for Linked in Life and Love10/4 c103 Corphicks814420
Sooo….. the MY HERO ACADEMIA series is finally over, I’m pretty sure that gives you all the material you need to make sure you don’t need to constantly change things of your story DEKIRU to fit the original plot line.
Sooo….. the MY HERO ACADEMIA series is finally over, I’m pretty sure that gives you all the material you need to make sure you don’t need to constantly change things of your story DEKIRU to fit the original plot line.
10/2 c103 
7Sergeant Sargent II
ravens portals misfiring is a brilliant detail, I love that bit. I like to think the jacket initailly landed in the the basket of dirty laundry where Tai has it in this scene, like she subconsciously sent it not only to Tai, but to an appropriate spot for laundry.
well written emotional ride of a chapter, up to your usual standards as always.
this story is already one of my favorites, not just among fanfics, but stories original and fan, of all media types. but the way it has existed for years of my life as you write it is turning it into one of those landmark stories. sort of like the shared cultural excitement that those of us remember who read the Harry potter books as they were being written, getting to be exited over and over again with each new installment. (pardon that fucked up sentence, sorry). that drawn out presence over years has a way of embedding a story into a person's... personal mindscape? maybe I'm being over dramatic, but when this is finished, I'm making myself a quality hardcopy to keep on a bookshelf, with their bond mark on the cover, of course.
that said, I'm going to have to reread it soon to make sure I remember the details, I am definitely forgetting things. I think I first picked this up and binge read it some time between 2017 and 2019? picked it up looking for porn, as I'm sure many of us did. rather than be upset by the carefully cropped "camera angle" of the narrative, I fell in love with the story that followed instead.
Given the nature of fanfic, this will always be a small group of fans compared to mainstream anything, but we're rooting for you.
7Sergeant Sargent IIravens portals misfiring is a brilliant detail, I love that bit. I like to think the jacket initailly landed in the the basket of dirty laundry where Tai has it in this scene, like she subconsciously sent it not only to Tai, but to an appropriate spot for laundry.
well written emotional ride of a chapter, up to your usual standards as always.
this story is already one of my favorites, not just among fanfics, but stories original and fan, of all media types. but the way it has existed for years of my life as you write it is turning it into one of those landmark stories. sort of like the shared cultural excitement that those of us remember who read the Harry potter books as they were being written, getting to be exited over and over again with each new installment. (pardon that fucked up sentence, sorry). that drawn out presence over years has a way of embedding a story into a person's... personal mindscape? maybe I'm being over dramatic, but when this is finished, I'm making myself a quality hardcopy to keep on a bookshelf, with their bond mark on the cover, of course.
that said, I'm going to have to reread it soon to make sure I remember the details, I am definitely forgetting things. I think I first picked this up and binge read it some time between 2017 and 2019? picked it up looking for porn, as I'm sure many of us did. rather than be upset by the carefully cropped "camera angle" of the narrative, I fell in love with the story that followed instead.
Given the nature of fanfic, this will always be a small group of fans compared to mainstream anything, but we're rooting for you.
10/2 c103 1W8W
I was not excited when I saw that this chapter focused on Raven but as a read it it have grown on my.
You make excellent job humanizing her. Both her and Tai made mistakes but we can understand why.
I expected that I will say that despite all the problems of raising girls there were also beautiful moments but it still was beautiful moment that catches my heart.
Raven in Summer room was also very emotional.
I wonder what will be reaction to Wyvern Grimm.
Most annoying part of the chapter was talk with Ozpin as we were not informed of what he revealed to others so we don’t knew what exactly they are talking about in regard to maidens.
1W8WI was not excited when I saw that this chapter focused on Raven but as a read it it have grown on my.
You make excellent job humanizing her. Both her and Tai made mistakes but we can understand why.
I expected that I will say that despite all the problems of raising girls there were also beautiful moments but it still was beautiful moment that catches my heart.
Raven in Summer room was also very emotional.
I wonder what will be reaction to Wyvern Grimm.
Most annoying part of the chapter was talk with Ozpin as we were not informed of what he revealed to others so we don’t knew what exactly they are talking about in regard to maidens.
10/2 c103 Braeden1002
Although I wanted to see the morning after everything that happened with Weiss and to finally see her meeting with her Father and laying down the law with the mental support of everyone she loves. I think that this chapter while Raven focused was important to the story overall. This chapter showed us not Raven the Bandit Queen or Raven the mercenary leader but Raven Branwen, the woman that was on team STRQ and loved her wife Summer. We got a chance to see her without all of the barriers that she's placed around herself to protect her heart and it gives us a better understanding and idea of why she has done things the way that she has.
Although I wanted to see the morning after everything that happened with Weiss and to finally see her meeting with her Father and laying down the law with the mental support of everyone she loves. I think that this chapter while Raven focused was important to the story overall. This chapter showed us not Raven the Bandit Queen or Raven the mercenary leader but Raven Branwen, the woman that was on team STRQ and loved her wife Summer. We got a chance to see her without all of the barriers that she's placed around herself to protect her heart and it gives us a better understanding and idea of why she has done things the way that she has.
10/1 c38 Absurdum est
Re-reading through this i feel like affinities should be way more common. And tge examples that were given earlier were all very combat focused. So in my head cannon it’s similar to to Jaune’s semblance in cannon. He had no idea what it was for months until a life threatening situation forced it out of him.
So the reason why affinity all seem combat focused is that those are the ones that are helpful/noticible in high stress situations. Other Mates either don’t have an Afinity that would help the stressful situation they find themselves in, or never have something stressful enough to trigger unlocking it.
That’s my new head cannon, at least.
Re-reading through this i feel like affinities should be way more common. And tge examples that were given earlier were all very combat focused. So in my head cannon it’s similar to to Jaune’s semblance in cannon. He had no idea what it was for months until a life threatening situation forced it out of him.
So the reason why affinity all seem combat focused is that those are the ones that are helpful/noticible in high stress situations. Other Mates either don’t have an Afinity that would help the stressful situation they find themselves in, or never have something stressful enough to trigger unlocking it.
That’s my new head cannon, at least.
10/1 c103 heartfanglives
Not the chapter I was hoping for but as with most of the family drama chapters in this fic, they give this story depth. Not sure it would be half as good as it is without them. Definitely feel their dad was poorly written in canon so it’s always good to see him get fleshed out further. Can’t wait for the next few chapters! Even if it doesn’t go the direction i hope for, I’m sure the story will be better for it in the long run!
Not the chapter I was hoping for but as with most of the family drama chapters in this fic, they give this story depth. Not sure it would be half as good as it is without them. Definitely feel their dad was poorly written in canon so it’s always good to see him get fleshed out further. Can’t wait for the next few chapters! Even if it doesn’t go the direction i hope for, I’m sure the story will be better for it in the long run!
9/30 c103 DeafenedCeiling
Hello again! Excited for a bee chapter as always! I know you are doing the best you can!
First off, I feel the title of this chapter is aptly named. Raven, fir all intents and purposes, fucked up. No other way to slice it. She fucked up and she has to wear that. She can't blame anyone but herself. It doesn't matter what her reasons are or her explanations because they really don't matter in the large scheme of things. She chose this and she now has to suffer the consequences. She didn't have to leave her children behind, yet she did, si while you can empathize with her situation, it's hard to feel empathy when people outside of her had to deal with her BS.
I'm glad you highlighted Taiyang and he got some shine because the man deserves it. He suffered and took the abuse if others all to keep his promise. Was he a perfect father? No, no parent is. Yet he did the absolute best that he could and he was THERE. As far as everyone us concerned, Taiyang is Ruby and Yang's father and parent. Not Raven. Raven wasn't there. She didnt raise them and she left and she has to understand that. I understand Taiyang's frustration and trepidation as those are HIS kids. The moment she left, Raven gave up that right. Raven can't be mad at anyone but herself for that. Has to take accountability. No one wants to hear her sob story. Why? Because she involved Ruby, Yang and Taiyang in her mess as well as others. Taiyang is such a good father to both Ruby and Yang and he needs to understand NONE of his lacking experience is his fault. I know for a fact Ruby and Yang don't blame him and they love him dearly.
Seeing Yang and Ruby's argument from his perspective adds so much more context. Yang was mad, as usual, and Ruby defended Taiyang. Yang didnt like that, lashed out, and basically called Ruby a bastard child. And while Yang immediately regretted it, it struck a chord because not only does Ruby look up to Yang, Ruby already feels inadequate with being a leader and being different. To be told that by others hurts, but hearing it from your own sister obviously broke her as she refused to talk for several weeks. Ruby, can and will, shut people out and cut herself off from others and it's not a pretty sight to see.
I'm glad we finally addressed the elephant in the room which is Raven's relationship with both Ruby and Yang. Yang wants one with Raven but Ruby is a wildcard. Raven is aware she has no relationship with Ruby, which is absolutely true. She doesn't. Sure, Taiyang brought up the song, and while that's touching, you then realize the problem. Ruby associates that with Summer, not Raven. Ruby idolizes Summer and it's her reason for doing what she does. When she found out her powers, weren't like Summer's as she thought, she looked sad and then put on a fake smile. I seriously doubt that Ruby would accept Raven as her mom, let alone as a parent, because for all she cares, Raven isn't. Ruby diesmt remember her, has no deep connection like Yang does, none of that. She'll support Raven being Yang's mom, because that's what Yang wants. For her though? I don't think its realistic for Ruby to just accept her nor should we expect her too. Taiyang is right, Ruby does have a big heart, but she also has limits, this is one of them.
I'm not trying to trivialize Raven's pain, because she is hurting, but she said herself. She needs to be better. She can't expect for things to just be alright now that she's back. That's not realistic. She's at Ruby and Yang's pace. Not hers. Ruby won't jump into her arms and cry for mom. Because as of right now, she isn't. She has to work towards that and earn it. Right now, she hasn't earned anything. If Ruby lashes out, she has to eat that as she deserves that. Everyone has a breaking point and Raven coming in and acting like she knows her may just be that. It'll be a fight and if Raven is serious, she'll fight to be able to call Ruby her daughter once again. But again, she has to earn it. Her being sorry won't fix it. Actions will. Also, Raven has to be nicer. Ruby doesn't like mean people or people who treat people she likes badly lol.
Overall, this is again, one of my favorite chapters from you. It shows the mindset of everyone around and seeing where things stand. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose but I like how we don't know Ruby's thoughts at all and they have been sparse, yet we know everyone else's for the most part. It adds to the mystery and anxiety of what the conversation will be like. Don't worry, I feel the chapter turned out great. I patiently await the next release. Good job!
Hello again! Excited for a bee chapter as always! I know you are doing the best you can!
First off, I feel the title of this chapter is aptly named. Raven, fir all intents and purposes, fucked up. No other way to slice it. She fucked up and she has to wear that. She can't blame anyone but herself. It doesn't matter what her reasons are or her explanations because they really don't matter in the large scheme of things. She chose this and she now has to suffer the consequences. She didn't have to leave her children behind, yet she did, si while you can empathize with her situation, it's hard to feel empathy when people outside of her had to deal with her BS.
I'm glad you highlighted Taiyang and he got some shine because the man deserves it. He suffered and took the abuse if others all to keep his promise. Was he a perfect father? No, no parent is. Yet he did the absolute best that he could and he was THERE. As far as everyone us concerned, Taiyang is Ruby and Yang's father and parent. Not Raven. Raven wasn't there. She didnt raise them and she left and she has to understand that. I understand Taiyang's frustration and trepidation as those are HIS kids. The moment she left, Raven gave up that right. Raven can't be mad at anyone but herself for that. Has to take accountability. No one wants to hear her sob story. Why? Because she involved Ruby, Yang and Taiyang in her mess as well as others. Taiyang is such a good father to both Ruby and Yang and he needs to understand NONE of his lacking experience is his fault. I know for a fact Ruby and Yang don't blame him and they love him dearly.
Seeing Yang and Ruby's argument from his perspective adds so much more context. Yang was mad, as usual, and Ruby defended Taiyang. Yang didnt like that, lashed out, and basically called Ruby a bastard child. And while Yang immediately regretted it, it struck a chord because not only does Ruby look up to Yang, Ruby already feels inadequate with being a leader and being different. To be told that by others hurts, but hearing it from your own sister obviously broke her as she refused to talk for several weeks. Ruby, can and will, shut people out and cut herself off from others and it's not a pretty sight to see.
I'm glad we finally addressed the elephant in the room which is Raven's relationship with both Ruby and Yang. Yang wants one with Raven but Ruby is a wildcard. Raven is aware she has no relationship with Ruby, which is absolutely true. She doesn't. Sure, Taiyang brought up the song, and while that's touching, you then realize the problem. Ruby associates that with Summer, not Raven. Ruby idolizes Summer and it's her reason for doing what she does. When she found out her powers, weren't like Summer's as she thought, she looked sad and then put on a fake smile. I seriously doubt that Ruby would accept Raven as her mom, let alone as a parent, because for all she cares, Raven isn't. Ruby diesmt remember her, has no deep connection like Yang does, none of that. She'll support Raven being Yang's mom, because that's what Yang wants. For her though? I don't think its realistic for Ruby to just accept her nor should we expect her too. Taiyang is right, Ruby does have a big heart, but she also has limits, this is one of them.
I'm not trying to trivialize Raven's pain, because she is hurting, but she said herself. She needs to be better. She can't expect for things to just be alright now that she's back. That's not realistic. She's at Ruby and Yang's pace. Not hers. Ruby won't jump into her arms and cry for mom. Because as of right now, she isn't. She has to work towards that and earn it. Right now, she hasn't earned anything. If Ruby lashes out, she has to eat that as she deserves that. Everyone has a breaking point and Raven coming in and acting like she knows her may just be that. It'll be a fight and if Raven is serious, she'll fight to be able to call Ruby her daughter once again. But again, she has to earn it. Her being sorry won't fix it. Actions will. Also, Raven has to be nicer. Ruby doesn't like mean people or people who treat people she likes badly lol.
Overall, this is again, one of my favorite chapters from you. It shows the mindset of everyone around and seeing where things stand. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose but I like how we don't know Ruby's thoughts at all and they have been sparse, yet we know everyone else's for the most part. It adds to the mystery and anxiety of what the conversation will be like. Don't worry, I feel the chapter turned out great. I patiently await the next release. Good job!
9/30 c103 1Guerra Bored
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9/30 c103 10AlexusAP
Love when these chapters hit heavy subjects. In my opinion, they make the story more relatable and realistic in a way readers can see and think about these topics most people like to ignore. Look forward to your next chapter
10AlexusAPLove when these chapters hit heavy subjects. In my opinion, they make the story more relatable and realistic in a way readers can see and think about these topics most people like to ignore. Look forward to your next chapter
9/29 c103 1Nagaichi
Its awesome as always. So much is building. I am kinda hoping that Ruby kicks the shit out Jaque. I mean just a right out curb stomping. Hey a guys gotta dream..
1NagaichiIts awesome as always. So much is building. I am kinda hoping that Ruby kicks the shit out Jaque. I mean just a right out curb stomping. Hey a guys gotta dream..
9/29 c103 Blackmetalzane22
The chapter title is a God of War Ragnarok reference...I'm liking this already. Can never be too careful with Tyrian. That pause worries me... Hello, Oz. Yeah, I'm definitely wondering if Penny really IS her sister... Cause if so, Pietro's got some explaining to do. Cinder throwing hissy fits, no surprise. Yeah, wouldn't surprise me either if Salem did something to Cinder. Raven's connections probably could find some good info. I have a feeling Raven wants to talk to Tai about her "chat" with Yang.
Oof, that'll bring back memories. Oh, a Huntsman School in Menagerie would be great! And help the place be recognized more. Knew it.
Yeah...Probably one of the worst days of Yang's life. Poor Raven. Yeah Yang had to play big sis and mama. So Raven used to sing to girls when they were toddlers...Damn that's cute. Though Ruby might see it as another thing she thought was Summer but was actually Raven, but it could also help them bond. Hopefully Raven can make it work. I have faith in her, but it's not gonna be easy. Okay that flashback just gave me diabetes, that was too adorable. You'll be better, Raven, cause you WANT to be.
...Tai...What is that sketch that has you stressed?
Oh...shit...One of Tai's students saw the Wyvern...Uh-Oh.
The chapter title is a God of War Ragnarok reference...I'm liking this already. Can never be too careful with Tyrian. That pause worries me... Hello, Oz. Yeah, I'm definitely wondering if Penny really IS her sister... Cause if so, Pietro's got some explaining to do. Cinder throwing hissy fits, no surprise. Yeah, wouldn't surprise me either if Salem did something to Cinder. Raven's connections probably could find some good info. I have a feeling Raven wants to talk to Tai about her "chat" with Yang.
Oof, that'll bring back memories. Oh, a Huntsman School in Menagerie would be great! And help the place be recognized more. Knew it.
Yeah...Probably one of the worst days of Yang's life. Poor Raven. Yeah Yang had to play big sis and mama. So Raven used to sing to girls when they were toddlers...Damn that's cute. Though Ruby might see it as another thing she thought was Summer but was actually Raven, but it could also help them bond. Hopefully Raven can make it work. I have faith in her, but it's not gonna be easy. Okay that flashback just gave me diabetes, that was too adorable. You'll be better, Raven, cause you WANT to be.
...Tai...What is that sketch that has you stressed?
Oh...shit...One of Tai's students saw the Wyvern...Uh-Oh.
9/29 c103 Absurdum est
Man, Raven got punched in the feels so hard tfat I felt it. This story does such intrestibg things with keeping so much of her prickly, antagonistic character from cannon while still putting her in a much more sympathetic situation. I think we really did need a deep view on how she was dealing, especially after the… lets call it a conversation, with Yang.
Man, Raven got punched in the feels so hard tfat I felt it. This story does such intrestibg things with keeping so much of her prickly, antagonistic character from cannon while still putting her in a much more sympathetic situation. I think we really did need a deep view on how she was dealing, especially after the… lets call it a conversation, with Yang.
9/29 c103 Tyracus
Definitely wasn’t what I was expecting from this chapter after the last dealt with Whitley being the odd little menace and showing his racism/cowardice full force last chapter but it was felt right as far as pacing and giving Raven and Tai their own bit away from Yang and Ruby to have their parent moments without having to mask their true feelings.
The stinger with the dragon is also a neat reminder that it’s still out there to cause havoc whenever is dramatically most appropriate.
All in all great work and I look forward to seeing what’s next.
Definitely wasn’t what I was expecting from this chapter after the last dealt with Whitley being the odd little menace and showing his racism/cowardice full force last chapter but it was felt right as far as pacing and giving Raven and Tai their own bit away from Yang and Ruby to have their parent moments without having to mask their true feelings.
The stinger with the dragon is also a neat reminder that it’s still out there to cause havoc whenever is dramatically most appropriate.
All in all great work and I look forward to seeing what’s next.