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3/29/2017 c5 2Forget4me
I like the story as it is so far, especially with the relation between Naruto and the rest of the team. I also deeply appreciate that you're throwing in elements that'll help define it beyond the main plot behind RWBY, though I hope you diverge more and more to make it your own.

The biggest thing that got to me, especially in the beginning of the fic, was the constant switch between past and present tense when describing actions. In the later chapters, it's barely noticeable, but just thought I should point that out so you can continue to refine your skills as a writer!

I hope for more past snippets between Kushina and Naruto as their relationship as mother and son (one who had been dead for over a decade and the other orphaned for the same amount of time) being reunited would be ripe with potential avenues to explore, and it is a little saddening that we're thrust into the end of any reconciliation and any revelations of how Naruto was treated or what secrets were kept from him. I know it's not as important now that they're in Remnant, but those sorts of things would undoubtedly leave mental scars on a kid.

Hope you continue your work and I want to see where it goes!
3/28/2017 c5 SlyFox9
Hey thanks for the update after for so long. I can't wait for more and hope for more humor, action, and romance for Naruto. I feel uncomfortable for Kushina having some sort of attraction to Leon. I prefer Kushina being loyal to Minato they're my second favorite narutoverse pairing, while Naruto and Hinata are in first.
3/27/2017 c5 4Major Simi
Nice chapter
3/26/2017 c5 Akamatt
Good Chapter! You are on a roll!
3/26/2017 c5 A Lost shinobi
I really enjoy this story, and this was a great chapter irk why but the thought of kushina moving on and being back on the market really irks me, but yeah otherwise great chapter
3/26/2017 c5 Roland Tepes
This was a great chapter,
Please keep up the awesome work.
3/26/2017 c5 Guest
Will we get any clue as to the fate of the Elemental Nations, or is that Storyline OVER WITH!?
3/26/2017 c5 1Brightheart10
That ending was cute
3/26/2017 c5 doomqwer
nice dude like it good to see you back its been awhile since last update but the quality is constant so who care good luck out there and keep up the good work
3/26/2017 c5 Latherial
Good chapter, looking forward to what happens next.
3/26/2017 c5 Lordgoth
Naruto should get Weiss in his harem as well!
3/26/2017 c5 bankai777
Will Kushina meet Raven Branwen.
3/26/2017 c5 21Czar Joseph
Awesome chapter, about time you came around. Hope the next one comes.

Man, another exercise. Thank you for announce Ren's semblance.
3/26/2017 c5 3RHatch89
Awesome update :)
3/26/2017 c5 bladetri
like XD
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