for Nakiri's Desire9/17/2020 c11 Crimsonfiend76
Just finished this chapter, guessing since its been a while since it was updated, this story is pretty much abandoned? If that is true, then its disappointing, I'd love to see where you go from here, and who ultimately ends up with Soma.
Just finished this chapter, guessing since its been a while since it was updated, this story is pretty much abandoned? If that is true, then its disappointing, I'd love to see where you go from here, and who ultimately ends up with Soma.
9/14/2020 c6 Crimsonfiend76
Great Chapter! It totally had all the feels, and I was glad Soma wasn't written to be too dense towards her at this long - awaited reunion. Good to see he replied honestly how he treasured his memories of that day with her and seemingly was able to return her feelings for him. The only thing that stuck out to me as being a little off was that catfight in the beginning, where Megumi refused to back down, and why it took as long as it did for Soma & Ryo to break it up. That said, I can easily let it go as artistic license/suspension of disbelief.
Looking forward to reading more!
Great Chapter! It totally had all the feels, and I was glad Soma wasn't written to be too dense towards her at this long - awaited reunion. Good to see he replied honestly how he treasured his memories of that day with her and seemingly was able to return her feelings for him. The only thing that stuck out to me as being a little off was that catfight in the beginning, where Megumi refused to back down, and why it took as long as it did for Soma & Ryo to break it up. That said, I can easily let it go as artistic license/suspension of disbelief.
Looking forward to reading more!
9/12/2020 c1 Crimsonfiend76
Wow! Just came across your fanfic and after finishing the first 2 chapters, I can't wait to read the rest! Alice is my favorite, and I love the rivalry between her and Erina over Soma. As unlikely as it is, I always liked that pairing over all the others. Thanks for sharing!
Wow! Just came across your fanfic and after finishing the first 2 chapters, I can't wait to read the rest! Alice is my favorite, and I love the rivalry between her and Erina over Soma. As unlikely as it is, I always liked that pairing over all the others. Thanks for sharing!
9/10/2020 c10 
31AmericanTheoristBros
What is Soma, Shirou Emiya? He's literally Shirou in this story. Actually, he's pretty similar to Shirou in the original show, so scratch that.
31AmericanTheoristBrosWhat is Soma, Shirou Emiya? He's literally Shirou in this story. Actually, he's pretty similar to Shirou in the original show, so scratch that.
9/8/2020 c11 1Nakashi Blezmer
this is soooo fucking good its indescribable. please continue this fic its to good not to
1Nakashi Blezmerthis is soooo fucking good its indescribable. please continue this fic its to good not to
8/28/2020 c11 rocksne
next
next
7/7/2020 c11 Guest
Hopefully we get another update but unlikely however gotta try to be positive.
Hopefully we get another update but unlikely however gotta try to be positive.
7/7/2020 c5 Nappy k
My only problem with this chapter is that your still oversexualizing Soma I was able to kind of ignore it in the last couple chapter but now it's really starting to get annoying imo.
My only problem with this chapter is that your still oversexualizing Soma I was able to kind of ignore it in the last couple chapter but now it's really starting to get annoying imo.
7/5/2020 c4 Nappy k
I'm still really liking this fic I got one problem with this chapter though and it's kinda nit picky so take it with a grain of salt if you ever read this (which you probably won't.)
I find it incredibly unbelievable that neither of them remembers Soma I mean I guess for Alice i can kinda let it slide cause she's half asleep when they meet up but for Erina there's no excuse like that that you could make hell if nothing else that scar she gave should of been a dead giveaway.
I mean I get that they both only spent one day with his but that one day was apparently incredibly important to both Erina and Alice and your gonna tell me neither of them recognize him I'm sorry but that's a bit of a stretch at least imo.
I'm still really liking this fic I got one problem with this chapter though and it's kinda nit picky so take it with a grain of salt if you ever read this (which you probably won't.)
I find it incredibly unbelievable that neither of them remembers Soma I mean I guess for Alice i can kinda let it slide cause she's half asleep when they meet up but for Erina there's no excuse like that that you could make hell if nothing else that scar she gave should of been a dead giveaway.
I mean I get that they both only spent one day with his but that one day was apparently incredibly important to both Erina and Alice and your gonna tell me neither of them recognize him I'm sorry but that's a bit of a stretch at least imo.
7/3/2020 c3 Nappy k
I really enjoyed this chapter a bit of a critique though (and for the record I'm kinda new to this site so if this is because of some stupid censors this site has ignore me but) for the lemon scene I think I know what you mean when you say "juice box" but I don't really understand why you don't just say vagina or pussy since I'm relatively sure that's what your talking about it just takes me out of the moment when I'm reading lemon stuff in fanfics and writers use weird terminology to describe the character private parts Idk just my opinion.
I really enjoyed this chapter a bit of a critique though (and for the record I'm kinda new to this site so if this is because of some stupid censors this site has ignore me but) for the lemon scene I think I know what you mean when you say "juice box" but I don't really understand why you don't just say vagina or pussy since I'm relatively sure that's what your talking about it just takes me out of the moment when I'm reading lemon stuff in fanfics and writers use weird terminology to describe the character private parts Idk just my opinion.
7/2/2020 c2 Nappy k
I ship Soma more with Erina in the canon story but in this (so far at least) I ship him with Alice moreso Idk why exactly I just read the part of chapter 1 where they meet and spend the day together and my heart melts from the cuteness overload I get when reading it.
I ship Soma more with Erina in the canon story but in this (so far at least) I ship him with Alice moreso Idk why exactly I just read the part of chapter 1 where they meet and spend the day together and my heart melts from the cuteness overload I get when reading it.
5/31/2020 c11 AlphaHeroX
How come there havent been any more chapters for 3 years?
How come there havent been any more chapters for 3 years?
5/31/2020 c10 AlphaHeroX
Noooooo, don't ruin their relationship Erina!
Noooooo, don't ruin their relationship Erina!