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5/2/2016 c3 ethan.lukkar
Magnificent chapter can't wait for more please update soon.
5/2/2016 c3 Dragonslayer337
I am enjoying the story. Kinda slow right now hope it picks up soon. I do think it is better then last chapter. So how are Ruby and Weiss are going to get there semblance? I think it will be interesting on how they all will react... Don't you? Are they going to be lone wolves because of their abilities? Questions we all have them
5/2/2016 c3 13XT3100
Its nice to see more of this. Also that Spider joke was a RvB Reference wasn't it?
3/7/2016 c2 ethan.lukkar
Magnificent chapter can't wait for more please update soon.
3/1/2016 c1 Warwolf82
You catch my attention now, and put one hell of a plot, da fuck is this floating eyeball? A Monitor?
2/29/2016 c1 7A Waifuless Weeb
Well, the grammar is definitely one of the parts I would advise you work on as I told you earlier. Working on it would be most optimal. Another thing, now that I do read the final results, I gotta say this is all pretty hard to follow. I think you tried to cram a lot of information in this chapter that you didn't necessarily have to go out of your well to tell yet. As it stands I feel like you jump between too many characters and don't really give them enough time to develop making every story within the fiction to be considerably harder to follow. Again though, that's just the way I see it.
2/29/2016 c2 21edboy4926
I will be honest, this chapter is way too confusing in terms of what is happening and the grammar makes it more difficult.
2/22/2016 c1 29Fallen Shadow69
interesting concept. your grammar is improving, if you plan to use and sort of AI i would stick to halo's theme of normal names or RvB's theme of Greek letters. but good thus far
2/9/2016 c1 114Gracekim20
That's really cool;)
2/5/2016 c1 13XT3100
I highly like this idea. So now. I guess but Ruby and Weiss will be partners as Spartans.
2/3/2016 c1 ethan.lukkar
Magnificent chapter can't wait for more please update soon.
2/2/2016 c1 2Evinco
It's hard to think of Ruby as a emotionless killing machine that the Spartan II soldiers are trained to be. It would be good to see the character development of Ruby and her effect on the rest of the Spartans.
2/2/2016 c1 21edboy4926
Interesting intro
Some small grammar errors
Um just to clarify, when will Ruby and Weiss return to Remmant?

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