for Ode to Nyssa al ghul, by Oliver Queen9/11/2017 c1 
2k+Hawki
-“The moment I saw you wonded.”
Should be “wounded.”
-“…you firt called me…”
Should be “first.”
-This aside, the poem is…interesting. I’m no expert, but it appears to be two forms combined into one piece. Towards the end there’s more of a conventional rhyming structure, whereas at the start, it’s more based on simple sentences. As for the content, it’s okay. This is based on an AU, so I have to take it that there is precedent for this, as from what I’ve seen of Arrow (the first three seasons), Ollie and Nyssa didn’t seem to be on the best of terms. But, decent job.
2k+Hawki-“The moment I saw you wonded.”
Should be “wounded.”
-“…you firt called me…”
Should be “first.”
-This aside, the poem is…interesting. I’m no expert, but it appears to be two forms combined into one piece. Towards the end there’s more of a conventional rhyming structure, whereas at the start, it’s more based on simple sentences. As for the content, it’s okay. This is based on an AU, so I have to take it that there is precedent for this, as from what I’ve seen of Arrow (the first three seasons), Ollie and Nyssa didn’t seem to be on the best of terms. But, decent job.