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3/28/2017 c20 Jadefire2013
O.O THAT is a HUGE Cliff Hanger! YY I am sorry about not everybody reading your stories, however I really like 'em. Please continue doing your best! I shall be a cheerleader for you! (Minus any short skirts or pink... yuck!)
2/13/2017 c1 Yellingwalrus
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Here, Scarlett can have some cookies! 3
I really like yer story so far, it's funny,
But it kinda seems like Scarlett is an Ash clone, getting a Pikachu and all.
Hopefully that changes!
Otherwise this is a great story!
1/15/2017 c20 FishingCat123
I wonder who's talking in that last sentence... is it a new character? An OC perhaps?
When will the next chapter be up?
5/11/2016 c16 Miraculous
I have questions:
Scarlett, what's your favorite anime?
Gary, have you ever watched Ladybug PV?
Alex and Finn, if you were a Hetalia country, who would you be and why? (Sorry if you don't watch Hetalia)

Anyways, I really like your stories!
2/26/2016 c11 looms

2/19/2016 c9 you know who i a
i can't send it sorry
2/19/2016 c10 you know who i a
thank you

ill send you what i look like in shinnoh

dont change what i look like
2/8/2016 c10 you know me
use snerit.
1/17/2016 c6 2xXxCrimsonxMoonxXx
Remember Author chan, this is Gary Oak we're talking about, Gary Motherfucking Oak. He can do whatever the hell he feels like doing whenever he wants, even fly around on a two pound pigeon for miles... as for Scarlett though...
1/10/2016 c1 156Farla
Semicolons should only ever be used when connecting two complete sentences and even then almost never.

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor.

["Hi. Where's the Professor?" Scarlett questioned. ]

"Questioned" isn't a synonym for "asked", it's closer to a synonym for "interrogated at length".

[Scarlett followed the professor. As they entered the other room, they were both stunned to see two people already inside: a man, a woman and their Pokemon, or presumably their Pokemon - a sinister looking Meowth.
A/N: Guess who they are!?]

When the only thing that actually happens in your first chapter is the final line, your first chapter was a waste of your readers' time and your own. Start where the story starts.
1/9/2016 c1 13kintsugii
Hey, you posted this story twice, so I'd take one down.

This story is pretty short, but it's grammatically solid. Quick thing with dialogue:
["I'm right here" said the professor]
You need a comma here to connect these two things. You normally punctuate things correctly, so idk if this is a typo or not, but it should be:
["I'm right here," said the professor]
And this isn't strictly a grammar thing, but the word "questioned" is almost exclusively used for, like, backroom interrogations. I'd just stick with "asked."

Overall, uh, there's not much here to make things different from the gazillion other original trainer fics on this site. A lot of this stems from the fact that this chapter is suuuuper short, so it's only got space for two or three cliches and not much else. Um. I'd work on putting in more details and fleshing out your characters more at this stage.

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