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6/3/2018 c1 Guest
It's good
8/2/2017 c1 2Nazareth Crusader
Despite some stiff dialogue, awkward wording and grammatical errors, this was interesting. It's a shame you ended up not continuing it.
10/10/2016 c1 Guest
Are you going to make more chapters? Also, the O.C. - Momonga ship on top of the usual Overlord harem sounds like a fun path to explore.
6/29/2016 c1 aleguille
cool start
5/22/2016 c1 23SkyRig
Aw, dammit! I thought there was a second chapter! This is getting good! UPDATE!
5/3/2016 c1 4PervySageChuck
Very interesting story. I like it!

Now, for a proofreader's advice for future chapters...

Make sure that you use articles like "the", "a" or "an" when they are needed. I noticed a large number of sentences that were missing a needed article at the beginning.
Example: The very first sentence should have started out as "A pink petal..." instead of just "Pink petal..." There were a few other types of grammatical errors, but this type of grammatical error was the most often repeated error I saw.

I hope that you are not offended by my tendency to nitpick at things like spelling, punctuation or grammar... I find it very difficult NOT to kibitz at times.

Anyway, I sincerely hope that you continue this story.
3/25/2016 c1 20JackFrost14
Interesting. Keep it up! :)
3/6/2016 c1 5FleksAndru
Really liking the story :3
Looking forward to the next chapter.
2/24/2016 c1 T-B-R
Always love a new Overlord story, with a Kyuubi no kitsune along for the ride, this is going to be great!
2/9/2016 c1 Guest
Please update soon ! I can't wait :)
2/5/2016 c1 Shirosaki Kizuro
I could really imagine how Love-Doll scream freaking out the whole Nazarick resident and raising all the Security level to the Max.
"What is the Matter Love-Doll-sama!?"
"I got tails!"
"(0_0)"
Foll, and Fav. Because I'm an Overlord pervert
2/2/2016 c1 wasp463
Well this has potential I can't wait to see how it goes.
2/1/2016 c1 4taovkool
Alright, you got me interested so far. Watched.
1/31/2016 c1 Vega-Sakusa
Please tell me love-doll was a Guy in real life, because that would be too funny and makes you think what would have happened to other players who were also cross gendered in game lol
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