Just In
Community
Forum
V
More
for When Did My Life Become a Bad Action Movie?

1/1/2016 c1 44Thescarredman
Excellent work, Piero. Never guessed you were such a talented writer. Good sentence structure in the intro, before the action writing replaces exposition. Pacing of the action scenes is perfectly in sync to what's going on, and no s&g mistakes to slow down the reader's headlong rush to the blue Suburban's rescue. The main character is believable and sympathetic, and there are no false notes with the supporting cast. All in all, a very good read, and I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

By the way, I've never seen an epi of Full Metal Panic, and have no idea what it's about except from this fic. That's okay; your work reads like original fiction, entertaining without prior knowledge. Keep up the good work.

Desktop/Tablet Mode . Blog . Twitter . Help . Sign Up  Top