's much worse here because you did it to god-like beings, and anthropomorphizing gods is beyond rediculous. why would immortal godlike denizens of higher planes have the behavior patterns and moral chart of humans?
12/21/2019 c15 sugoijack9
She shouldn't look for Morgoth for she would accidentally brought him back and bring an even worse outcome to the world.
She shouldn't look for Morgoth for she would accidentally brought him back and bring an even worse outcome to the world.
12/21/2019 c10 sugoijack9
oh my god, galadriel would never enter valinor upon doing such heinous thing against a guest
oh my god, galadriel would never enter valinor upon doing such heinous thing against a guest
10/29/2019 c2 chickenbass
It will be interesting to see the hard very definable magics of Skyrim interact with the vague stuff that happens in middle Earth.
It will be interesting to see the hard very definable magics of Skyrim interact with the vague stuff that happens in middle Earth.
10/29/2019 c1 chickenbass
I like her personality! It will be fun to see her mess with the good Christian values of lotr
I like her personality! It will be fun to see her mess with the good Christian values of lotr
9/18/2019 c5 
10AutumnSouls
Because I'm an obnoxious lore-picker: Celebrian would likely not know about the Balrog. Her father, Celeborn, expresses surprise and horror when he hears it was a Balrog when the Fellowship reaches Lothlorien. So I doubt Celebrian would know.
That said, I like this fic a lot. Fae is fun, though sometimes her behavior pushes past light heartedness and into absurdity and being a little unbearable. It's still been a long time since a fic has captured my attention, so kudos! Good writing, perfect grammar, a fun powerful character, and a great time period in LOTR.
10AutumnSoulsBecause I'm an obnoxious lore-picker: Celebrian would likely not know about the Balrog. Her father, Celeborn, expresses surprise and horror when he hears it was a Balrog when the Fellowship reaches Lothlorien. So I doubt Celebrian would know.
That said, I like this fic a lot. Fae is fun, though sometimes her behavior pushes past light heartedness and into absurdity and being a little unbearable. It's still been a long time since a fic has captured my attention, so kudos! Good writing, perfect grammar, a fun powerful character, and a great time period in LOTR.
9/1/2019 c2 Guest
Oh great. Rapey guys.
1) Elves can't be raped.
2) Orcs know 1)
3) Orcs aren't interested.
4) Seriously. Stop with rapey guys as villains.
5) FFS, at least my dragonborn knows healing magic. Did this incompetent DB not learn healing hands or grand healing?
Oh great. Rapey guys.
1) Elves can't be raped.
2) Orcs know 1)
3) Orcs aren't interested.
4) Seriously. Stop with rapey guys as villains.
5) FFS, at least my dragonborn knows healing magic. Did this incompetent DB not learn healing hands or grand healing?